1 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2024 06:08 am Title: Visibility
This is FANTASTIC!
1 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2020 02:53 pm Title: Visibility
One of my favorite post-Beach Games AUs.
1 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2020 05:01 pm Title: Visibility
This is INCREDIBLE!!!!
1 [Report This]Date: February 06, 2019 07:13 am Title: Visibility
Aww poor Toby! But I love your Pam, and I really wish all Jims reacted the way yours does to her declaration.
1 [Report This]Date: August 03, 2018 06:33 pm Title: Visibility
Love it! You write them really well, I love the balance of bravery and vulnerability. Poor Toby. He never had a chance next to Jim...although I kinda doubt he would have been good for Pam, even if they had pursued that angle. ANYWAY, this is sweet and a pleasure to read
Date: July 03, 2018 01:59 pm Title: Visibility
This is a great story! Well written and realistic. Loved the heat between them!
10 [Report This]Date: February 08, 2011 03:14 pm Title: Visibility
This story is awesome. I kept debating if I wanted to keep reading because I really thought it was headed towards a Pam/Toby connection and nothing against Toby but I am hardcore Jim/Pam and even if noy, to me Toby is just WRONG for Pam! Anyhow, SO glad I kept going because this was a Beach Day spin I haven't seen and I just loved it! Thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks :) This is my favorite story that I've written here. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for letting me know!
Date: July 19, 2009 09:20 am Title: Visibility
Wow. Loved, loved, loved this! Thank you.
Author's Response: Thanks, Ninjam! Glad you liked it. I'm proud of this one. :)
Date: March 12, 2009 03:07 pm Title: Visibility
Wonderful story! You nailed the characters. You descriptions were fabulous. I could picture everything, perfectly. I really loved everything about it. Thanks so much for writing and sharing!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate that you thought the characterizations were good, that's important to me. :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2009 02:36 pm Title: Visibility
Oh, wow. Just... wow. This is great. Loved this one. The emotion you got in, and the way you chronicled the day... and then the night... excellent. Very hot, too. Looooved that part, naturally. Great, great job.
Author's Response: Thanks JamJunkie! I really enjoyed writing this. Glad you liked it. :)
Date: March 05, 2009 06:30 am Title: Visibility
Wow, I almost missed this (been out of town), I'm glad it was recommended over on the forum. There's so much to like about this story, but I can't mention everything so I'll pick three things.
1)Jim - makes something out of nothing. I loved all of her comments about people, but that was perfect.
2) Jim's reactions to Pam when he comes to her apartment and is so scared to try again. Wonderful description of Jim's emotions playing out in his body language. I could see him so clearly, and it was so utterly believeable. It wouldn't have been easy for him.
3) The conversation after Jim asks why she didn't call felt very real.
Nicely done.
Author's Response: Thank you, jazzfan. My apologies for responding to this so many...months... late. I liked that line about Jim in her notebook, too. That was the one that made me think of doing all of them, actually. I'm glad you liked this. It's definitely my favorite thing I've written here. :)
Date: March 04, 2009 11:28 am Title: Visibility
Grr...I just wrote a whole review and in my hurry to add this to my favorites, I lost it. Deep breath - let's try again.
This was fantastic, Callisto. Such a refreshing revamp of well-worn territory that I'm pretty sure this is my favorite Beach Day 2.0 story ever. Seeing the day through Pam's eyes was almost heartbreaking, but the joy at seeing them so nevous, then so sure at the end was just as great. And what a perfect note to end it on.
Loved it. Just loved it.
Author's Response: LC, I'm so sorry I never responded to your review. I am so glad you liked my take on this. Pam broke my heart in this episode, but she became such a new and brave version of herself, it was a joy to write. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for letting me know. :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 03, 2009 01:03 pm Title: Visibility
Just amazing. You have Pam so in character (If that makese sense). This is totally believable
I've always found it weird how Jim took a week after BG to come back to Karen, I think this makes much more sense :)
Author's Response: Me too. That it took him a week, I mean. I blame that on the need for the season finale to be the pivotal moment. Glad you liked it, Noodles! Thanks for reviewing. :)rn
7 [Report This]Date: March 03, 2009 01:45 am Title: Visibility
I really enjoyed this! As well as all of the JAM goodness, I also enjoyed the Toby side-story. Nice insight into his solitary character too. But most of all, I enjoyed the JAMmy goodness!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it. Once upon a time, I really loved Toby. Such a sad character. But yeah, it's all about the Jam. :)
Date: March 02, 2009 04:08 pm Title: Visibility
Wow! What an amazing story. It was so emotional, so steamy and so happy at the same time. I love how you handled the Karen situation. Your twist on the Beach Day confession was so creative and clever.
Author's Response: Thanks Alamos! I'm happy my one-line dismissal of Karen seems to have gone over so well...though, of course, she had to be sacrificed. Like Toby. I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for the review. :)
6 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2009 03:51 pm Title: Visibility
What a great story! I will definitely be reading this one over and over. Jim's behavior after BG has always confused me and I liked that in your story he couldn't wait.
And that was awesome, perfectly written smut.
Author's Response: Thanks SkeetShruting! I appreciate that. And it never made any sense to me that he needed a whole week to get his head together--except that it made for such an awesome season finale, of course. Thanks for the compliment on the smut. I may be braver about posting such stuff in the future. :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2009 01:04 pm Title: Visibility
Callisto, this is just gorgeous! You are now officially a member of my list of elite MTT writers … Talkative, wendolf, GodInThisChilis, and Stablergirl! I love the imagery, how you seamlessly weave dialogue from the show into the story (especially "It's a date" and "I'm sorry, what were you saying?), how your Jim smolders from afar. As others have mentioned, I love how you leave Pam a wee bit imperfect as she uses Toby to get through the day but still doesn't recognize his feelings for her.
The conversation between Jim and Pam after he arrives at her door is a masterpiece of tension, slowly unwinding.
Gorgeous, gorgeous.
Kudos, too, to Talkative, for persuading you to finish this story
Author's Response: Hi VB! Glad to see I've made it into your 'best of' list. :) I loved the idea for this story but it was definitely Talkative who talked (hee) me through the process of reworking it. And oh, poor Toby. I used to always feel sorry for him before they turned him into skeevy perv guy. Such a sad man. Thank goodness our Pam didn't have to settle for that kind of existence. Anyway, thanks, as always, for the review! Good to hear from you. Have fun in Africa--and don't forget about CC! :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2009 08:59 am Title: Visibility
Gorgeous. Callisto, you constantly amaze. Not to discount your other lovely work, but this really is your best yet. Your characterizations are perfect. You fit Toby into Beach Day seemlessly, as if he were somehow there all along. Pam's thought processes are heartbreaking and beautiful and, finally, triumphant. The scenes in the office with Pam watching Karen and Jim bring to mind her discussion with Michael during LC when she admits she thought of quitting. Thanks for sharing this. I'm sure I'll be reading it again and again.
Author's Response: Thanks Nan. I think this is my best effort so far, also--so thank you for that! It's too bad they didn't use Toby for this episode; it could've been very compelling to see him and Pam together as outcasts all day. I'm glad you enjoyed this, and that warms my little heart to think you'll be reading it over and over. :) Thanks!!
Date: March 02, 2009 08:54 am Title: Visibility
I really enjoy the seemless way you integrate the dialog and action of the episode with your story. Thank you for this lovely story.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Thanks for letting me know! :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2009 08:36 am Title: Visibility
Dear Callisto, you already know how I feel about this one, but, as I didn't get a chance to send you my final thoughts before you posted (stupid busy weekend), here's an abbreviated version, fit for public consumption -
I've said it before, but I'll say it again - your characterization here is just killer, particularly, amazingly, Toby. He stares at her for a long moment before his eyes light up and he laughs, a surprisingly free, happy kind of laugh she’s never heard from him before. “Seriously?”. Love it, love it, love it. It's marvelous that Toby sees exactly what's going on with Pam without commenting, while still holding on to his own feelings for her. And, of course, talking about Toby brings us to the end of the story, which, as I said in my email, cuts just like a particularly good episode of the show, reminding us that, even though Pam and Jim are in this happy bubble together, they aren't perfect.
And your Pam is just darling. I think you've captured that desperate, faltering attempt on her part to be assertive so well. I know I wrote it differently in Vocabulary, but I think it's all about the timing. I can absolutely believe that she would have been capable of forcing the two of them over that line on that particular night.
Your Jim is great, too. I kind of want to smack him for being such a coward, but at least he put himself in the right place at the right moment, having the good sense to take his opportunities when presented to him (much as he does a week later in the canon).
Finally, I am completely willing to take the blame/credit for smut that hot, sweet, and well-written. Saves me the trouble of having to write it myself.
Brava, Callisto. Just say the word when you're ready to go again, hon.
Author's Response: Talkative, my dear girl. So now I'm feeling very impatient and silly for not wanting to wait through the weekend--I'm dying to know how much more fluid the whole last part would've been if I'd waited for you. :) But, I'm happy you approve. And I'm very tickled that you are so in love with that one line from Toby. That's one of the first bits I came up with for this, as you know. I agree that slightly-aggressive-Pam is easier to imagine right after this episode when she's completely empowered and more or less at peace with how things have transpired, and that life will go on and she's done what she can--and I completely share your black feminist heart that she needed that year to figure herself out and find her own place and voice. You and Blanca gave me such great advice on that ending--poor, poor Toby. Oh, well. Sacrifices had to be made. I would've loved to see Jim being more proactive in the whole process, but it's hard not to sympathize with how shell-shocked and freaked out he must have been. Like you said--solve that problem with some angsty nerd-sex! :) (Oh--and I am definitely going to hold you to that last offer, by the way. :D)
10 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2009 08:17 am Title: Visibility
Oh, poor Toby. Really nicely done, very enjoyable alternate Beach Day.
Author's Response: Thanks! Poor Toby, indeed. Guy can't catch a break. Glad you liked it! :)
Date: March 01, 2009 06:11 pm Title: Visibility
I love your writing. This story was fantastic!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for letting me know. :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 01, 2009 04:21 pm Title: Visibility
This story was great! You really highlighted an aspect of Beach Games that might have been overlooked by many (or maybe not, what do I know?) which is how Pam's isolation was magnified by her assigned task for that day and how it led her to take that coal walk and to give that amazing speech. You totally got in her head and created this awesome story - do not mistake me, I LOVED the way you ended her evening!
Oh, and am I reading too much into it, or is it supposed to be a little ironic that while Pam is dealing with everyone being oblivious to her existence... she's oblivious to Toby's feelings?
Author's Response: You know, I did not mean to intentionally draw a parallel to Pam's own obliviousness, but it's a neat observation! Poor Pam, I felt so sorry for her that day. She deserved a better ending than they gave her. I'm glad you liked it Pamalamadingdong (nice handle, btw)! Thanks for letting me know. :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 01, 2009 04:20 pm Title: Visibility
This was absolutely amazing :) But I must admit I'm not surprised as all of your stories are amazing! The only teeny tiny nitpick I have is the redundant use of the words tight and tightness in the beginning. Otherwise everything was great :)
Author's Response: Thanks Lux, glad you liked it. You know, Blanca told me the same thing about 'tight' and I read through it so many times I guess I just stopped noticing it before I went back to fix that--but I'm glad you mentioned it, I made a couple adjustments. Repetitiveness is fun for no one. :) Thanks for the review! :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 01, 2009 02:53 pm Title: Visibility
Oh man, you made me miss these crazy kids. Wonderful!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Thanks for letting me know. :)