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Reviewer: Once Signed [Report This]
Date: January 11, 2021 11:58 am Title: Chapter 2

I'm so glad you wrote a baseball story! I'm from a baseball family; my brother, Mike, was the shortstop the Brewers held over Robin Yount's head when he wanted to go be a professional golfer. Mike never made it to the show, but it set him up for a successful life.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2009 09:48 am Title: Chapter 2

Not a particularly huge baseball fan, but I'm really enjoying this.  I'm intrigued to learn where you're going with it.

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2009 11:04 pm Title: Chapter 1

You know I'm already loving this and that I kind of feel like I'm cheating on Jim with his son...but oh well. ;-) This is great stuff. I love how I get a little bit of their backstory each time...I'm eager to fit all the puzzle pieces together. It's a pleasure being your beta!

Reviewer: Vampiric Blood Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2009 09:14 pm Title: Chapter 2

I'm really enjoying this.  I like the way you're cutting back & forth through time, building your backstory.  I'm not a baseball fan, but it wasn't hard to follow at all.  Looking forward to more.

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2009 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 2

Thank you for indulging me in the first section there.  I know. I'm like a freaking broken record. :)

The part with Jim and Pam is incredibly sweet and just delightful.

And as you well know - you'll get no complaints from me re: baseball.

Really lovely all around.

Reviewer: bright_lights_4 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2009 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 2

I really enjoy this story so far. Please continue. It's intriguing and different and I feel a real connection to all the characters (including the new ones you made up!)

Reviewer: Stablergirl Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 14, 2009 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 1

WHAT? Weddings, baseball, Pam swearing in front of hundreds of people???  THIS IS A DREAM.  Well-played b-loon, well played.  I loved this, written so well as always and so lovely and flowing and sentimental.  I can't wait to see where it goes next.  I particularly liked the descriptions of Seth on the mound, and of course Jim and Pam as mom and dad.  I will be anxiously awaiting in update. 

Reviewer: jazzfan Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12, 2009 03:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'm already caught up in the future family you've created here - very well written. Of course the fact that I have a son named Seth makes it even better. *grin* I'm interested in where this is going - the characters and characterizations are excellent. Awaiting the next installment eagerly.

Author's Response:

Thanks, jazzfan.  Nice that you have a Seth!  And, I'm glad to hear the characterization is working.

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12, 2009 08:18 am Title: Chapter 1

Eh.  It was OK...for a story with someone named 'Ranny' in it. :)

I've already told you what I think - but in all seriousness, glad to see you writing again and can't wait to see what you have in store next.

Yay you. :)



Author's Response: What, I guess a "Ranny" beat you up on the playground?  Or is it all names ending in -anny?  It's good to be writing again, and thanks as always for your help.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12, 2009 07:05 am Title: Chapter 1

I really enjoy your style of writing, brokenloon.  You're a great storyteller.  You've painted a very believable picture of life in the Halpert home.  Looking forward to seeing where you take this.

Author's Response: Thanks, Nan.  It's really flattering to be called a great storyteller.  It's fun to be telling one again.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 11, 2009 09:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'm so happy to see a new story from you!  I really liked this - the love still between Jim and Pam, the relationship with the kids, their son being a tall left-hander pitcher (especially since I'm a major fan of a tall left-handed pitcher from the Phillies) - I love all of it. I am intrigued to see where this is going.   My first thought was that Seth was very depressed. My second thought was that Seth is in love with a girl who is engaged to someone else. But Ill stop thinking and wait to see what you have in store for us!

Author's Response: Howdy, kaystar.  I won't give away Seth's problems yet.  I always wanted to be a pitcher, but I'm settling for writing about one.  Thanks for the review! 

Reviewer: IThinkWeBrokeHisBrain Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 11, 2009 09:14 pm Title: Chapter 1

Woohoo for Nebraska! Okay, I know that's not the point obviously, but I am currently going to grad school in Lincoln (and also got my Bachelor's here as well) and have spent many a wonderful day at Rosenblatt watching baseball. But now onto the review...

I'm very interested to see where this is all going to go. You're a wonderful writer and I like seeing the different families that people create for Jim and Pam. You're write them well and are so great with character development and description, I can't wait to read what's next!

Author's Response:

Go Huskers!  I think it's cool how the CWS has been in Omaha forever and it's a big event there and sort of part of the fabric of the place. Thanks for the kind words.

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: May 11, 2009 07:51 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is a great start my friend! I can not wait to see where you go with this.  Um...you know Beta's are supposed to know like every spoiler right? ;-)  It's a pleasure getting to read your work even slightly before anyone else. I can't wait to read more about this little family you've created. 

 



Author's Response: It's great having you on board, LoveFool.  I still remember when I first read Babytalk and just couldn't believe how awesome it was. 

Reviewer: Vampiric Blood Signed [Report This]
Date: May 11, 2009 07:02 pm Title: Chapter 1

First of all, I'm REALLY glad to see you posting a story again!

I like it!  I like Seth & Miranda.  I'm a sucker for strong mother/son relationships, whether they be Pam & her son or Jim & his mother, so I definitely appreciate Pam & Seth's closeness.

Looking forward to learning why Seth is so repressed.   (Were you planning to divulge?)  And, of course, I'm very interested to know what is troubling him



Author's Response: Thanks, VB!  My theory is that the kinda guys who don't open up to anyone still open up to their moms.  More Seth coming soon.

Reviewer: JHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: May 11, 2009 07:02 pm Title: Chapter 1

um AMAZING! love the way you're writing these kids... i'm really interested to know backstory, and also what the deal is w/ seth.. keep up the great work!!

Author's Response: Thanks, JHalpert.  We'll get to some backstory soon.

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