Date: July 31, 2009 03:47 pm Title: Truth or Dare
This is so sweet. I think it's in character from beginning to end. And I like the little details you chose to emphasize. LIke this:
His hand rests upon her small but growing belly. He has been doing this lately, most of the time without realizing it. She feels protected.
“I just loved you too much to ignore you all day, so I left you completely,” he finishes, delicately tucking a curl behind her ear.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Those are some of my favorite lines, too! I appreciate your comments! Thanks again!
Date: July 31, 2009 05:02 am Title: Condensation
Squeee! I'm glad you have the imagination to write this since we don't get to see it on the show. It's so ADORABLE!
Author's Response: I know! I wish they had a whole season or at least an episode of this fluffy stuff!! Thanks so much for the comment!
Date: July 31, 2009 12:02 am Title: Condensation
i hope you're not mad, but i found this chapter to be a little confusing, with how jim's thoughts kept going back and forth. i understand how that was essential to the plot, so i don't really understand why i'm confused. i guess i just am.
cute plot idea, though and i loved the ending. don't worry about the confusion, though. it's just me.
Author's Response: I'm sorry to hear you found it confusing but I'm glad you liked the ending anyway! Thanks for the comment!
Date: July 28, 2009 09:38 pm Title: Truth or Dare
Wow, that was great! It seemed so realistic, and the dialog/descriptions flowed effortlessly (or at least they seemed to be!) I know that sounds really cheesy, but that was all true. Great job - reading the second chapter, in 3, 2, 1...
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad to hear that it flows nicely! I appreciate your comment! Thanks!
Date: July 28, 2009 02:49 am Title: Toothbrushes
That was freaking adorable and I could totally imagine Jim still using the timer his Mommy gave him to brush his teeth lol. I love this little series, it's very cute and could very well happen:)
Author's Response: Thank you! I can imagine it too!! Thank you so, so much for the lovely comments!
Date: July 27, 2009 07:09 pm Title: Toothbrushes
No offense, but Pam kissing Jim when he's not done rinsing his mouth & the foam was kinda gross. But everything else after that was all kind of cute :o) And I agree...they do have more...er...important things to do. ::whisper:: Like each other :D Heee....
Author's Response: I kinda agree with you! I was trying to come up with something else, and playing around with different things, but I couldn't! Now that you say that though, I think I'm going to try again. Anyways, thanks for the comment!! :)
Date: July 22, 2009 03:02 pm Title: Truth or Dare
Squeee!!! I love fluff..in the morning at night... all day long... I LOVE FLUFF!! And I'm so happy you are including the fact that she is pregnant...yay! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I agree with you - fluff ALL DAY LONG!! The next chapter will be out later tonight so stay tuned!
Date: July 22, 2009 02:55 pm Title: Truth or Dare
This was so sweet. I loved this part:
“I love you too, Beesly. Why do you think I put up with this crazy stuff, like playing truth or dare in the middle of the night?”
“Because secretly, you like it.”
He strokes his fingers across her cheek and whispers, “Yeah, but mostly, I like you.”
Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! The next chapter will be out later tonight so stay tuned!
Date: July 22, 2009 08:23 am Title: Truth or Dare
Man that was fantastic. I love the honesty without too much angst. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! I love some angst too - I just had to put it in! The next chapter is going to be out tonight!
Date: July 22, 2009 12:27 am Title: Truth or Dare
Ohhhhhhh Haiiii that was freaking adorable and cute and made my teeth hurt from all the sugary goodness. I cannot wait for more like this - HINT!
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you! I'm so glad it made your teeth hurt, but sorry that they do! Hahahaha! Thank you so much, and there is more coming soon (Hint: probably tonight)!
Date: July 21, 2009 11:59 pm Title: Truth or Dare
Wow, Dwangie! You're just super inspired lately, aren't you? I'm glad you found time for some fluff. Them playing Truth or Dare, talking about past and future and just being so close to each other....so cute and sweet! Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Yes, I have been super inspired! And you've been super sweet to leave me such nice comments! Thank you very much!! A new addition to the chapter will probably come tonight!