Date: December 26, 2009 01:34 am Title: Scavenger Hunt
ow how cute! i never imagine he wanted to make ornaments. lol
what was the story you soposed to put this on thougt, im curious.
..and ones again thanks for the secret santa clip on jk.net. i hate that nbc doesnt let us, latinamercians, watch their videos. they are mean =(
Author's Response:
I the the original idea came from a Karen story I did.... obviously both ideas were reworked thoroughly.
Thanks for the review!
Date: December 26, 2009 12:54 am Title: Scavenger Hunt
Lol, this was really cute. I love the idea! I do have a little critique though. The third sentence, last work I think should be 'work' rather than 'worked'. Some of the sentences seemed a little abrupt like the American Idol one - I also would have loved to have seen this expanded a bit, but I'm not sure there's enough for a second chapter.
Sorry to sound so negative, I hate to critique so much when things are posted, but hey, I think we're supposed it give friendly comments in the reviews every once in a while. I guess they say it makes us better writers.
I loved Elaine and Pam's idea to call a friend, that was great!
Author's Response:
You know what, I read that sentence a thousand times after this comment, and couldn't figure out what you meant by worked/work. It took me searching for the phrase to find it. I guess I just kept reading what I wanted to read instead of what was actually written. And the AI comment, I tried as I might to expand it, even just a second sentence, but I never liked what I came up with.
Thanks for the review!
Date: December 25, 2009 09:15 pm Title: Scavenger Hunt
Cute stuff! But one question... the light bulb decorations aren't to be plugged into a lamp or anything, right? Wouldn't the heat melt the decoration? Just a thought... :)
Author's Response: That's why they were dead lightbulbs. Was actually based on an idea on a craft project I used when looking for stuff for the kids to do.