Date: March 14, 2010 08:14 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
Eeps! You had me worried about Pam at the end, but yay everything worked out just fine! I love how Jim was freaking out and Pam was completely oblivious to it. Never having given birth I wouldn't know from experience, but what you described sounded pretty realistic, and the final line of the chapter is just perfect. I hope you have a few more chapters of this story up your sleeve. :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much Deedldee, I tried to keep it "believable." I just have a short epilogue planned, but I keep getting distracted. I hope to start on it soon. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: March 07, 2010 11:37 am Title: Chapter 3 One More for My Baby (and One More for the Road)
I haven't read/written an Jam fic for a while but The Delivery lured me back to this wonderful site and this is one of the first fics I came across. WOW. You managed a perfect balance between too much detail and too little, making it real enough that I spent the entire last chapter holding my breath, at least that's what it feels like.
Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much shootingstars. I'm glad you're back at MTT, and wasn't that episode great? I really appreciate the read and review! (please breathe now)
Date: March 02, 2010 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
Great job! I think you did a great job with Jim -- focusing on the details that would make him squeamish, and the ones that would make his heart just about burst. Jim would be so overwhelmed in this situation; you did a great job highlighting what he would be picking out. His response to Dr. Bressman's "How does she look?" was perfect! Great balance here. Glad you're giving us an epilogue for this one. And, god, I love that damn sock hat.
Author's Response: Thanks, yanana, for your comments. I wasn't at all sure about this chapter (am still not, I guess). Apart from the cliche problem, which I accepted from the beginning, I had trouble with how to show labor being tiresome without boring the crap out of the reader. I'm glad you thought it worked okay. I'm kind of attached to the sock hat as well. Ah well, the "real thing" is only a day away. I appreciate your taking the time to review!
Date: March 02, 2010 10:42 am Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
That was intense! You do a good job of conveying the details without being gory, which I think would be a challenge. I particularly like how detached Pam is from Jim's panic- I would imagine that actually made it worse for him, because they are normally so in sync. Great job! Again!
Author's Response: Thanks, nqllisi! I didn't want to make it too yucky, but on the other hand, if I didn't include details it wouldn't have been Jim's experience. Appreciate your read and review!
Date: March 02, 2010 09:26 am Title: Chapter 1 Let it Snow
jazzfan....incredible! Talk about feeling anxious....I was as nervous as Jim. This was just so well done. I'm looking forward to the epilogue.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your comments, Mr. Bill, glad you liked it.
Date: March 02, 2010 12:10 am Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
Oh Jazz...this was SO GOOD! So many moments were just masterful here...first of all - first time I've ever read about the placenta. I learned so much. ;-) This fic ought to be part of TLC's line up! On a serious note though, when Pam began bleeding and Jim started to panic...I'm telling you my heart was racing. You SUCKED ME IN totally to the drama of that moment.
Then, when he had that single moment when he realized everything was ok and started to cry. OMG, I misted up too! It was instantaneous.
Great, great job. I'm so happy you're doing an epilogue!
Author's Response: Thanks LoveFool. I felt like the beginning to this was a bit slow and talky, but I didn't know how to set the whole thing up without showing how long and tiresome things were getting first. Does that make any sense? Anyhow, I'm glad you got sucked in and "misted." *grin* About the placenta. I was a bit concerned I'd gross people out, but then again, it's part of the process and Jim would have to deal with it. The epilogue may be somewhat anticlimatic, but I want to tie the whole thing up for them. Thanks again for your kind words.
Date: March 01, 2010 11:17 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
This was PERFECT. I literally squeed when I saw you had updated lol. the descriptions were amazing and aw, I felt strangely proud of Jim and Pam.
Is it Thursday yet?
Author's Response: You think it's weird that you feel proud of Jim and Pam - I did too. Now that's weird. *snort* Thanks so much for the review Hannah_Halpert. Two more days. Two more days.
Date: March 01, 2010 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
oh, one technical (ie: medical) thing... i have never seen a whitish placenta. they're more dark red. but other than that, the other medical stuff was spot-on! love it... i'm glad you're not the only one who went kind of into detail with a birth story... i did too. with both of mine.
Author's Response: Thanks, you are 100 percent right, Flonkerton Champ, I fixed it. I kind of got carried away with this, but once I started, I couldn't seem to pare it down. Thanks for your thoughts!
Date: March 01, 2010 09:06 pm Title: Chapter 1 Let it Snow
Wow! I'm breathless! What an amazing tale. Not only did you have Jim holding a newborn (my favourite daydream), but Jim delivering the baby! *swoon*
Seriously, though, you did a great job of creating suspense and telling the story though Jim's eyes. I loved his moments of doubt and the way he pulled himself together.
I can't wait for the epilogue!
Author's Response: Thanks, Beeswax. The epilogue may be pretty anticlimatic, but I feel like I should say "what happened." Soon we'll know the real story though, yes? I can't wait to see the "real" version of Jim holding baby Halpert. Three more days. Argh.
Date: March 01, 2010 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
I'm smiling the whole way through this, trying to hurry and read to see what happens next, then (I have my hands curled together by my mouth with excitement) I feel wetness on my hands. I swear, I didn't know I was crying! I cry at anything and everything, but usually you get a lump in your throat and you wipe your eyes, sniff, etc. but I was so wrapped up in the excitement, I just didn't realize tears were down my face.
I am SO happy you've decided to write an epilogue, cause as perfect in every way as this is, I just need more!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks Andastainonmyshirt. I'm glad it came across as exciting. (I'm pretty sure Jim could have used a little less excitement, though) I hope to add a short epilogue just for fun. I appreciate your taking time to read and review.
Date: March 01, 2010 05:33 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
oh my god!!! epilogue yeii!!!
girl you got me all nevious here, when i read the start of the bleeding..wow. i just could stop reading...im goint to be late for french class, and thats on you.
but who cares this story was amazing!!!
it had me in awe all the time.
i hope i'll see a new story soon, your such a good writer, with such good stories to tell. congrats!
and au revoir!!
Author's Response: Sorry I contributed to the deliquency of a student, but I'm glad you enjoyed the story, dmbd. I would say something witty in French, but alas, I know nothing. Thanks for the encouragement though, very sweet of you. Now get to class... /mom
Date: March 01, 2010 05:28 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
Oh my God, that was absolutely incredibly! WOWY WOWY WOW WOW WOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWW!
Do you understand how absolutely perfect and amazing I think this is? Think of the most beautiful, perfect thing ever, and this is it for me. (I know, I need a life, outside of school, haha) Incredible job and I can't wait for that epilogue, maybe I'll be more articulate then...
Author's Response: Gosh, pamelamorganhalpert, thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was concerned this had too much back and forth dialogue to really work, but I couldn't figure out how to eliminate much of it. Nice to know it worked for you.
Date: March 01, 2010 05:11 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
This was So Great - even the squemish parts. :) I was so proud of both of them - and was really nervous when the blood started coming - Looking forward to your wrap up - and Thursday too, of course!
Author's Response: Kinda silly of me, but I was proud of them, too. I can't wait until Thursday - writing this has kept me out of the spoilers. Yay! Thanks for the read and review, kam.
Date: March 01, 2010 04:50 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
YAY! i really really enjoyed this.... i'm one of those people who find birth fascinating. if i wasn't such a horrible student, i'd want to be a midwife.
Author's Response: Thanks FlonkertonChamp. Birth is amazing, I agree. It was fun to write about it.
Date: March 01, 2010 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 4 Birth Control
WOW! You really pulled me in with your writing - I could feel what Jim and Pam were feeling. GREAT JOB Jazz
Author's Response: Aw, that made my evening. It's always gratifying when what you're trying to do works for somebody. Thanks, jinx.
Date: March 01, 2010 04:29 pm Title: Chapter 1 Let it Snow
jazzy, I'm ashamed to admit that I am a squeamish person (saw the opening part of the movie "Adaptation" and almost threw up) so I'm going to skip this latest chapter based on your notes. I prefer to think that a stork dropped off Baby Tuna :D
Just wanted to let you know...just once ;o) *groan* Sorry, not a good time for that quote.
Author's Response: Yes, bkwrm, I can confirm for you that a stork did indeed drop off Baby Halpert. Snow can't stop those storks. Thanks!
Date: February 26, 2010 10:00 am Title: Chapter 3 One More for My Baby (and One More for the Road)
Wow. I just got totally sucked into this, so much so that I didn't review the individual chapters (sorry for that). Having just lived through the snowpacalypse, I had no trouble imagining the scene whatsoever (and snow IS heavy), but you really showed skill in building the tension and panic and urgency of the situation. I look forward to the rest!
Oh, and one last comment. You describe how Pam disappears into herself during her contractions- that was just beautifully pu. I remember feeling that way while I was in labor. Excellent detail.
Author's Response: Sorry I am late in responding to this - the email response thingy doesn't work anymore. I'm so glad you enjoyed this, and especially that you found Pam's reaction to her contractions believable. Thanks for your comments about the tension - I'm trying to work on improving pacing in my stuff, so it was fun to hear I might have gotten it right. I appreciate your reading and taking the time to review, nqllisi. (BTW, I love your stories - read them all - please write more)
Date: February 25, 2010 10:12 am Title: Chapter 3 One More for My Baby (and One More for the Road)
I'm literally on the edge of my seat reading this! I love how Jim's being outwardly strong in front of her and internally he's freaking out. And, I really liked how he called her Beesly in this chapter, it was fitting. I've never had a baby before, but from the sounds of it, it sounds very realistic. Can't wait for the next chapter! And congrats on your ribbon! Well deserved. :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much Deedldee, I'm glad you're enjoying the anticipation. That Beesly is for one of my betas, because it always makes her happy, too. I'm trying to stick as closely to reality as possible, since the whole idea is so "unlikely." That said, there is a snowstorm in Scranton at this very moment. Good timing, yes? I was really surprised about the ribbon. I'd like to thank my mom and dad, the mailman, my third grade teacher, my next door neighbor... *snort* Thanks for taking the time to review.
Date: February 22, 2010 06:30 pm Title: Chapter 1 Let it Snow
Just like Pam said, their timing always sucks, LOL. Love this story. Of course, in the end, they're both going to do just fine, despite the inexperience on both their parts. And imagine how close they will feel, knowing they went through this humbling and powerful experience together.
Yes, everyone feels badly for poor nervous Jim, but damn, I remember delivering two kids without an epidural and it was no.fun.at.all. I used to describe labor as "one long ass sucky day" to people. I feel for Pam. Get ready Jim, she's gonna lose it at the end, especially with the circumstances she's delivering under.
I love the little hat for Baby Tuna, awwww. :)
Author's Response: Thanks EH, I'm hoping I can capture that closeness later in the story. Yup, Pam is going to have her moments in the upcoming chapter - can't say that I blame her. I had epidurals with both my boys but the second time it wore off and it was too late to give me more meds. Entirely different experience, it was. You did it twice? Glad you liked the BabyTunaTopper, and I really appreciate your comments.
Date: February 22, 2010 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 3 One More for My Baby (and One More for the Road)
let me informe u.. u owe me a manicure..my nails are a mess because of this. eyes also full with tears.
yearning for the update.
Author's Response: Sorry about the nails, dmbd. Thanks for the review. I'll get writing on the conclusion.
Date: February 21, 2010 09:11 pm Title: Chapter 3 One More for My Baby (and One More for the Road)
Jazzy, this is getting SO good! It was wonderful before, but now it's like comeoncomeoncomeon!! You feel his panic and feel their excitement peeking through the fear. Can't wait for the next chapter!
(P.S. I'm so sorry I didn't review the last chapter. I thought I did, but it's not there. Chapter two was amazing as well!)
Author's Response: Thanks Andastainonmyshirt. I'm glad that you feel the story is building, that's kind of what I was hoping for. I appreciate your kind encouragement.
Date: February 21, 2010 08:58 pm Title: Chapter 3 One More for My Baby (and One More for the Road)
“We can have this baby, Beesly, you and me.”
Yeah, kill me, why don't you?! I'm loving this fic. For all the -- really scary details of the reality of childbirth -- there's such sweet feeling here. That little sock hat is like a perfect metaphor. It's make-shift, it's comfy, and it's a bit alarming. And comforting, too, like a promise that everything will be alright.
Thank you for this! And please, don't leave us hanging for long. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, I thought Jim needed something positive to focus on to get him through this, and a hat might do the trick. I'll try to get this next one out - if only my family would stop demanding to be fed...*snort* Thanks a bunch, Peanut.
Date: February 21, 2010 07:11 pm Title: Chapter 3 One More for My Baby (and One More for the Road)
I agree about you writing more! This chapter is great and so sweet especially when Jim holding up a sock and says our son's first hat. It's making me wonder what is going to happen next once Jim delivers the baby.
Author's Response: You'll find out in the next chapter, adampascalfan12. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: February 21, 2010 05:30 pm Title: Chapter 1 Let it Snow
As someone who is very spoiler free, I've had no intention of reading any baby related fics as of late. But since you're spoiler free too, I knew I could read this without fear. And oh am I glad I did. This is lovely, Jazzfan, and I love that I could feel the emotions of the moment. Looking quite forward to the wrap up here. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. :)
Author's Response: Shucks, thanks WIL. Yeah, this definitely won't be what happens on the show so I think you're safe. I appreciate your taking the time to read and review my little story.