Date: April 04, 2010 09:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Reviewing again, because I'm worried my review sounded harsh, and I hope you didn't think I was saying your story wasn't any good, it was and I loved it. I just saw you were worried about posting this, which is why I recommended sending it out to a few beta instead of just the one :)
Keep it up! xx
Author's Response: No, it wasn't harsh. It's something that I have to do in order to improve my writing. So you're okay! =)
PS. I'm glad you liked it, from now on I will use more betas! Thanks for recommending it.
Date: April 04, 2010 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very cute. My only advice to you is, I'd send it to a couple of betas first, especially if you're not 100% happy with something. You said "you got her?" quite a few times, and it's always good to have another set of eyes see this and point it out, and suggest different ways to say things :)
Love Daddy and Cecelia :)
Author's Response: Thank you, I will try it next time with a couple betas, before I couldn't reach out to others betas because they were busy, which I can understand that. And I'm trying my hardest to get my grammar right because I do tend to skip or can't hear small words due to my hearing loss. So, bear with me. But again, I do love having those imaginations going through my head and writing it down on the paper so I can share it to all of you. For this story, I'm trying to make a comeback, writing more of Jim and Pam.
Date: April 04, 2010 07:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
very cute. nice job! i think i caught one small mistake where jim was holding cecelia by their bed and you had him instead of her. you can easily edit that to her. just wanted you to know. great job, though!
Date: April 04, 2010 05:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aww this is really cute. I like the part where Jim is showing Cecelia around the house. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that you liked it! =)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that you liked it! =)
Date: April 04, 2010 06:50 am Title: Chapter 1
Hey, you posted it! Do you feel better about it? I know you were still a bit uncertain. Congratz of the fic and... keep on writtin'
Author's Response: I was a little nervous, I haven't written for quite a while. But I do feel better after doing some revising and using your suggestions to make it more story a bit more clearer. Thank you so much for helping me! I really appreciate it! =)
Date: April 03, 2010 10:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
nice and simple, i like it. i thing though...babies dont have tears until like they are like 6 months old.
Author's Response: I really didn't know that until you said it, and I never had babies. So, I'm not there yet! Thank you for your suggestion, I changed it a bit so you get the part a bit clearer. Please let me know anything else!!