Date: April 14, 2010 07:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
there is no other word for it: gorgeous. absolutely gorgeous.
10 [Report This]Date: April 14, 2010 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was so powerful in such few words. Very angsty but not over the top. I'm all teary eyed. Really awesome writing you did here.
10 [Report This]Date: April 14, 2010 05:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
this is so perfectly written, depressing - yet showing small signs of courage that she actually called him in the end. great job with this, you conveyed so much in such a small anecdotal piece.
Date: April 14, 2010 04:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
How ironic that Pam's newfound independence was the thing keeping her from saying what she wanted to. Nicely done. Seconding NEJ's love of the phrase - "drowsy voice full of gravel." Rowl.
Date: April 14, 2010 02:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
his drowsy voice full of gravel.
Fabulous sentence. Once again, you have made my heart break. I'm running out of Scotch tape!
10 [Report This]Date: April 14, 2010 08:49 am Title: Chapter 1
So I'm thinking "Ooo, a little tidbit from unfold--how wonderful!" and then you go and make me teary-eyed. In the interest of being more direct with what I want: I want you to stay. I want you to stay here and be with me. I want you to stay here and love me. I need you to stay here and love me. Great angst, great job.
Date: April 14, 2010 12:07 am Title: Chapter 1
Awesome. What a glass of angst this one was. It only added to it, that the characters tagged in this one are "Jim, Pam" rather than "Jim/Pam." Ouch. ;) Great job!