10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 06:26 pm Title: Jim
Nice start. Anxious to see where you go with this. I love the folder of unsent emails to Pam.
7 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:57 am Title: Jim
Good job so far. I love the idea that Jim doesn't know ywt about Pam not getting masrried, and I love that he has so many unsent e-mails to her on his computer.
Just a bit of constructive crticism... I think your retelling of the confession scene in "Casino Night" is good, but it's almost like a general retelling of what we saw. I was tempted to just skip over it because I didn't feel like it was anything new. You had a little bit of insight into their thoughts, but I would suggest, if you ever edit this, maybe making that part shorter, or cutting out the dialogue and summarizing it, maybe. Just a suggestion.
Looking forward to more.
8 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:55 am Title: Jim
It's still sad to revisit those moments. Nice job!