Date: January 28, 2015 11:14 am Title: Chapter 9
Ugh! This is one of my top fav jam fics and it just ends, forgotten, when it's really starting to get good! Actually all three unfinished fics by this author are really really good. I know it's been years but I really wish they could be finished.
Date: March 26, 2012 01:31 pm Title: Chapter 9
If I may offer a little constructive criticism - you may want to read through this again and add in missing punctuation marks and fix some lines where the dialogue is bunched together. Sorry to do that in a review, but the contact author function doesn't work.
Date: April 05, 2011 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like this story. It's nice to see Jim and Pam both available, both interested, and yet struggling with the awkwardness of how to get together - as opposed to the real world, in which sinister forces (not necessarily named Karen) contrived to keep them apart. And the objective of having the Gumption Fairy linger just a wee bit longer at Pam's house is believably met: she's still recognizably Pam. And, lastly, it's nice to see Penny and Isabel used in a way that seems natural and not at all AU. Don't feel like you have to hew too close to the S2 arc: either Casino Night would have to involve a ring, or I'd be forced to reach for my vegetables! Well done and keep it coming ...
Author's Response: Guten abend, "Guten Tag"...thank you for your kind review. And I promise those vegetables can stay in the fridge (you read my mind). Regarding Pam, she is strong, but not right out in the open all of the time. I think she definitely would hold back somewhat in this situation (if she was a real girl). And for Jim, I wanted to use what we know from newer episodes, where Jim has given advice on romance and dating, so I hope this Jim holds true to that aspect of his character. Penny and Isabel were great on the show, I like to think that they have been cheering Pam on all this time in canon. She has to have some girlfriends, right? I had a best guy friend in high school, he asked me out once over the phone and I laughed, I thought he was kidding with me, it's an awkward thing to change a close relationship, we never ended up dating, but I understand the awkwardness, totally.
Date: April 03, 2011 07:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
This story is phenomenal, I can't believe there aren't more reviews yet
Author's Response: Hi Bobblehead, thank you! I can't believe it either...reviews are nice but I'll survive. I wish there was a "like" button or something, if you can't actually review at least show some love... oh well, that's life. I am not the most avid reviewer either, so I get it. People are clearly reading it, 3000+ reads so far, that's not just the first chapter ;) I write fic for myself mostly, but I do love to share. Enjoy and keep reading!
Date: March 29, 2011 07:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Just thrilled to see another new story about the "great seasons (1-3). I am really enjoying this one, especially the AU version of Pam figuring out that Roy is actually hurting her (mentally, emotionally) much sooner than on the series. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much Labhub! I love early series based fic, even AU stuff. I am really enjoying this one. Fancy New Beesly is born! I just love her.
Date: March 19, 2011 12:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
I can't believe more people haven't reviewed this--I love this story! Keep it coming, I can't wait to see where this goes.
Author's Response: I know! I mean, yes I'm writing it, but my favorite fics are of early season jam. Thanks so much! enjoy :)
Date: March 12, 2011 06:06 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh wow! I find that I am really falling in love with this story. I absolutely adore the changes starting with ust more or less Pam's mentality, the way she is thinking and the fact that she is very much aware that she at least has a crush on Jim. She is disillusioned by her relationship with Roy right from the beginning of the story but then they have a few good weeks and she is really wiling to look at it and see if things are turning around. I think she is just hopeful because she just doesn't want to feel as though she has wasted such a large portion of her life on a guy who doesn't deserve her.
Poor Pam has to quickly see that those couple of good wek were in fact the exception rather than the rule and I couldn't help but feel her hurt when Roy couldn't be bothere to care that Pam had to work and couldn't go to the lake, he didn't even have a discussion with her like most couples that live together do. The lake was there, his brother was going and he was going too. The fact that pam couldn't go was nothing more than her problem. I felt especially bad for her because he simply didn't seem to care in any way that she couldn't go. he didn't tell her he wished she was going to be there or that he'd miss her, he just went. It was actually a very good thing for her because it was a very eye opening experience for our Pam and really sent her thoughts in the right direction, really questioning the rest of er life and if she really was going to mary this guy. Oh and she got to spend so great time at the mall with Jim so that was a real bonus.
I absolutely adored your changes to the hot girl episode. You left the good stuff like the scene in the kitchen at lunch where idiot Roy is ogoling another girl right in fron ot pam, then he says they are dating. You's think after being engaged THAT long he'd be able to gt it right. I also loved that you kept in Jim's lines about what kind of girl he likes... moms, single moms, soccer moms and then the too late kev. LOVED it! Then was Jim cheering her up with the Dwight/purse stuff but then came the really key change that gosh I wish they had done on the show. Roy simply refused to take what Pam had to say about being finished seriously and he came up and tried that tickle scene which on the show made me a little sick that she let him tickle her out of beign upset, and on Jim's desk no less. Here when she is telling him to stop it, she MEANS it and she follows it up with stern words and even though the office mates are watching, she refuses to back down. So then rather than jim going into the conference room alone to see Katy and ending up asking her for drinks and winding up dating her, we have Jim and Pam deciding to go in there together to be nice and save katy from Michael. YAY, we are saved from the whole Jim and Katie dating stuff! I bet Katy was really disappointed that the only really attractive guy in the office never made it a point to come in and talk to/flit with her.
It was great how Pam reached out to Jim, asking him if they were going out for drinks and could she go and letting him know she wanted to be with him. Oh, and Katy had to stick with plan A, Michael giving her a ride. I like how Pam heads off Roy in the parking lot and whatever she said must have gotten through because he left alone and she left with Jim.
Finally, I like that while it took a bit for Pam to open up, she ended up opening up completely with Jim, using him for support (which I have a feeling she will need to do a lot in the days to come) and allowing herself the pleasure of cryig on his shoulder and hilding onto him.
This is really great stuff and the changes you are making to the episodes are believable and feel like it is certainly an alternate way they could have done things. I hope we will find out what happenes that night after drinks and crying with Jim. I mean, does she go back to her and Roy's house where it will be uncomfortable and Roy will probably do a lot of begging, I'm certain he does NOT want to lose his caretaker. Or, will she go to Jims and let Jim take care of her and dote on her a bit. He would certainly be a great salve to her wounded soul. He wouldm I am surem reassure and comfort her.
I just cannot wait to see what is next for us. I'll appologize in advance... I know my reviews tend to be long, rambling and probably boring and also probably overwhelming. I just can't seem to help it. I always tend to want to discuss the chapters at length.
Can I ask one thing? Is there any chance of you going back and finishing Treehouse? I ADORE that story and I've always thought it was a real shame that it was unfinished, not to mention tat you left off at such a pivotal point with the stuff with Pam and Roy coming to a head and Jim and that girl and it looked like Pam and Jim were maybe finding their way back to each other. I REALLY hope (and am willing to beg for it) that you will strongly consider continuing treehouse. I think there are A LOT of people who would really be happy to see you working on it again. Heck, I've even read it several times in spite of knowing I will be very disappointed because of where it leaves off! Anyhow, something to think about.
I'm excited for the next chapter of this story to see if pam follows through. What does it mean for Pam and Jim. What other growth will we see in Pam. Tahnks for sharing your writing with us!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I do not mind the length at all, TWSS, ha! I have wanted to do this story for so long and more recently it has been waving it's hands in front of me, so I write. I am glad you are enjoying it, I love Pam, and I always thought, if she would just open her eyes and look at the way Roy treats her, she would be so much better off and would break it off. I think Jim and Pam's friendship though always strong will be even stronger with Roy out of the way, he is her best friend and she needs that. It is not an easy thing to change everything in your life, so she needs someone right? I had Pam ask Jim to go for drinks after watching the Pilot again and seeing where he asked her to go before Roy walks in and is totally rude. You feel so bad for Jim, the second you realize that he is right for Pam and not the ape she is with. I hope you enjoy the new chapter and keep enjoying this as I go on. As for the Treehouse, I do plan on finishing, I love that story. I had a block when it stalled and then my fic addiction kind of fizzled due to real life, but now it is a fun hobby for me again, my husband is constantly at work or school these days, so I need to spend my time with something. And I am loving this. I want to finish this story and then I am going back to the Tree house, I started the next chapter back when I stalled, and I have an outline of where it will go, so no begging necessary, just a little patience, like Jim :) Thanks again :)
Date: March 10, 2011 06:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
I just finished reading your first three chapters, and I'm hooked. I love where you're going with this, and the way you write Pam is so fresh. You definitely are staying true to her character, but you also are having Pam take some more risks, unlike the actual timeline of the show. I think this makes her so much more interesting of a character as she's that much more unpredictable - and it also gives you, as a writer, all the more to work with. I am also really captivated by the scenes with Jim, as we can see snippets of his love for Pam, but you've got him so true to his character, which makes for a realistic story. I don't think a story would be believable if both Jim and Pam were acting a little differently than they were on the show, so the way you've written your story is believable. Great job, and I look forward to your continuation of this!
Author's Response: Thank you PMH, I love fics, but I feel that too many times, Pam is written with a low self esteem that just drives me batty. I used to think Pam was just kind of shy. As the show has gone on, you find that Pam is now a stronger person, and the fics where she seems a bit low on self esteem are more accurate, but my inner feminist says to hell with that ;) I am having so much fun with this. Enjoy!
Date: March 10, 2011 06:29 am Title: Chapter 1
Just caught up with this one. Looking forward to this one playing out.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, I love fics about the early days of the show. I am having fun re-watching to write this one with as much correct canon info as possible. I'm nerdy like that :)
Date: March 05, 2011 07:16 pm Title: Chapter 2
Di, I'm so happy to see you posting again! Love that you're starting from the very beginning. Makes me want to pull out my DVDs and have 6 season marathon.
Author's Response: Thanks so much,I am thrilled to see you posting again. You have honestly inspired me, picking up Would you still love me after 2 years... awesomeness by the way. i have been rewatching season 1 for this, now on to season 2!