Date: June 24, 2011 03:34 am Title: Shattered.
Congrats on your first story and welcome to MTT! Casino Night is always an inspiration to build on, and I noticed that you've left this as incomplete, so I'm looking forward to seeing where you take them from what we know to something else. :)
Date: June 23, 2011 08:00 pm Title: Shattered.
This has been done before (obviously), but I liked the way you were in the heads of both characters. I would love to see you add a chapter or two on the rest of the night, especially what you saw their thoughts being during the critical 24 hours after the night. So many mistakes were made during that period (Jim not telling Pam he was leaving, Pam refusing to see the damage she had done) that it would be good to see that explored.
Author's Response: Definitely. That's my plan. And I plan on maybe creating a bit of drama between Karen and Pam. :P