Date: March 12, 2012 09:54 am Title: Chapter 1
Great start! Refreshing to see a proactive Pam. Hope you did not make our boy too sick. Just enough for a bit of angst maybe or perhaps a bit of hardship to be conquered by love! Cannot wait to see what you have in store for us.
Date: March 12, 2012 09:07 am Title: Chapter 1
Interesting start. Just a few things that threw me off. Pam's sister's name is Penny. And there were a few grammar things that could be fixed up by a beta, (I'd be happy to help you out). For ex.: a lot, not alot...
I think it's a fun concept to explore though, hope you'll continue. If you'd like some help it just send me an email - firstname.lastname@example.org