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Reviewer: Ladama Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2016 05:43 pm Title: Chapter 1

I read this on FFN and I'm so glad you brought this to MTT! I think you captured both their voices and their strained S3 relationship well. 

Only criticism is I really like the "I -You" style, so I was thrown off by the shift from "I - You" to "I - Her" in the last paragraph. I feel like if it went back to "I - You" it may pack more of a punch. "I join you by the lakeside, where you're soaking your burnt feet. I still can't believe you did that." etc.

That's the only thing, I love everything else!

Also, never really thought of PB&J when I heard this song but it's really does fit their season 3 story. Well done!

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