Date: June 28, 2017 07:29 am Title: Chapter 1
Sure! (Sometimes I hesitate to go into detail. I'm slightly worried about offending if an author isn't interested in hearing that kind of feedback. And I'm still getting to know everyone here.) Anyway--the only formatting issue that I saw was that there were no spaces between paragraphs. I would just add those, and it would be much easier to read.
I also wanted to encourage you to keep writing, regardless of how short or long a fic might end up being. I've written and read fics of only 100 words, and they could be more amazing and compelling than 5,000-word fics. For me, it's about telling the story you want to tell, so I would still encourage you to write, even if the stories you want to tell are small glimpses into a day-in-the-life (I actually really love fics like that).
Hope that helps! I appreciate your attention to detail and pride in your work. :)
Author's Response: I will add those. I am a very new fanfic writer finding my legs so any advice/encouragement is very appreciated. Thank you.
Date: June 27, 2017 07:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Let us see. Your first story (excellent) is over 4000 words. This is not even 300.. My little brain is fogged.
Author's Response: I love these little moments, and I wanted to capture one, and this is what came out when the inspiration really hit, in my opinion it didn't need to be any longer. I usually don't plan stories, I get a small idea and write whatever comes to mind. I always appreciate reviews. I strive to make my writing better in any way I can. Thank you for reading <3
Date: June 17, 2017 07:53 am Title: Chapter 1
Cute snapshot. Formatting issues aside, I enjoy reading domestic moments like this. :) Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: Thank you, I really enjoyed writing it. Could you expand on what you mean by formatting issues, I want to make everything nice to look at or accessible as possible. Thank you for reading and reviewing <3