1 [Report This]Date: May 09, 2020 09:10 am Title: Chapter 8
You're KILLING me. I don't know how I'm going to make it through the rest of the story. That last line. I'm dying over here.
1 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2019 06:55 pm Title: Chapter 8
Next scene: Jim being wheeled to the ER because a heart attack is threatening to do him in.
1 [Report This]Date: June 12, 2018 06:55 pm Title: Chapter 8
Um, I want to do crossword puzzles with Jim now, so thanks for that image.
I love this story a lot. You really outdid yourself in this chapter, with using the colors to describe Pam's bruises, having "that's what she said" be one of her first memories, and the golf pencil... It's a lot of goodness crammed into one chapter and I need more soon!
Date: June 05, 2018 07:57 am Title: Chapter 8
Holy f*ck
This whole chapter...
Date: June 04, 2018 08:19 pm Title: Chapter 8
Oooh that end line! So good. I loved the callbacks to the pre-accident stuff with the garlic bread, etc. I think you’re handling this in a really lovely way in how you have Pam recognize that there’s something there but freak out a little and ask for something familiar—Roy. Also, the way you described her seeing herself for the first time and the whole interaction she had with Jim later was just perfect. I love the way she categorized her bruises/cuts/etc into colors. I’ve been hoping for more of this story and you did not disappoint! Can’t wait for the next installment.
1 [Report This]Date: June 03, 2018 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 8
Oooh that ending is simply mean. In a very good way.
1 [Report This]Date: June 03, 2018 06:22 pm Title: Chapter 8
I started reading this one over on fanfiction.net then saw it was also posted here. Very well done. I work in the medical field and this seems very realistic. I really like how Jim has been drawing Pam out. It's slow, but steady and appears to be working. Well done, it's very easy to picture the scenes while reading.