1 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2018 10:50 am Title: Chapter Five: Give and Take
You’ve definitely captured the essence of an abusive relationship and the toxic thought processes that come with it, fitting it seamlessly into Pam’s inner monologue. I love the palm reading, especially Pam’s choice of including Roy and Dwight in addition to herself and Jim. Such a tiny detail holding such profound meaning.
1 [Report This]Date: March 06, 2018 05:54 am Title: Chapter Five: Give and Take
I think that you strike such a good balance as far as depicting what this type of relationship is really like. Yes, sometimes there is objective and obvious horribleness. But sometimes it’s more subtle and scarring and that can be so hard to write. You already know that I think you do a great job with that and that’s no different this chapter.
I also think your dialogue is really believable. I can really hear each character saying the lines you’ve given them. Great job!