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Clever reuse of Pam's love of card noises aside, Jim being so taken with these little things about her is lovely.

This may be your strongest chapter yet with the introduction of Roy. I really appreciate the way you handled this, providing both Jim's impressions before he realized who he was and after and letting us understanding how much they changed. I think the same thing happens to us in the audience of this show - we root for JAM and thus from the jump take a pretty negative view of Roy, and it's unusual to see that acknowledged so plainly. I was also happy to see a dive into what PAM finds appealing about Roy, which often gets lost entirely in spite of the fact that it's pretty important to understanding Pam, and the more-removed narrator's perspective.

And the line of Jim not usually comparing himself to other men like "a male lion sniffing a rival on the wind" is killer. As is Pam never having seen a panther but being sure Roy moved like one. Apparently similes about big cats just appeal to me.

Author's Response: Big cats are cute! And thank you, I really appreciate the detailed analysis of what I'm not sure I necessarily realized I was doing with the introduction of Roy...