Date: December 13, 2020 02:00 pm Title: Epilogue: Long After June
I neglected to review this the first time I read it, so I’ll just sum up here:
I do love this general concept of an external force bringing them back together in this moment where they just couldn’t quite get over themselves enough to do it.
You have, as always, done a great job with Larissa – you’ve really defined this character for me. I love the bond you form under pressure between her and Pam here, and the way her similarities with Jim consistently help her bridge the gap with someone who should be a near stranger. It tells you a lot about Larissa, Pam, Jim, and Jim and Pam’s relationship all at once. And the two different perspectives on Larissa’s fall out of the tree are both well-conceived and well-executed.
Also, Jim’s questions for Helene were genius.
The story of them reuniting is just lovely. The hi-hey exchange did not go unnoticed. I love this newly confident Pam immediately progressing to wise-assing Jim and them recovering their banter and the two of them finding ways to completely throw each other off as they feel their way through a new relationship.
You have a really strong sense of Pam and how she sees the world as the artist Jim has always seen her as, and the way at this crucial moment her sense of herself is changing. The choice to have Pam communicate through her medium instead of giving a big speech was a smart one, and it paid off. Similarly, you did some strong character development with Jim through his interludes, which were really creatively written.
And I really enjoyed your description of the way they impact and change each other – Jim making her the realest version of herself, the way their images of each other are different from the rest of the world’s because they’re different together. The touch about how they’re finally able to be themselves without everything else hanging over them was a good note to add.
Anyhow, this is a high-quality example of hospital fic. Well done.
Author's Response: So I am months behind on replying to your reviews (sorry--but thanks for the reviews!). I really appreciate this detailed feedback on this story in particular. Larissa is one of my favorite characters to write, so I'm so glad that you find my version of her meaningful. This was one of my favorite stories to write precisely because of what I was able to do with Pam as an artist, so I really appreciate you responding to that part of it. Thanks so much!
1 [Report This]Date: February 17, 2020 01:55 pm Title: Epilogue: Long After June
I love this story! It started pretty darkly, but I smiled and laughed so many times during the reading. I sometimes wondered what Fem!Jim would look like - and you showed us Larissa! She's a fantastic character and their mutual banter both with Jim and Pam - lovely!
I also like the decisions Pam and Jim made, even if they seemed quite tough. Leaving DM, leaving Scranton - these locations became so significant part of them that sometimes it seemed (for me, at least) weird to imagine them somewhere else (I know about the happenings in season 9, but I didn't watch it and happily ignore it). But it was for the best, and I genuinely enjoy your story. Thank you!
Author's Response: Thank you! This is probably the story I wrote that I'm proudest of, so I really appreciate your feedback on it. I also ignore S9, so thanks for being willing to let me also take them out of Scranton in the fic. :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 07, 2019 05:02 pm Title: Epilogue: Long After June
Man! I'm so sad this is over. This story has been an adventure for me for the last two days.
Though I have been procrastinating homework (I do that well), so I guess I should be grateful I finished when I did.
Thank you for writing this!! It is a very beautiful story and was very well written. Thank you for sticking with it!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really appreciate the feedback. I try very hard to make sure every WIP I do gets finished, though I can never promise anything, but this one in particular was a joy from start to finish. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Date: July 24, 2018 07:20 pm Title: Epilogue: Long After June
Oh man, everyone at the office was perfectly in character - from Kelly's highlighter colors to the Finer Things Club sending Pam off with the perfect gift.. that was a great touch!
I'll forgive you for the Karen thing ONLY because that's literally the only red mark I could put on this story.
You did good, Comfect. This story start to finish was an absolute joy to read, filled with all of the emotions. Definitely deserving of all of the jellybeans! Thank you for sharing this with all of us!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I appreciate your forgiveness; I always felt like if they hadn't had Jim hanging over them Pam and Karen might actually have been good friends. They both like making fun of Jim for instance ;). And especially if Jim had come to Stamford dating Pam, I think Pam would have jumped at the chance to make an actual friend. But I can see why it would be a red flag for you.
And more broadly, thanks for your feedback throughout this story. It has been fun writing for you.
Date: July 22, 2018 02:40 pm Title: Epilogue: Long After June
Good way to end it. Thank you for sharing this. It was a lot of fun to see the development of the characters through this lens.
Author's Response: Thanks. I've really appreciated your feedback along the way.
Date: July 22, 2018 09:07 am Title: Epilogue: Long After June
The bad thing is that I was (am) insanely busy lately and haven’t had as much time to read as I would have liked. The good thing is that I had like ten chapters of this to binge read. I especially especially LOVED the epilogue, but really I loved it all. You gave life to characters that we don’t know in a really organic and believable way. Don’t apologize for this being long—I’m so happy to have it! Wonderful job as always, and I’m excited to read what comes next for you!
Author's Response: Well I'm really glad you caught up! Thanks for reading, and for the feedback along the way. Looking forward to having you back here on the site (hopefully updating your own fics... XD).
Date: July 22, 2018 01:02 am Title: Epilogue: Long After June
Why not give Jim a six-figure paycheck?? 😂
Can't believe this is actually the end! I love this story and thought it was really well-written and thought out! Thank you-- I hope you write other fics in the future xoxo
Author's Response: Why not indeed? And thanks! It's been a long while (at almost 2 full months this is the longest of my fics in time as well as words) so thanks for reading along!