Date: November 24, 2018 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
I’m a huge fan of all your writing, so it’s great to see that you posted after all this time. As always, this is just fantastic. I love the idea that the whole office had group chats like these to stay in touch after the documentary aired. Meredith’s line is perfect for her, and I can definitely see her sympathizing with some of the more minor characters.
Toby’s characterization is perfect. You’ve taken what was presented as more of a caricature in the show and created a well fleshed out, vulnerable character, which speaks volumes to your writing skills. The line where Sasha tells Toby she wants to study psychology and her rationale behind it is so raw and heartbreaking. Especially in a fandom like this that is so centered around one couple, hardly any time is given to exploring dynamics between other characters, much less a father daughter dynamic, so this was refreshing and real and sad all at the same time.
Finally, though you discuss Toby’s struggle with depression, I love how you’ve written his defense to the Scranton Strangler video, how you’ve included the fact that he’s fighting back against the way he’s portrayed in it and the hopeful ending you’ve given him.
Date: November 14, 2018 06:36 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, I really liked this a lot! Toby is one of those background characters that fits so well in so many other character stories that it’s nice to his own story. Even if it is one where his daughter thinks she needs to take psych classes just to understand him. Side note: I loved the Sasha/Tony dynamic here.
The idea of a group chat was perfect and it all went down how I assume a real one would. I could read Kevin’s messages exactly in his tone of voice. And I like that Pam was there to gently encourage him to start writing. Thanks for sharing this, it was a great read!
Date: November 12, 2018 04:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
For all the JAM stories on this site, this was a bit of fresh air actually. Very interesting character analysis. Toby does often get blown over as the office sad sack. To get his perspective is compelling read. I also like how Pam reached out to him. In the show she was usually very nice to him. After all she let him stay in the Finer Things Club and kicked Jim out. Caring soul that she is, it was very nice to see her encourage him like that. Made for a good read.
Date: November 12, 2018 05:01 am Title: Chapter 1
First of all, welcome out of retirement! So nice to see something new from you! Second, this is just wonderful. I really like Toby (and in those moments I don’t, I really don’t!) but I know that’s because usually I feel bad for him. You’ve humanized him in a realistic way in this story. I loved the bit where Sasha speculates about WHO he should have dated. And you nailed Meredith’s voice in those messages! I love how the end brought it back to Pam, but with a clear and understood tone that it’s about support and friendship. Great story!