Date: March 21, 2019 05:12 pm Title: Recess
Interesting take on Pam's reaction. Clearly Jim is still forefront in her mind. That she wants to get things done quickly with Roy to move onto better things with the thought of Jim seems to be telling as to her state of mind. Still wondering why he didn't call though.
Thanks a lot!
I was going to explain that in the next chapter (this one), but this idea came out of the blue and I decided to go for it.
Date: March 19, 2019 07:13 pm Title: Revision
Oh Jim.. Why didn't you call? Did he lose her number? He better have a good excuse. I wasn't expecting the story to fast forward, it was a surprise for sure. I hope Roy gets out of the picture soon, a bit more AU.
I can't wait to read the rest of the story . Loving this so far
There is a reason why Jim didn't call. And about the time jump, the original idea was to make them lose touch for a long while, and actually this is the first chapter I drafted.
I want Roy far far away, and pronto.
Thanks very much!
Date: March 19, 2019 06:25 pm Title: Revision
Chapter three was so very sweet and just lovely.
So I was really surprised by chapter four starting up so many years later, I wasn’t expecting this to be a “prior meeting” story. I love it though :) So well done!
Thanks very much! This was the main idea from the start: having them meet in high school and then lose touch for a very long while so the jump was necessary.
Also, I love to write them this awkward. Thanks again!
Date: March 19, 2019 06:21 pm Title: Revision
So why DIDN'T he call, Kuri? Why didn't he call?
This is very well done, both the time jump and the flashbacks, and I'm interested to see how far into canon-time this goes. I'll admit I'm selfishly hoping not long (that is, that these two lunkheads figure themselves out soon).
Why oh why indeed!
Thanks very much for your review! Not much into canon because I don't have that much patience to have them tiptoe around one another.
Date: March 19, 2019 06:17 pm Title: Revision
A cute chapter with a bittersweet ending here. I did like it as the whole Jim and Pam dynamic came across well even with all the added tension. I do wonder if Pam is going to screw up enough courage to ask him why he didn't call way back when.
Thanks very much! It took me a while to decide how much tension was ok for this, so that they will still feel like Jim and Pam.
I wonder the same thing
Date: March 15, 2019 11:27 am Title: Field trip
Great way for Jim and Pam to meet. Kind of fun that it was a quick meeting like this but they still had a great connection right away. Lots of great detail and good internal thoughts too.
Thanks a lot! The idea is that everything happens fast, and has to be intense like that.
Chapter 3 is almost ready.
Date: March 15, 2019 11:14 am Title: Introduction
Yes yes yes!! I never get tired of these two meeting and this was a wonderful one! I had cafe disco flashbacks when they first started jumping around and the transition to something more sensual was brilliant. Little nervous about Roy finding out, but extremely excited to read more!
Thanks so much!
This story matches the series' timeline, so this is happening somewhere in the middle.of the 90s. Other than cafe disco, insert your punk rock choice :)
Date: March 15, 2019 08:46 am Title: Field trip
This is very well written in terms of the showing us and not just telling us how Pam is feeling and why. I enjoy Pam meets Jim moments and this is well done, plus I'm a sucker for Pam having broken up with Roy pre Jim. But it's not just context; you do a good job writing the specifics too.
Thanks very very much!!
It's a bit of a struggle to show and not to tell, but I'm glad it's working.
Date: March 14, 2019 09:26 pm Title: Introduction
Just wanted to put in my two cents: not a huge reader of the more erotic fics on this site but I think you've done a good job here establishing Pam's discontented baseline. Looking forward to what you choose to do with that now you've done it.
Thanks so much!
I have it all more or less laid out, but let's see where it takes me :)
Date: March 14, 2019 06:43 pm Title: Introduction
Oh, you had me from the description! I love the idea of titling the chapters after paintings and I can’t wait for chapter two!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Next chapter is almost done (I just want to revise it once more). If you're curious, the painting will be one by Hopper :)
Date: March 14, 2019 09:05 am Title: Introduction
Kuri!!! You’re going for it and I love it and I refuse to feel even the littlest bit sorry for it!
We’re off to a great start. Ugh, Roy. I really hope he did wash his hands.
Cannot WAIT to see where you take this! And I love the idea of using paintings for each chapter :)
Thanks so much, Coley!
The not washing hands is a real thing a friend of mine told me. She used to date a breakdancer. Ugh!
Anyway, chapter 2 is almost ready. :)
Date: March 13, 2019 04:15 pm Title: Introduction
Well that's an interesting way to start things out. Not really surprising that Pam would have other things on her mind in this situation. You've got me very curious to see where this one is heading.
Author's Response: Thanks very much, w4! There is going to be a slight nod to your epic story in the mext chapter ;)