Date: June 20, 2019 12:48 am Title: Come Back to Heaven
Pam heading to the conference is the very best way for this chapter to end! I liked your inclusion of things from the episode, but with a different twist (like Pam’s “umm” and Jim’s “Hi Pam”).
I’m looking forward to seeing where you go from here!
Date: June 19, 2019 06:43 pm Title: Come Back to Heaven
So other than Jim and Pam are together now, this feels a lot like the canon episode. However since they are together there's a new nuance to the looks they'd have given the cameras or the feelings behind their eyes. Great job in capturing that.
Go Pam! Go get him. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Date: June 19, 2019 05:47 pm Title: Come Back to Heaven
How far is it from Scranton to Philly? Because I think we need a subhead on this fic for that number of miles too. I liked this chapter, especially how it hews close to canon in all the moments we actually see but deviates exactly in the moments we wouldn't see on the show. Good job!
Date: May 29, 2019 02:50 am Title: Tell Me What You Want From Me
Not quite the idyllic morning after for our favorite pair... which makes it all the more realistic I suppose. I feel for them both in the kind of awkwardness that follows. Although, I love the idea of secrecy & the potential for so many things to go delightfully wrong. I’m hoping Pam’s upcoming date is a complete disaster in the best ways possible, even more so than on the show...
Author's Response: "delightfully wrong".....DEFINITELY what tempted me to write this in the first place. haha...there are so many possibilities.
Date: May 27, 2019 08:18 pm Title: Give Me One Excuse
What an emotional rollercoaster this chapter was! My heart was all over the place. Was she having regrets? Was he going to just grab her face and kiss her? So good! I hope the next chapter doesn’t take as long as it will for them to get to their date!
Author's Response: HAHAHA! Sorry it took me awhile to update. I was having directional issues. I realized yesterday that my issues are with chapter eight, not seven, so I went ahead and posted seven.
Date: May 27, 2019 04:01 pm Title: Tell Me What You Want From Me
Now let the shenanigans begin? What have the last few chapters been then?
Very real emotional beats here. You convey their nervousness and anxiety really well here. They're in a hard position to be sure. It's not a fairy tale type thing here where with one breathtaking kiss and a night of passion all is now right with the world. Many of the same issues and pressures that plagued them before are still there. However I get the sense that since they've had the courage to be this honest with each other, they'll also find the courage to keep moving forward.
Author's Response: pre-shenanigans? haha! And yesssssss....even though they're sorta on the same page, there are some things to iron out. Definitely not a quick fix.
Date: May 26, 2019 07:21 pm Title: Gotta Learn From Far Away
So my favorite part of this chapter is the slow tap dance they're doing around each other - Jim isn't pushing Pam to tell him why she's there and Pam doesn't seem to be in a huge rush to tell him. They're simply just getting back into the habit of being in the same room again.
And it doesn't take them long to fall into their usual banter, either! The bit with the pizza definitely feels like early seasons JAM and now she's in his pajamas and they're drinking beer and none of us are in any rush for them to get on with it.
You know, until they get on with getting it on. *shrugs*
Author's Response: hahahaha your comment is AMAZING. "Until they get on with getting it on" haha exactly. I feel like no matter how intense it gets, it's easy for JAM to fall back into their JAM banter. Like as angsty as season three got, they still had those flashes, so I definitely wanted to bring that out. Their banter is one of my favorite things about them.
Date: May 26, 2019 06:57 pm Title: Give Me One Excuse
Listen, there are a lot of things I love to see on this site, and at the top of that list are 'Pam showing up on Jim's doorstep' and 'Pam showing up on Jim's doorstep soaking wet'.
I am already so in for this story! (Here's where I tell you've I've been reading it as it's posted but this is my first chance to review, so I'm pretending that it's my first time)
Author's Response: Rainy day confessions are my favorite thing in the world. The dRaMa of it all just gets to me. I love writing them and I LOVE reading them haha. I'm glad you're enjoying it, Coley. Hopefully I won't disappoint.
Date: May 21, 2019 11:08 pm Title: All My Safest Places
I loved all the memories running throughout it - it really added an extra layer to the story. It’s so nice to see all the tension finally boil over! I can’t wait to see what comes next.
Author's Response: Shenanigans. Shenanigans come next and I can't wait to write it all out haha.
Date: May 21, 2019 07:35 pm Title: All My Safest Places
Don't undersell this! I've been reading a lot of romance recently and this fits right in. Nice work. Keep the story going!
Author's Response: That means a lot, Comfect. It's been like two years since I've written anything that could be considered steamy, so I was really challenged by it.
Date: May 21, 2019 07:19 pm Title: All My Safest Places
Don't you dare sell yourself short! This was vivid, descriptive, steamy, everything it needed to be. I loved how memories of the past showed up here. That even though they walked through a very trying time, they still have years of happy memories to fall back on. Made for a lot of depth in this scene.
There was one thing that kind of took away from things. You have Jim taking off her bra there in the bedroom, but then a bit later described how her bra had been discarded in the kitchen. A little confusing. However the rest of everything was great to see.
Author's Response: It was the very last sentence I edited. That's what I get for not re-reading it one last time before posting. ARGGGGGH. It's fixed now. Thanks warrior!!
Date: May 15, 2019 02:16 pm Title: Permission to Love
Of course I couldn’t help myself & had to keep reading as you update. Oh Jim, I hate that he’s still feeling a bit uncertain about Pam’s intentions. I hope it hits him soon that Pam is in this too. This was so beautiful, finally some pay off from all the lovely, lovely build up!
Author's Response: It's coming. He'll realize it soon. I'm glad you decided to keep reading!!
Date: May 15, 2019 10:29 am Title: Permission to Love
I love how all the emotion from all those years was just released in one moment of passion. I really thought Pam might leave this chapter, but you saved my heart from breaking- so thank you.
Author's Response: It was tempting, because I love my angst, but I'm trying to go for something slightly lighter with this one.
Date: May 14, 2019 06:43 pm Title: Permission to Love
Well done, Pam. I mean, Jim is doing well too but I think she pushed this to where it got, which is good on her. Nice story beats, glad you got them here.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Comfect. I felt like Pam had to be the one to initiate it since he had already put everything on the line back in CN.
Date: May 14, 2019 06:17 pm Title: Permission to Love
Wow! So that was a trip. You can almost see all the years of pent up emotions, missed chances, wonderings why , and years of tension between them there at the counter. And finally when it does snap it's even hotter and more steamy than I think either one of them could have imagines. Great detail and vivid imagery. You've done a great job at building up to this moment. Can't wait to see how things will progress after this.
Author's Response: Sorry, I'm behind on commenting back, but thank you so much for this, warrior. Definitely boosted my confidence a little bit.
Date: May 12, 2019 02:08 am Title: You're Haunting Me
Boy, oh boy, are you good at building tension. I need to stop reading this until it’s complete - I’m far too impatient for this updating business...
Author's Response: bahahaha omg that's the best compliment I could ever hope to receive! Thank you!!
Date: May 10, 2019 05:15 pm Title: Give Me One Excuse
I love to hate Season 3 and the fics that come from it are just glorious. I'm so looking forward to where this is going. I don't know if it was intentional, but I really liked the formatting at the end. Those one sentence paragraphs completely changed the pace in all the right ways.
I LOVE people getting caught in the rain. L-O-V-E it.
Author's Response: THAT IS MY FAVORITE TROPE. Rainy day confession fics are EVERYTHING to me, both as a writer and a reader haha.
Date: May 10, 2019 01:59 pm Title: Gotta Learn From Far Away
The breaking down of the tension here is just brilliant. I love how easily these two can get back into being Jim and Pam, no matter what.
Beautifully written, once again
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I wanted to convey the fact that while things are weird between them, the root of their relationship, the camaraderie, still exists.
Date: May 09, 2019 09:21 pm Title: You're Haunting Me
Nice way to put in some cannon lines there. Pam's beach speech is always classic regardless of where it's put in. That you've got Jim speechless here is another nice touch. Casino Night devastated him. It makes complete sense that he's put a lot of armor up around his heart, even if it's Pam talking to him.
Good on Pam for figuring things out. Even if the trip wasn't planned, I like that she knows what she wants now. She's fighting through her fear and it's great to see.
Author's Response: YESSSS!!! I was going for blank stare/confused/unreadable Jim from Beach Games. And her speech is classic and truly a defining moment, not just for jam, but for Pam herself. Absolutely one of my favorite moments from the series.
Date: May 09, 2019 06:43 pm Title: You're Haunting Me
I am glad Pam isn't just leaving it like that. I will say: "Pam was trying to read the emotionless expression on his face" is the one line here that doesn't quite ring true to me because I'm not sure S2-3 summer Jim has learned how not to show his feelings on his face if Pam's actually looking. But that's a minor point, because the beats in this, including his inability to let himself hope and thus to actually hear her, ring very true overall. Keep it up!
Author's Response: That's a good point. I was primarily going for the Beach Games reaction he had at her confession, but you make a good point about whether or not he would have been able to pull it off only a month after Casino Night.