Date: February 10, 2008 02:56 pm Title: Chapter 5: Stop Running
Ahhh Karen, perceptive as usual. =)
Angry!Jim...oh my goodness...I like when he comes out. And sad!Jim, not believing that he really heard Pam saying she loves him. That broke my heart. Oh and loved this line: and his heart filled with love for her. It was like an ocean, never drying out, replenishing each time he heard her breathe. *sigh*
Date: November 06, 2006 12:02 pm Title: Epilogue
Very sweet ending! And I really liked angsty!Jim - like you I think he has the right to be. So does Pam, in her own way, and I think you addressed that just right. Now they can live happily (sniffly?) ever after. :-)
Date: November 06, 2006 09:07 am Title: Epilogue
Aww. That was sweet. I love how it came full-circle from the beginning. One thing- make sure to type out any numbers less than ten. For example: "He put the bag on the counter and pulled out 2 cans.." should be "two cans". it's a formality, but the digits can be distracting unless they're describing large numbers. Great fic, and I look forward to more from you!
Date: November 03, 2006 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 6: Being a Jerk
Can't wait for the next chapter to see if she meets him.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, I wasnt wondering should I just let them reunite last chapter but to me, that would do injustice to all the pining and patience and Ram moments Jim had to put up with. He deserved to vent and feel insecure and for Pam to know how much pain he was in.
Date: November 03, 2006 12:21 pm Title: Chapter 4: It Hurts
Enough. Don't spin this out any more. They've had their tears and their recriminations; it's time for the reconciliation. Go for it!
Author's Response: I appreciate your commentary, however, this is my story and I have ideas of where I want to go with it.
Date: November 01, 2006 04:41 pm Title: Chapter 5: Stop Running
yes!!! a happy ending!!! i'm such a sucker for a good jam story, great job!
Date: November 01, 2006 08:31 am Title: Chapter 4: It Hurts
While I definitely think Pam needs to make the first move, I'm really liking the fact that you are writing Jim to be a bit more flexible in what he's willing to do as well. Looking forward to more!
Date: November 01, 2006 07:05 am Title: Chapter 4: It Hurts
OMG, when I saw there were TWO new chapters, I thought it was safe to read, but I am now FREAKING out waiting for the next one!
Great premise & I am just enthralled at how these two will work out the pain and awkwardness ~~ you are exploring some new depths with Jim ~~ and I am not usually much on the angst, so, well done!
Date: October 31, 2006 06:08 pm Title: Chapter 2:Too sick to Mingle
Best lines ever - "He felt his heart beat so fast it almost jumped out of his chest, and for a second, he imagined a beating heart skipping across the floor and throwing itself out the window. Or better yet towards Pam, who would probably recognize it and step on it again" The first line made me smile, the second line made me sad. Can't wait for chapter 3.
Date: October 30, 2006 09:33 am Title: Chapter 1: The Merger
Interesting premise for a story. Hope you continue - I'd like to see where your version of the merger goes.
Date: October 29, 2006 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 1: The Merger
"illiciting" -- no. Common mistake. You want "eliciting".
She looked beautiful. And his heart was relieved, full, and in pain. And she was in Stamford. In his office. At his job. And in his life again.
GREAT ending. Heh. Poor Jim.