Date: July 09, 2019 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love supportive Phyllis! The aunt description is so apt. Annoyed Karen was also great & very fitting. Strangely, like Michael, I too am not feeling a great fondness for Toby in this story...
I was so glad to see you’d updated this, I’m a sucker for someone is in hospital & it forces everyone to confront their feelings story!
Date: July 09, 2019 01:20 pm Title: Chapter 2
Nice descriptions on how everything is going. As if Jim doesn't have enough emotional turmoil going on right now we add this on top of things. However it's often in times of stress that we realize what's really important. Hopefully Jim comes to some of those realizations soon too.
Date: June 26, 2019 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love this! From the idea, to the execution, I am on board. Your description of Jim 2.0 & the process to get there was so, so real. I’m so excited to see where you go with this!
Author's Response: Thank you! More to come very soon!
Date: June 26, 2019 10:08 am Title: Chapter 1
So far not bad. One quick thing, at the time David Wallace was the CFO, Chief Financial Officer, not a VP. Just a quick point of clarification is all.
Other than that, nice work. It kinda hurts to see Jim's thought process here. That he's trying to embrace Evolved Jim even when he knows it's not who he really is or wants to be. Then to have that all come screeching to a halt when Toby called, just shows that even more.
Looking forward to seeing how this pans out.
Thank you for the correction! As I was typing it I knew it didn’t sound right but I just pressed on. Clearly, that was not the right decision!
Date: June 26, 2019 06:33 am Title: Chapter 1
It definitely doesn't suck! It's interesting that you've given Jim (2.0?) such a dislike of Toby. But I like the premise and I'm interested in where you go next. Please get him off the road; probably not great to be driving in this emotional circumstance!
Author's Response: Thank you! Maybe subconsciously Jim knows Toby’s feelings for Pam? Or once someone takes on a managerial position they automatically start disliking him? Either way, I kind of love Jim being snappy with Toby, (just like Michael) since Jim is such a mellow guy.