Date: September 06, 2019 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love this. I like Jim getting punched and Dwight and Michael being themselves and Karen just getting out of the way. So good.
Author's Response: Thanks Comfect! I’m a big fan of Karen “just getting out of the way” 😉
Date: September 06, 2019 09:57 am Title: Chapter 2
This was so good! You told a lot in a relatively short story, which isn't always easy. I like how it felt - the characters were true to themselves. It was dramatic, funny and steamy. A really great read.
Author's Response: I’m far better off squeezing a bit into a one or two shot because I’ll definitely finish it - longer stories are a bit more of a commitment! I’m glad it didn’t feel like I shoved too much in all at once. Thank you!
Date: September 06, 2019 05:11 am Title: Chapter 2
Loved the way this wrapped up. Jim was floundering there at the start. Good on Dwight for that phone call. He, Jim, and Pam really do make up a fine trio of an odd friendship and you did that justice here.
I really liked that moment on the couch where Jim realized what he'd done to Pam on Casino Night. Asked her to give more than she could. Great way to write that. It added a lot of depth to Jim's character and the scene. Of course I'm glad the outcome was such a far cry from Casino Night as well. Good on Jim and Pam to get a lot of the big stuff cleared up before moving on to other more enjoyable activities.
Kevin was a treat too. Not only last chapter where he was right there to fend off Roy, but this time too. He may be a little creepy at times, but he's got a good heart and he's loyal to his friends. That came across well.
Wonderful job with this one. Thanks for sharing it.
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat
“Fine odd trio” is such an apt description of Pam/Jim/Dwight...
I enjoyed adding Kevin into this, so it’s nice to hear he was a welcome addition.
Thanks so much for your lovely review - I always look forward to hearing your thoughts 😊
Date: September 05, 2019 07:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
"Cocktails with a twist." I see what you did there.
Here's the thing, Jenna. I've already told you how well you write Jim and Pam. You write them SO well. But right now, I just need to stop and give you the appreciation necessary for your Dwight and Michael because they are always, always perfect. And this is no exception. "The store poisoned David Wallace" and "give me back my shirt" These are priceless lines and deserving of a shout out.
You also really write Karen well. It can be hard, when you don't like her, to write her fairly, but you always manage to hit the right notes with her. I love that we're kicking this story off with her already a bit wary of Scranton and Pam, and everything that goes along with it.
Listen, you already know I love the whole bulk of this chapter - Pam's confession and Jim overhearing it and Roy's reaction - of course I do. So I'm just going to keep praising you for your use of the secondary characters because you write them all incredibly well.
Kevin is the MVP of this chapter. Who woulda thought? And then the bartender's comment about letting him know if this was going to be a weekly event? I love Oscar being protective of Pam, too.
"Jim shot Pam a pleading final look that he hoped communicated everything left unsaid, especially that they weren’t done with this conversation. She gave him her best nervous smile in response, her lips twisting in much the same way they had when she’d whispered me too on the casino night and for a split second he’d thought maybe everything he was hoping for would eventuate." Well GD, Jenna. I can't wait to see how this conversation goes!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Coley, I discovered your little review influx during my lunch break today and saying that it made my day would be an understatement... Thank you for being the bright spot in a rather dull work day.
Dwight and Michael are SO fun to write. I’m glad my attempts at them seem to work. I hope you love how they (& potato salad - the real hero of this story) factor into the next chapter.
I completely agree about Karen. It’s hard to strike that balance and not make her into a bit of a horrible caricature... She’s a polarizing character - there’s not much middle ground in opinions...
Oh god, I hope the conversation lives up to expectations. I keep going back and changing it, but hopefully I’ll have it up sooner rather than later...
Date: September 04, 2019 03:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great storytelling. This seems like a very believable scenario that would have happened had Jim shown up to the bar that night. I can easily see Roy acting exactly like that. The same goes for Pam.
Jim's introspection on the events of the past year is also on point. I like that he's finally thinking rather than just reacting. Though I am a little sad it took Roy's fist to literally knock some sense into the guy.
Can't wait to see what comes next.
Author's Response: Thanks Warrior! I’m glad you found the scenario believable. I was hoping it would seem true enough to all their characters. I so love your note about literally knocking some sense into him!
Date: September 04, 2019 07:07 am Title: Chapter 1
JB! This is so great. My favourite part is where you write: "For a split second the world stood still." I could absolutely see it happening.
Also, I like your Pam.
Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles! I’m glad you liked my Pam - I was a bit worried about having her character feel natural in this. I didn’t want to make her too bold, or have her fall apart too much. I was hoping the balance I struck was okay.