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Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2020 12:00 am Title: Chapter 33: Arrival at the Park

Double review because soon after my first review I realized something. It's one thing to make a suggestion to an author, it's another to write the story for them. So if my last review came across as pushy or anything like that, I apologize. It's your story to write and you're doing a masterful job with it.

Author's Response: Not a problem! Didn't feel pushy, just like you wanted to convey where the scene had led you in your head.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09, 2020 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 33: Arrival at the Park

Delightful banter. Good on Jim to get one back at Pam for her making him go all agog since her arrival.

At first I was thinking Jim was going to offer to give her a foot rub. Her being hesitant because she's ticklish. Jim saying something sweet like he'd never tickle her if she didn't want to be tickled. Him giving her a nice foot rub, and then her falling asleep on his shoulder or some such. Ah well, maybe later.

One thing I haven't mentioned thus far. Of all the Pam-goes-to-Australia fics I've read, I really love this one because the story doesn't end there at the airport or wherever Jim and Pam meet. So thanks for giving us what is so much more to the story. It's a ton of fun.

Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate the feedback! I don't see that happening right out in public like that, and I don't think Pam would be OK with that if it did, so that's why it didn't.

Reviewer: JennaBennett Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09, 2020 09:17 pm Title: Chapter 33: Arrival at the Park

So much flirtation and I am living for it! This is so much nicer than a season of angst... I wish I still had jellybeans...

Author's Response: Thank you! I also wish we'd gotten more of their early moments as a couple and less angst...but I guess one sells better.

Reviewer: Merria Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09, 2020 07:00 pm Title: Chapter 33: Arrival at the Park

Fun!
Jellybean

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

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