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Reviewer: Duchess Cupcake Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: May 07, 2020 09:59 am Title: Chapter 1

Scenes like this were created for writers like you.

First of all, EVERYTHING here is so realistic and in character that I am 100% committing this to canon. It's not even UP for negotiation.

Can I just say that I appreciate how you always give us a line or two to take away and carry with us forever? Cause when Jim says, "But apparently, I’m not allowed to be happy anymore” I immediately fell in love with this fic.

And you didn't miss a single beat of capturing every second of those deleted scenes but gave us so many original moments. That unspoken reconciliation was just too good for words. And that moment in the parking lot - well, BOTH parking lots ;) - so well done.

I have seen that sequence of deleted scenes too many times to count and my imagination would never take me where I wanted to go. Here. Here is where I apparently wanted to go. So thank you. SO perfectly them, so perfectly written.

PS. I did a literal spit take when they pulled into the Kohl's parking lot. I didn't know it was really going to happen. Kohl's cash IS like gold.

Reviewer: BigTuna Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2020 09:27 am Title: Chapter 1

Reading this really put a skip(py) in my step. I’ll reread it again in a Jif. If I could fly like Peter Pan, I’d use this as my happy thought.

Sorry, had to get it out of my system. Love it as per usual! Hot and sweet and very them. In fact I’m gonna go ahead and insert this into my head as canon.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2020 06:50 am Title: Chapter 1

Great story AG. One of the major draws to Jim and Pam is how they feel much like a real couple going through ups and downs together. Not just fall in love, get married, live happily every after. You did great justice to that real feeling.

Even after being married and having Cece they still have things to work on, and they do. Just like a real healthy marriage should be.

Of course the afternoon delight in the parking lot was fun to read too, but from where I sit it's the fact that you wrote Jim and Pam working their way through this with each other that seems a lot more intimate.

Reviewer: JennaBennett Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2020 02:52 am Title: Chapter 1

How did you take that ten second scene & turn it to this?! Seriously. So good. I love the backstory - I love that it’s somehow all PB&J jokes. Literal perfection. I can’t get over the life you gave to the deleted scenes to turn it into all this, with a little argument over grocery shopping becoming Pam scared that they will end up like her parents, to Jim being the sweetest dork ever, to reconnecting in all the best ways. If you wanted to provide extra context for every deleted scene ever, I could get behind that...

Reviewer: Comfect Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2020 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 1

I enjoyed the heck out of this. Very nice B-roll usage and I loved the way Jim immediately tried to get back in her good graces because he realized this isn't something he needs to "win"--or rather, that he wins if she's happy too.

Reviewer: Coley Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2020 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 1

"But apparently, I'm not allowed to be happy anymore." I can hear this in Jim's voice and it's so good.

That whole fight is so painfully real and like, I'm on Team Pam here because I 100% believe Jim doesn't write things down on the grocery list. And then to bring in her mom and have it spiral into a Whole Thing without either of them really knowing how? Ugh, always keep writing because you wove this story together from so few details so perfectly. (I'm using the word 'so' a lot in this review.)

Jim's escalating puns and messages to try and get her to smile might be my favorite part of this story and for something so cute and fun to flip to pulling into a Kohl's parking lot? I'm not mad about any of it.

"They didn’t really do this--the whole apology thing. Not since Roys and Karens and misunderstandings. But this was growing up. So he let her apologize." I LOVE this! Its so perfectly them.

It had nothing to do with peanut butter. I don't know how you did this, but I love the whole thing a lot. And we all needed a laugh like pencil dick today.

Reviewer: SprinklesTheCat Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2020 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 1

This was great! Jim's lines to make Pam laugh were hilarious. And oh yes the smut was very good too. Your dialogue is excellent. And I had forgotten all about pencil dick. Leave it to Meredith...

Reviewer: Guten Schriftsteller Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2020 05:49 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oooh hot damn this was good. Love the idea that the smut and the angst all led to a better stronger relationship over one small issue and how you fill in the blanks from an episode that really lacked in any good Jam moments.

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