Date: March 31, 2020 06:03 am Title: Chapter 1
This is precious and pretty perfect. I love the imagery of her on the DM rooftop in her dress and sneakers, and Jim finding her there! I like to picture all the different ways Pam might have called off the wedding, and I find the way you’ve written it to be believable. Also. That sucks so hard for your aunt! It’s pretty crazy all that really happened to someone, and now this!
Author's Response: Thanks BT! Uhhhh, feel free to write all the ways you picture Pam calling off her wedding! I would 12/10 be here for that.
Date: March 29, 2020 01:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like the way "I can't " was used in this story much better! :)
I like that Pam goes to the roof to find calm, comfort and perspective. And that it finds her there, too! (Thank you, Phyllis! )
Thanks for writing!
(And, oh, your poor aunt! I hope she finds the same! )
Author's Response: Thank you! I love the way you worded this with Pam finding perspective (& it finding her too) - what a lovely way to summarize it.
Date: March 29, 2020 10:54 am Title: Chapter 1
I was all in at the first sentence. My heart broke a little at Pam realizing she'd settled for the VA Hall and still ended up with something even less desirable than that.
"She shut down the little voice that whispered that if she and Roy were basically already married and this was the best it ever got, well…" Damn. JB. You know how I always tell you that you write fluff and fun so incredibly well? You're also really good at driving those angsty little arrows directly into my heart.
And then we get to the Pam and Isabel scene and this time her "I can't's" are SO MUCH better than the ones she said during Casino Night.
Here's why you don't need to worry about the rooftop scene. I LOVE the visual of Pam in her wedding dress and coat and sneakers. And honestly, June 10th is barely summertime. Most of the June weddings I've been to, the weather hasn't cooperated and it's been cold and I've wished I had my winter coat with me instead of a tiny loosely crocheted cardigan. So this detail didn't phase me at all.
It started with meeting Jim on the rooftop. THAT is my favorite ending line in a fic of the year so far.
This was great. I needed this story this morning, so thank you!
Author's Response: And I needed this review today. So, seriously, thank you!
Date: March 28, 2020 11:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow I cannot even imagine these situations happening at my wedding. If the universe starts sending signs like this, count me out! I love how Jim find her on the roof. Finally something good happening for Pam. It made me so happy to read disaster after disaster. Great story!
Author's Response: Haha, I’m glad my wedding day was nothing like this too! I would have lost my mind. Although, my husband did turn into something of a groomzilla planning the thing which was mostly hilarious!
Date: March 28, 2020 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
Firstly, I'm so sorry about your aunt :( I hope she will be okay.
Secondly, this story is so sweet. And sad. And... I don't know, the way Pam tried to persuade herself that everything was fine (except, it wasn't) just heart-wrenching; especially, the 'her wedding er wedding was essentially being reduced to prom' line. I'm glad she finally called off the whole thing (and Roy's reaction - a final dot to that page of her life). And Jim finding her... awwww, just awwww. I'm melting behind the monitor because I'm a sucker for sweetness, tenderness, and understanding without the words in the relationships (especially their!). And I like that the story ended with an ellipsis... I'm a sucker for this too :)
Thirdly, thank you for your writing! My day started with your story, and thus it's going to be a good day!
Author's Response: Her wedding has been postponed until October so fingers crossed it can go ahead then. I hope she has a lot better luck this time around!
Date: March 28, 2020 09:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Glad your cousin exists but that's some freaky stuff. Nice transposition though. Worked well.
Author's Response: I’m glad my cousin exists too! I’m also glad my mother fills me in on things that have happened because truth is stranger than fiction sometimes...
Date: March 28, 2020 09:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Got me going there for a moment. What with Pam being five minutes away from the start of the ceremony and all. Still, at least she did finally listen to all the signs. Good for having Isabel there too to give her some much needed encouragement.
Roy fuming and throwing a bottle seems very appropriate. Well, I'm sure that little bit was also probably inspired by his outburst in Poor Richards, so yeah good use of theme.
I love that Jim shows up there. "Putting some stuff BACK into my desk..." Nice subtle bit of a line there. Glad to see him come to his senses early and be there for Pam. Also that he's there first offering friendship and support, not "Well you're single now, date me." He's saying "that must have all sucked. I'm here for you." I like that a lot.
One critique though. Are we still considering the abortive wedding in this story to have happened on June 10th? If so, that would have been in the middle of summer here in the States. Thus it seems odd that it's described as a winter setting or that Pam has a coat on. Something that stuck out to me.
Other than that, nice little one-shot. Great to see Pam's thoughts as this all went on.
I’m so glad you caught that line (back into his desk). I figured Jim hearing that Pam had called off her wedding would be enough of a prompt to have him think that perhaps he’d acted a little too rashly with the decision to disappear to Stamford. I can picture him trying to undo it immediately...
My Australian brain totally slipped with the June 10th thing. Whoops. In my head I definitely just went with June 10th being winter - as it is here and forgot to Americanize it. Whoops. Whoops. Whoops. And here was I a little impressed I remembered to spell “mom” the American way. I should go back and change it, but I kind of liked the imagery that came with the cold. Can we just pretend Pam was getting married in December? Ah, I’m so annoyed that I missed that...
Thank you for your wonderful review, as always!
Date: March 28, 2020 09:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, I just love that Jim is mature to offer to be Pam's friend when she needed one rather than mope. I also love that the fall out with Roy was not dragged out and made the focus. Another great story from a great author.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your lovely review! I figured it would be a little insensitive of Jim to come on too strong on the day Pam calls off her wedding...