Date: May 22, 2020 03:01 am Title: Chapter 1
Look, I haven’t seen Breakfast at Tiffany’s and I know that’s basically unforgivable. I do like the song, does that count for something? Would I help if I said this chapter made me want to watch the movie?
I’m intrigued to see where you go with this! (& obviously I have no idea what to expect). I like this confident Pam and man of few words Jim.
Author's Response: I can find it in my heart to forgive you, and the fact that you like the song makes it a whole lot easier. It definitely helps, I hope to nudge you towards watching it! Thank you so much!
Date: May 21, 2020 09:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Colour me intrigued, I've never seen or read any of the inspiration, and now I can't because I don't want to spoil anything!
I really liked the way you wrote Jim's listening, because weirdly it still felt like a conversation.
Looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
Author's Response: Ah, well donít worry, I wonít be basing it entirely off of it! Thank you so much :)
Date: May 21, 2020 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very interesting premise. I've never seen the movie in question, so I'll just let this fic wash over me. A very different kind of banter between them. Very curious to see where this one will end up.
Author's Response: Yep! Pamís taking on a different role here, but it fits with the motive of the story, so I hope the difference in her (and Jim) is a good one!
Date: May 21, 2020 09:15 am Title: Chapter 1
Very interesting versions of the characters: I'm not used to Pam being the one who's more talkative, for instance. Looking forward to where you go with it.
Author's Response: Itís a bit of a mix up now for sure! But I hope the differences are easy to get used to, thank you :)
Date: May 21, 2020 06:39 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh. My. God.
As I was reading this, I could HEAR Holly's voice saying every single word Pam uttered. You've hit that tone perfectly... every time she called Jim "Darling" I died a little bit more.
I can't even pick a favorite bit of dialogue, it's all so good, but I particularly enjoyed this:
"“Nonsense.” She waved her hand dismissively at me, still too busy with her sketchbook to look my way. “I can pay attention to other things. How miserable to spend one’s life thinking about love. Look at art, have a party, go outside for heaven’s sake.”
“But you must think about it sometimes?”
“You ask a lot of questions. What do you do for a living?”
I told her I was a writer, trying not to dwell on the fact that she’d ignored my question completely. Perhaps that was the kind of thing she did, ignored things that she didn’t want to, or couldn’t answer."
And then this: "“Would you write about me?”
“If I wished to.”
“And do you?”
“Look at who’s asking a lot of questions now.”"
I cannot see where you go with this from here. Selfishly, I have scenes from the movie I'd love to see you recreate, but I'm going to keep my mouth shut and let you write your story however you want because this is already off to such a gorgeous start that I have no doubt you'll do the whole theme justice.
Author's Response: I had to put my Holly Golightly hat on for this! Iím so so glad you enjoyed the dialogue, I feel like that was the most important part of the story to get right. Thank you so much, Iíd love to recreate some of my favourite movie scenes too :)