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Reviewer: Comfect Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: August 15, 2020 09:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

Very good use of the song. I'm glad to see this song being so inspiring on the board! Well done.

Reviewer: DoomGoose Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: August 02, 2020 03:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

You did a really great job setting the mood in this piece. I look forward to any more works that you may produce!

Author's Response: Thanks! <3 

Reviewer: nicemorningtoo Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2020 09:01 pm Title: Chapter 1

"Her hand is three inches from the phone before she remembers she can’t call Jim anymore to tell him she finally followed through on something."

This line really just punched me in the gut. This is beautiful, as heart wrenching as it is. It really shows how each of them were feeling throughout season 3 perfectly. I hope you write more soon!!

Author's Response: Thank you for reading!

Reviewer: JennaBennett Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 31, 2020 01:58 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is me trying is so very JAM. I’m so glad exile has pulled you back into fic.

“With a hug so fierce he felt his carefully taped-together heart smash back into its original broken pieces.” This is beautiful writing. I definitely feel like this moment would have crumbled some of the carefully constructed barricades that Jim had built up.

Oh I love the parallel of both Pam and Jim starting to drift towards each other’s houses, but neither having the courage to actually reach out.

“Her hand is three inches from the phone before she remembers she can’t call Jim anymore” My heart.

“She walks past the fabric softener and pretends it means nothing.” Help. I have been attacked. This is heart wrenching. I love a good reference.

You captured the angst of Season 3 so well, and the spark of hope with Pam’s Beach Game speech. Welcome to MTT! I hope more inspiration finds you.

Author's Response: *flails* Hello! I love your fics! This review is much appreciated. :) 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 31, 2020 06:31 am Title: Chapter 1

Welcome to MTT. Glad to have you. Great job for your first fic here. You really captured all the pain and angst of S3 really well. Both in the things they said and did, but also if one reads between the lines in the things they're not saying or doing. Not talking to each other, not being brave enough to say what they're really feeling, being scared of being hurt. Great job.

That is until that last passage with the coal walk. The fear has been burned away and at long last they can finally really look at each other. And of course we all know what happens after that. Well done. Looking forward to seeing what else you come up with.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks for your review! :) 

Reviewer: boredhswf Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 31, 2020 04:59 am Title: Chapter 1

Ooooh, I really, really like this. I think the idea that they both tried to reach each other before the Merger but stalled out is so on point and you wrote that beautifully.

"She threw the post-it note with his address in her purple ink handwriting out the window, watching it fly down over the town below." --- I mean, that is exactly what she would do.

"Like it’s still a gazillion pieces of tiny glass, but at least she can breathe for a second without being stabbed in gut-wrenching pain." Love this!

Welcome to MTT! I can't wait to see more from you.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! 

Reviewer: SprinklesTheCat Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 31, 2020 04:04 am Title: Chapter 1

This is so good! I wondered what great stories would come from that song.

Author's Response: Thank you! <3

Reviewer: NobleLandMermaid Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 30, 2020 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

Let me be the first to welcome to MTT! I love that you came out of fanfic retirement for our little fandom and even brought some TSwift. This song immediately made me think Season 9 Pam but now you’ve convinced me it fits S3 better (or at least as well. Love how you fill the gaps of canon, every bit I can easily imagine actually happening. And that last segment packs a great emotional punch. I really hope to see more from you!

Author's Response:

Ah, thank you so much! I love your stories; this is quite the honor for my first review.


I think I chose S3 because I am a masochist obsessed with massive angst. But now we need to see the S9 Pam fic! *hint*

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