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Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: October 08, 2020 11:52 am Title: Medical Leave

Good discussion there with Jim and Pam at the start. I also really liked that Brent knew the Jim and Pam needed their privacy for something like that. Also to keep Brian from doing anything. Yes Jim and Pam are fighting, but from how I read it neither was in physical danger from the other. Thus Brain is overracting.

Nice change of pace to have all the electrontic communications with everyone. Really nice to see that everyone cares so much, including Dwight. Also with Jim's last message thread it seems we have the first glimmers of the Real Jim coming back. The fun loving prankster, not the overstressed jerk he became.

Nice job.

Author's Response:

Thank you!  Brian, despite everything, genuinely cares for them both.  However, his bias is made clear, intentional or not.  Him butting in would have escalated the conflict, and would have probably made Jim feel even more guilty.  And Brent is not unobservant of this either, especially with Alyssa in the picture.

With the various calls, I wanted to show how genuinely upsetting it is for the rest of the office, considering they know him well by this point and seeing him so unwell would affect the office in some way, even the new guys.  As for that last message, it pretty much drops the pretense and makes Jim and Dwight friends.  They've always cared about each other in a way, but now it's apparent.  And, yes, their repertoire will still be as strong as ever.

Thanks for the review, as always!

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed [Report This]
Date: October 07, 2020 09:50 pm Title: Medical Leave

I'm really glad you gave Helene her say - Pam's Mom 2.0 gets kind of a bad rap in fanfic (and, you know, canon), and it's good to acknowledge what a HUGE piece of their daily life she is.

I love a good epistolary, and my heart just warms at the thought of everyone rallying behind Jim. And thank you for preserving the you are everything line... that would've been a shame to lose.

Re: formatting - I've been playing around recently with ifaketextmessage.com to help create images for this sort of thing. It's clunky, but might be worth a shot for the future?

Author's Response:

Thanks!  Hm, I wasn't aware about Helene's bad rep.  To be honest, as much as I love Michael, he ROYALLY messed up there.  No matter what you think of Pam's reacting while they were dating (personally I'm with Jim in that she's overreacting but her fear is not unfounded), he deserved the slap.  Another great moment.  But yeah, Linda Purl played her well.

Oh, "You are... everything" had to stay.  It's one of the most noteworthy moments of their relationship and it's a reminder of what he's fighting for.

Hm... there aren't any other text message style segments in the piece, but I'll definitely look into that website for future fiction I write.

Thanks for the review, as always! 

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