1 [Report This]Date: August 12, 2021 07:22 pm Title: Chapter 7
I don't know how I am just reading this now. Such an intense plot, it has me completely engrossed. You describe the settings, characters and emotions so beautifully I can envision it all. Roy really ratchets up the intrigue and suspense, he seems like a devious, disturbed and dangerous guy. Love how Pam had to take the bull by the horns and ask Jim out, clueless Jim is an adorable Jim. Also love that there were nerves and some awkwardness on their date, that is more realistic than declarations of love from the start.
Pam has also been a tad clueless. Roy has been over-the-top from the beginning, the mailbox note, showing up at her work constantly, the gift, limo, all of the red flags flapping in the wind. I hope there is more soon!!
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2021 10:35 am Title: Chapter 7
Oblivious Jim is so cute. I loved their date and I loved that Pam didn’t immediately get all gushy and romantic and that they discussed Mark. I think that was super realistic and really well written. And friggin ROY you write him so well! Obviously there’s something going on there but clearly he is a great manipulator when things don’t go his way. Good for Singer, I wish he’d bitten Roy’s entire hand off.
Also, I truly love Jim as a mechanic. I can see it so clearly. And him taking of his coveralls? GIRL.
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2021 10:35 am Title: Chapter 7
Oblivious Jim is so cute. I loved their date and I loved that Pam didn’t immediately get all gushy and romantic and that they discussed Mark. I think that was super realistic and really well written. And friggin ROY you write him so well! Obviously there’s something going on there but clearly he is a great manipulator when things don’t go his way. Good for Singer, I wish he’d bitten Roy’s entire hand off.
Also, I truly love Jim as a mechanic. I can see it so clearly. And him taking of his coveralls? GIRL.
1 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2021 07:39 am Title: Chapter 7
I was so nervous I was going to get to the end here and Jim had been waiting outside to surprise her with breakfast then see Roy stumbling out. So thank you for not hurting me haha.
This was an amazing update. You do a wonderful job of clearly describing every event that I feel as if I'm watching a movie.
I don't remember where this is entirely set. I know you mentioned them going to Brooklyn, but I honestly have this playing in my mind like a Nicholas Sparks movie. Like they're in Georgia and there's the Spanish Moss trees everywhere.
Anyway, beautifully written as always! I'm glad Roy is out of the picture for the most part.
I thought it was adorable when Jim stumbled over his words and his thoughts of Pam having flaws but still being the most beautiful woman he'd seen. My heart can't contain it all! So perfect!
Date: February 10, 2021 10:26 am Title: Chapter 7
A couple of things I really liked about this:
You diving directly into the date... felt for a second like Jim's concern could have led to a fight, and I was glad to see Pam recognize it for what it was.
Your continued interpretation of Jim as Not The Best At Everything and in particular not the smoothest guy in the world out on a date with Pam for the first time. It's just a version of Jim we don't see very often, and it's fun to see you play it out. I love him totally botching his precanned line.
Singer biting Roy.
And the way you've developed Roy here... yes, it feels knowing the genre like he's bad news, and we've certainly got some signs in the story that he's bad news, but you've made it very clear why *Pam* wouldn't necessarily think he's someone she should avoid like the plague. There are red flags, but you've also given us context for how they might be ignored. (Plus you've let Pam see them at least as pink flags... she's noticing some of his less savory aspects and they are definitely bothering her.)
Anyhow. Looking forward to seeing where you go next with it.
1 [Report This]Date: February 09, 2021 04:46 pm Title: Chapter 7
Wow! Lots going on here. First of all I think it's great that Danny had that heart-to-heart with Jim. Just the kind of brotherly kick in the ass Jim needed. Paid off too.
Their drinks at Creed's was so lovely. They're finally really talking and low and behold rather than things unravelling they're still them. You did have me going there when Pam said that Jim was a nice guy. However when she reused the line as a way to show her interest in him was brilliant. As was Jim being about as dense as a rock. Wonderfully cute there.
Their first date was a treat as well. Nothing big and flashy, just simple and sweet. Adorkable Jim was great. I get why he's nervous. It's been a big thing in his mind and now it's really happening. Hopefully he relaxes a bit as we go on.
Roy showing up like that though. Whoo boy. Yeah a roller coaster of emotions on his part. Anger, jeaoulsy, more anger, and then yeah he's being vulnerable but doing so in the worst way. After all that he goes for the sympathy card? I mean yeah it sucks for him, but still, low blow.
Pam, you're to nice for your own good sometimes. Bestest Boy Ever award keeps going to Singer. Seriously, I love that dog. He's the best part of this fic. All the good boy treats to Singer.
Only halfway done? Sounds like the twists and turns aren't over yet. I still don't like Roy and don't think he'll really take this lying down. Also hope to see Jim and Pam bloom some more. Great update.
Date: February 09, 2021 02:07 pm Title: Chapter 7
AHHHH I loved their date and awkward Jim and that she understands she wants to be with him!! All the feels.
But ugh, Roy. I just know something is going to happen with him and it gives me anxiety but I am here for it!! Hahaha I loved this chapter!!
1 [Report This]Date: February 09, 2021 01:56 pm Title: Chapter 7
Okay first of all, I laughed out loud at your description of Creed's bar. INFLATABLE DATES LOLLL.
Oh, sweet, thoughtful, awkward Jim. I loved reading about their date. The way they both think of Mark feels very real, and I appreciated that aspect of their time together.
I have a feeling that things with Roy won't be patched up that smoothly. I worry a bit for Pam, and I don't think I'm alone in that. (Looking at you, Mechanic Jim.) You have me hooked, my friend!