Date: November 10, 2021 01:28 pm Title: Chapter 47
You don’t give yourself enough credit
because this was a good chapter.
It’s seems as though Pam was having a panic attack that actually helped her have
a breakthrough.
It was like once she made it through the attack she knew that she was going to be okay,
no matter what happens with Roy.
Date: November 09, 2021 11:27 am Title: Chapter 47
Hard chapter to read, and I mean that in a good way. I thought you did really well exploring just how at the end of her rope Pam is, and the puzzle pieces coming together for Jim.
Date: November 08, 2021 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 47
Really liked Jim here. He doesn't know what to do so he's scrambling as much as she is. Trying to do anything to break the cycle of panic she's got going. I could feel his dread, anxiety, and worry waiting for the ambulance.
Speaking of that, nice job with the paramedics. You got the medicine right. A lot of that is exactly what I've done many times on similar calls. Check vitals, cardiac monitor, 12 lead ECG, even mentioned about slowing her breathing down to get her CO2 back under control. Well done!
Feels like the medics were able to give her the break she needed. To break out of the loop her mind was stuck in. And when she does break out of it, she reaches back for Jim. Loved that. You say this chapter fought you. You came out on top. This one was great. Wish I had a jellybean left to give this one.
Date: November 08, 2021 01:42 pm Title: Chapter 47
Absolutely nothing wrong with this chapter. You conveyed Pam’s alarm and distress extremely well, and Jim’s seeming hopelessness that he can’t help her. Really well written!