Date: September 29, 2020 11:11 am Title: Chapter 1
The fact that you can break my heart with 55 words is pretty incredible. Haha well done!
Thanks so much.
I took on this challenge to practice saying more with less to apply to my chapter story. Nice to see how effective a few words can be.
Date: September 29, 2020 05:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Holy crap. That was so good. I was so convinced this was going to have a happy ending. Boy was I wrong. You nailed this. Every line was perfect.
What I was going for...
My writing is usually a lot more wordy so it's nice to know what came still come across with few words.
Thanks so so much. Really means a lot.
Date: September 29, 2020 04:43 am Title: Chapter 1
So much love and heartbreak in so few words. Beautiful work!
Thank you for sharing!
Thanks so very much.
Good practice for me ---learning to say more with less. Trying to infuse into my longer works.
Date: September 29, 2020 12:16 am Title: Chapter 1
My heart. You told a lot of story in so few words here. Lovely writing.
Thank you so very much.
I honestly can say I was inspired by the talent I am coming across as I read more and more here.
I wanted to see if I could do it.
Date: September 28, 2020 10:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
As someone who shares that issue with wordiness, I love the constraints that the 55-word format puts on you - it's always way harder than you think it's going to be. (TWSS)
I think you did a really good job with conveying the hurt Jim is going through in the post-Casino Night days briefly and powerfully. "Darkness returns as daylight begins" and the way you're using the metaphor of light here is just really poetic. I liked this one!
First off - TWSS - always a laugh. It's said almost every day in my household now.
More importantly, thank you.
It was a challenge for me but your praise says I can do it.
Date: September 28, 2020 09:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
The back and forth with this one is just superb. Especially with how quick this is. Hope and heartache all wrapped up into one. Excellent job.
When praise comes from writers I admire, such as yourself, it is that much more affirming.
It was a real challenge for me but I'm glad I took it on.