Date: November 11, 2022 08:56 am Title: Chapter 19
Im a horrible person and just read this and my heart hurts in the best of ways. I think I was just as happy as Jim was when Pam showed up in the doorway. And then just the way they *are* when theyre together, it’s truly the best. I could read this story repeatedly and never get tired of it.
When her mouth brushed against his in a tease of a kiss and a promise of a lifetime together,
You have killed me once again, bt
Date: October 26, 2022 08:34 am Title: Chapter 19
I was so excited to see this update and it did not disappoint. The only negative thing is that it's over. This was such a unique plot, you managed to dump our characters in another time, place, and situation but they were all recognizable and themselves.
Cannot wait for what you write next!
Date: October 20, 2022 07:40 am Title: Chapter 19
I'll admit, I didn't do a review last chapter because it was such a gut punch and I don't do well with angst (though it was certainly very well-written). But this? Not only was this a happy ending, but it's an ideal one.
I kinda hate that we don't hear from the rest of them (besides Stanley, Phyllis, Toby and Michael) but I do appreciate Dwight and Angela getting together. I love the fact that you have her working for Michael, some things never change. And of course you're bringing Helene into it, of course you are.
The two of them reconnecting was very sweet, talking about everything that happened and how it affected them. I especially love them acknowledging that they know practically nothing about each other but want to pursue the relationship anyway.
This has been QUITE the roller coaster, but a fun one. Thanks for an engaging and well-crafted story, well done.
Date: October 19, 2022 10:25 pm Title: Chapter 19
Thank you for bringing this one in for a landing like this. After so long I admit I was starting to get worried. Pam just showing back up and not letting anything get in her way was just wonderful. Regardless of what Jim has to say she needs to see him again. And of course Jim feels the same way as soon as she rounds the door to his office. So yes apologies and explanations are in order but then they're right back to being Jim and Pam. Love it love it love it.
This whole story was a treat from start to finish. Trying to figure out whodunit. Watching the relationship between Jim and Pam start and grow. The way you worked in so many lines from canon in new ways, all delightful. A wonderful piece that you did a marvelous job with. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat.
Date: October 19, 2022 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 19
TUNA. ARE YOU KIDDING ME???????????
SO happy to see you posting again, and in particular putting a bow on this one.
The transition out from the gut-punch of the last line of the previous chapter to the first line of this one is amazing. (CRUEL, but amazing.)
Nice to see Jim having realized some of his professional dreams here, even at the cost of the part of himself who dreamed them.
Oh. Poor Karen. Trust canon Karen: you're dodging a bullet, girl.
Feels like Pam charging through the newsroom to get to Jim's office is a pretty big moment of growth here.
SHE GOT. A JOB. WITH MICHAEL. AND HE'S HITTING. ON HELENE. Now THAT'S good remixing of canon.
"It’s funny, isn’t it, how quickly we knew that we had something special without knowing each other very much at all? It scared me, to be honest with you. I was reluctant to fully share myself with you because our connection was so powerful that I was terrified of how badly it would hurt once it was severed.” Rude.
"“I’m sorry that it caused so much…” she hesitated, searching for the right word. “Misinterpretation.”" No, THAT'S good remixing of canon.
"His arms were always meant to be around her waist, her hands were always meant to be threaded through his hair, they were always meant to be in the hallway of an old building in Philadelphia reuniting like this, so wrapped up in each other that everything else fell away." SO rude.
I'm glad this Dwight got his happy ending. And still humbly request another story in this series with Jim and Dwight as reluctant detecting partners in different eras.
"Then it's a date." YAY.
Okay. Again. I am thrilled to see Noir!Jim and Pam get their happy ending, but moreso to read your writing again.
Date: April 14, 2022 02:17 am Title: Chapter 18
This story just keeps getting deeper and richer and it pulls me further and further under its spell. You did such a beautiful job conveying Pam’s hurt and his need to remedy it. Also, you are just incredible at weaving in that canon dialogue in such new and fresh ways.
We truly ALL benefited from Coley did and I love it. :)
Date: March 29, 2022 11:35 am Title: Chapter 18
Wow, a decisive Toby! That's not something we see every day. Pretty fun seeing Michael make a competent point and Toby shutting him down for a change. This is the Chad Flenderman Toby always dreamed of being. (And he *still* doesn't end up with Pam.) Also, his obsession with the notebook and getting answers from Jim *might* be legitimate, but also makes me think everyone's secrets aren't quite as safe as he claims.
"Ryan probably felt as though he could learn a lot from Toby, while also likely being frustrated with himself for having the wool pulled over his eyes for so long." SO TRUE.
You know things are out of hand when Dwight's telling you to be reasonable. Also, ouch. I feel Pam's hurt here, but on the other hand, I also thought it might be her.
“What am I supposed to say to that?” First of all, how dare you.
"seated next to the desk of a rather severe looking woman with olive skin and straight black hair" Abbondanza.
Again. Why? How? What did we do to deserve that? Please fix it?
Date: March 24, 2022 08:45 pm Title: Chapter 18
Why do you have to write so fantastically well and draw us all in to your stories and make us fall in love with everything you write and then break our hearts? I hate that i love it so much. If they truly never see each other again then Toby can arrest you too for killing me.
Date: March 24, 2022 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 18
First of all, I do know what I did and I still can’t believe it worked but I’m so glad it did.
Second of all, settle down, Toby. Geeze, the littlest amount of power and he gets all smudge. I was kinda hoping the gun would go off once it was back in its holster.
Thirdly, break my heart with this wedge driven between Jim and Pam why don’t you? This hurts. I get why she’s feeling a little cold toward him (I mean, I also thought she was the killer, sorry Pam) but it still hurts. That “what am I supposed to say to that?” How dare you. (Never stop.)
The police station scene - look. I don’t know if this was an intentional choice of words or a happy coincidence but you can’t just throw around a new interpretation of the sentence “I can’t.” and expect me to just be okay. That’s really rude.
You know what else is rude? That last sentence. (Seriously. Never stop.)
Thank you so much for posting this tonight! It was the fix I needed and you didn’t disappoint at all!
Date: March 24, 2022 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 18
So even though there's a confession, there still feels like a lot the needs unravelling here. Really interesting from Toby. Feels like this is the Toby that could have been had he a bit more power or had not been beaten down so much. Toby here is just bullrushing through everything and everyone. Still don't trust him. If the investigation had been going on for as long as it had, what was he waiting for to arrest Packer? Toby's inexplicable hatred of Jim seems to be not clearly explained, unless of course this Toby also has a crush on Pam and has seen how Pam and Jim hit it off so it's just plain old jealousy.
But the real crux of this chapter is the rift here that's opened up between Jim and Pam. How she feels so betrayed that he would even consider the thought she would have been the murderer. How she'll barely let him talk to her. And then to top it all off she finds out her father died. Then we fast forward days, weeks, months with no contact? Uuugh kill me now.
Also thank you for posting a new chapter to this so soon after Office Ladies broke down the episode that inspired this wonderful fic. Not sure if you intended that or not, but hearing Jenna and Angela break down that episode did make me long for an update for this one. So thanks for that.
Date: November 20, 2021 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 17
I’ve essentially forgotten how to read fic, but I need you to know that in the one moment I’ve had where I’ve felt lucid enough to function I wanted to catch up on my fave Savannah murder mystery.
This was perfect.
Date: November 16, 2021 10:15 am Title: Chapter 17
Starting out with a scene of genral chaos and for it to be brought to an end with Michael's man-child ways was just the touch of levity and call back to canon that was needed. Though I also had images of Steve's character in the movie "Evan Almighty," when Jim Carey's character is forcing Steve's character to speak gibberish on the air as a newscaster. I digress.
Very much feels like something out of a Poirot novel there in the libray. Jim figures out the picture and lays out the case. Finally it all makes sense and the truth is more tragic than anything. My heart breaks for Erin, what she'd gone through and what led her to do what she did.
Then yet another twist. Toby. Really he's just the worst here isn't he? If he's been undercover this long and everything that had been going on with Erin had been going on as long as it seems, it stands he could have broken cover quite a while ago and been able to get Packer on any number of charges. But no, he waits till Erin is at this low point to slap cuffs on her? Dick move of him for sure. And saying he's acting under the authority of Philly PD? You're a long way out of your juristidition there pal.
Also there are three dead men. Packer and Roy we know what happened to them. What about Creed? I may be mistaken, but have we figured out happened to him too? I may just need to go back and re-read, oh the horrors, to figure that one out.
Date: November 15, 2021 12:59 pm Title: Chapter 17
Okay, I didn't review last chapter because I was and still am busy, but after this... I have feelings. Good feelings, though.
I usually save this to the end, but... Erin. Holy balls. The motive, the method, the breakdown, it all makes sense. So much for my crackpot theories. That on top of her fate just tears my heart, the poor girl never had a chance, and it makes Packer out to be an even bigger POS, as it's something so in-character that no one thinks about. I love Erin in general so I'm just here hoping the best for her, like a reduced sentence or something. The moment with Meredith tugged on my heartstrings, as well.
And we finally get to Phyllis and Andy's deals. It's interesting you kept Andy/Angela for this, and her conveying the awkwardness of that tidbit was great. Michael and Dwight are, of course, a treat, and Michael talking over Stanley was a very subdued but appreciated S4 callback.
Toby: Undercover Cop was genius. As I read on, I figured he'd be a red herring, but not only does this contextualize his actions but also his treatment of Jim, the *investigative reporter*. Someone who could possibly sensationalize the situation to sell papers, an action he'd find repugnant. Question: considering he's the Mr. Greene of this story, *will* he go home and sleep with his wife?
Lastly, my favorite moment of stories in this genre is the culprit reveal, and Jim's poise, tact, and logical deduction was a great time. And, gotta admit, relieved it wasn't Pam. Hopefully they'll live happily ever after.
Like darjeelingandcoke, I look forward to Creed. Honestly, I'd love it if it wasn't Roy or Ryan and Kelly or any of them, just an explanation that is inherently Creed Bratton.
Can't wait to see how this wraps up!
Date: November 15, 2021 11:05 am Title: Chapter 17
Okay, so first things first - we're going to ignore all the guesses I got wrong, and focus on the fact that a) I predicted the staff's involvement VERY early, b) honed in on Erin early (although I then forgot about it) and c) I caught the hint that Packer had been sexually exploiting the staff. He's the worst and the world is better off without him, even in fictional form.
I thought this was a good twist - you clearly laid out all the information we needed to know it beforehand and provided a thoroughly in-character motive without making it obvious who you were pointing to... and her making such a public confession felt like it made emotional sense in a way that they sometimes don't in this genre.
This was a good use of Michael, I thought - comically buffoonish, but with a good heart. Just, one that he can only express through comic buffoonery. Dwight is charmingly Dwight-ish, too - I can easily picture his holding up this key piece of evidence and then getting flustered when no one else grasps the significance, and his immediately shifting away from his sense that Pam and Jim are guilty as soon as evidence is presented that reasonably suggests otherwise fits with his fundamental sense of honor.
Look, I'm Team Erin here - but Toby being an undercover cop actually makes me feel a bit better about some of his earlier actions. Turns out it was less petty and more a guy trying to do his job. Which is a new leaf for Toby! Also: in addition to not knowing what Packer was up to, the fact that Creed's death has not been explained has not escaped my notice. I'm on a roll, so I'm gonna go back to my suspicions of Schoolboy Rowe. Or possibly Kelly and Ryan? They seem like they're up to something. (Oooooh... or maybe Pam killed Creed! Not for any reason, just to see if she could!)
Date: November 14, 2021 04:46 pm Title: Chapter 17
ERIN?? Sweet, little, doesnt know how a camera works, Erin?? Literally the last person I expected, but that made the reveal so much better. But now I need the next chapter immediately because I also did NOT expect Toby to be a cop and for him to arrest her! What is happening and how do I get more of it?
Date: November 11, 2021 09:34 am Title: Chapter 16
I know I’ve probably said this before but the way you weave all of these details together and make it all so gripping and compelling is just so, so talented.
I’m literally holding my breath waiting to see what new twist or turn you are going to throw at us. I love it so much.
Also the rollercoaster of emotions Jim goes through in this chapter is brutal but that natural protective thing that kicks in at the end is absolutely delicious. I just adore this story.
Date: November 08, 2021 07:30 pm Title: Chapter 16
Twists, turns, twists, turns, and of course all the JAM angst and grief to go along with it. Along with a good dose of Office shenanigans.
Makes sense that Jim would be hesitant right then with Pam. He's trying to figure things out while also balancing his feelings for her. It's enough to make anyone feel a bit faint.
Interesting backstory with Meredith too. Packer clearly was an ass and had his mitts into all sorts of things. Lots of reasons why any number of people would want to off him.
Dwight there you go throwing a wrench into things as is your want. Though I really liked Jim's snarky comeback to Angela there. Nice to see her get back some of the grief she gives everyone else.
Jim punches Dwight! Then of course Dwight blurts out what he thinks has happened. Why does that feel like when he was trying to figure out who smoked the joint in the parking lot and coming to all the wrong conclusions. Being strong about it yet wrong about it all the same. Still this also feels like the stakes have ramped up once more. Especially if everyone is aware of Jim and Pam as portrayed here. Great job as always.