Date: January 17, 2021 10:36 pm Title: Chapter 10
Oh, the immediate shift in tone between the flirty flirt and the comic crashing into things and the legitimate fear to it being DWIGHT was fun to read. And I adored the Jim-Dwight dynamic here - bickering with mutual respect but mainly with mutual irritation. Jim having to remind Dwight *he* was the one who asked for help made me laugh out loud.
I still thinking someone from the staff must be in on it because of the notebook - or maybe that's what the person who initially moved the notebook WANTS us to think.
I'm guessing they found Packer's ledger of bets or blackmail. Some sort of record of his crimes/what he has on anyone. Heck of a cliffhanger to leave us on.
Date: January 17, 2021 07:46 pm Title: Chapter 10
Where do I even *begin*?! The bathroom scene was amazing. I'm so, so glad that they are finally able to express their feelings for one another. I'm sad that Dwight ruined it, but I guess he was better than Roy. My heart dropped whenever the notebook was declared missing, so I don't even want to know what Jim was feeling. I also feel like you want us to think Pam took it because she was the only one in the room that we know of, but I don't want to think Pam took it, so I'm not going to. If Pam ends up being the thieving murderer, then my life will be forever changed. And then that cliffhanger!! What did they find?! I don't even know where to begin guessing on what's in the book. Next chapter asap as possible, please.
Date: January 17, 2021 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 10
Please. The domesticity. I literally cannot get enough.
“with a delicate click that was just as loud as a slam” Rude of whoever it is to interrupt them so, but I’m not mad about this particularly brilliant piece of writing.
Even though, he’s right & I’m all for letting go of the minutia like tidying rooms after finding a corpse, I love that this is such a well done link to canon. It’s just there, without being smack you in the face obvious.
Dwight’s frustration with Jim is hilarious. It’s palpable & it is fantastic. He’s such a well written Dwight. “a wavering look of controlled calm on his face”
Oh. BT. What did I do to hurt you? I can’t believe you’re leaving me on a cliffhanger like that. I live in anticipation of your next update...
Date: January 17, 2021 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 10
Love the steamy moments with Jim and Pam. Dwight continues to be perfect, and the suspense is ratcheting up!
Date: January 17, 2021 06:10 pm Title: Chapter 10
A golden morning indeed. Had Dwight not knocked I'm sure there would have been a different kind of knocking for sure.
Jim's notebook is gone. There's a clear suspect for that. I was about to ask why Pam would take it, but there could be a host of reasons. However there's also lots of reasons to think it was someone else.
Detective Jim and Dwight are in fine form. Love how Dwight is basically taking charge with everything. Jim's head has been filled with visons of Pam so he feels a bit more scatterbrained. Feels like he needs someone like Dwight to keep him on track.
So what did we find? Should be good when we find out.
Date: January 17, 2021 06:09 pm Title: Chapter 10
“I don’t know what I’ll do, but I’ll think of something. You have to be taught, Mr. Halpert."
Hi I'd like to report a MURDER WHO THE--
“I pulled a body out of a lake, too, and my room doesn’t look like this.” Your Dwight is so perfect omfg.
Can I just say that I am 1000% Team Jim&Dwight: PI? They are so cleverly in character but work together like we see them in the later seasons of the show. I LOVE that you have them as buddies here. It's hilarious and perfect and the image of them walking through walls and sneaking around is just *chef's kiss.*
Also. I am worried about Jim's notebook. I'm concerned. I'm mad at you for stealing it.
Date: January 17, 2021 02:22 pm Title: Chapter 10
The JAM moments continue to be wholesome and Roy continues to be a roadblock. And a powerful one at that.
I am LIVING for this Schrupert dynamic. There aren't any pranks, no, but Jim's reactions to Dwight and his methods - and Dwight being *correct* about some of them despite Jim's position - is everything. And the fact that Dwight believes Jim about the notebook proves that these two understand each other better than they realize. It's been a thing with these two since Season 3 (which I'm rewatching for my own story) and it shines here.
Admittedly I still kinda want my Jim theory to happen, even though this chapter indicates that that theory's dead, but I did forget to mention my other (and more plausible) suspect last review: Phyllis. From the over-the-top fainting to her conversation with Stanley to her questioning Dwight's methods of interrogation and investigation, she has secrets and DAMNING ones, especially we know the least about her (well, besides Andy, but it's hard to take him seriously, even in this). Like Angela, she is married into wealth, but we know how Angela is in this story and there is motivation there to have Packer dead. Phyllis's motivation remains to be seen. It also adds to the canon Phyllis, being a kind motherly figure one moment and then full-on Regina George the next.
An interesting turn of events for sure. Well done!
Date: January 17, 2021 01:37 pm Title: Chapter 10
BT!! You can’t leave it like that! Ughhhhhh...
Also, when you’re done with this, can you please print and bind it and send it to my house so I can enjoy it for the rest of time? Because it’s SO good and well-written and I get so excited every time you update. It has the mystery, the intrigue, and it’s topped off with the *perfect* Jim and Pam moments and I’m in love. Never stop, lady.
Date: January 06, 2021 12:33 pm Title: Chapter 9
I don't know what I feel exactly about this chapter. It's beautiful. It made me cry. After reading this chapter, I feel an urge to write something good, and at the same time — never touch my keyboard again.
I'm just overwhelmed at the moment, and I'm thankful to you for that. Can't wait to read the continuation!
Date: January 06, 2021 10:14 am Title: Chapter 8
I have a lump in my throat reading this. You wrote their turmoils so well, that it breaks me.
I'm so happy you published the next chapter already, so I don't have to suffer from the unknown for long!
Date: January 05, 2021 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 9
Reviewing both chapters here.
Having ALL the characters coming into the fray was a damn treat. The various reactions, Dwight's resourcefulness, Michael being Michael, it was just so good. Your writing continues to be exquisite, painting a word picture I can perfectly visualize in my head. And Devon being the driver? Great touch.
SCHRUPERT ALLIANCE. What a fantastic way to get these two wise-asses to work together. They make an awesome pair and it'll be great seeing them do more for solving the mystery.
I'm not really comfortable writing or discussing explicit sexual content, but I will say the passage was extremely well-written, and a true demonstration of their love. And hell yeah to the Fancy Bees! She's earned her happiness.
I have a new guess. Not Toby (too obvious) nor Michael (quite a reach on my part)... but JIM. Why? Because of these two sentences:
"She was part of one of the most defining moments of his life, if not the very most. He’d think of her every day until his very last one."
These two sentences, while innocuous enough, imply that JAM somehow won't end up together in this. Now one could think of Pam since it was explicitly written, but I can't help but believe her. She's so meek and only now is she speaking her mind. But Jim? Throughout this entire story, Pam has taken over every facet of his life. He cannot focus on the story because of her. And he wants nothing more than to provide for her. How would he do that? Make it big in journalism. How would he do *that*? By publishing a story so big it'll rocket-launch his career. And murder SELLS, especially with a group of people who both had ties to and/or despised the victim. Why doesn't he speak to Pam? Guilt. Why is he so shaken by Todd's body? Guilt. Hell, maybe *he* may have been the one to trap them there, to begin with! And Roy? Well, he's a GONER.
As much as JAM is an enthralling representation of love (hence this site's existence), love can make people do downright crazy things. And if my suspicions are correct, this story will crescendo into probably one of the MOST DOWNER ENDINGS I've ever read on this site.
Good Lord, I'm not a patient person, and this is messing with me in the best way. Hopefully, a resolution comes sooner rather than later. Well done!
Date: January 05, 2021 10:34 pm Title: Chapter 9
So while I love a lot (everything) about this story; my absolute favorite moment is in this chapter and it has everything to do with Jim being all “oh I’m so manly, I don’t want to hurt/ruin you” and Pam literally digging her heels in and telling him to get on with it already.
That’s just... I love it, this whole story, and especially This Pam so much. Even if she’s probably maybe kind of definitely a murderer.
Date: January 05, 2021 10:04 pm Title: Chapter 9
That was one of the most exquisite sex scenes I've ever read on this site. I mean, just everything about it was perfect. The mood lighting, their desire for each other, the way they yield and push each other. Perfect, simply simply perfect.
Jim's letting Pam in now. I'm hopeful that means she's clear of suspicion, but let's face it as of right now the only one we know for 100% sure that didn't do it, is Jim.
Still with detective Dwight on one side and the Pam on the other side, seems like a good team to have to start unravel all of this.
By the way, did I mention how good that sex scene was? I just wanted to be clear. Par excellance. Damn I wish I still had some jellybeans to give this chapter.
Date: January 05, 2021 09:06 pm Title: Chapter 9
I love this moment of them reaching for each other at the same time. Also: "They looked so large against her delicate features and he was worried for a minute that she was breakable. That the intensity of how he felt would break her. That if she didn’t share in that intensity, it would break him." Wow.
I love the big speech and the big level-up in character from Pam here. This has been a shaking experience for her, and she's reacting accordingly.
I thought it was a good call to work some references to the sexual standards of the time into this very hot sex scene - this means something very different than it would for 2007 Jim and Pam, who had, you know, legal access to some things and were expected to have done other things.
Also, again: this is a great development in a love story set during a murder investigation. But this is also exactly what Pam would do in this situation if she WAS the murderer - seduce the investigator and then join the investigation. I've still got my eye on that Beesly character.
Date: January 05, 2021 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 8
And it all hits the fan. Very interesting way to get it so that they're all stuck at the house and unable to contact the authorities. I'm sure it was Packer's original intent to do as was described. Cut everyone off from their base of support.
The reactions of everyone seems very much in keeping. Excellent job with getting a lot of reactions for the initial news. Especially the shell sock Pam must feel.
I'm right there with Jim in the boat. You did a great job with all those descriptions. Likewise the team-up with Dwight. That could prove most interesting. Dwight's interesting brand of logic with this Jim's sense of ferreting out a story.
Then there at the end. Pam just barging into his room. Right in the middle of all his conflicting thoughts. And then what do you do? The 27 Seconds! Superb just superb. Even better that he lets he in and they lay together.
Date: January 05, 2021 08:22 pm Title: Chapter 9
You know what, in my hierarchy of needs, Jim and Pam getting it in on may just be the entire base of the pyramid.
“It made him feel as though something was squeezing his heart inside his chest and turned his stomach into a thousand sparking fireworks.” Oh. Oh. You want me dead, is that was this is? You have succeeded.
“That if she didn’t share in that intensity, it would break him.” Hard same. I too will be broken.
“forgotten that there was that knot in the thread that tied him to Pam” Girl. I am constantly in awe of how good your writing is.
I stand by my first sentence. This chapter was so, so good!
Date: January 05, 2021 06:59 pm Title: Chapter 9
Two chapters in one day? And you give us their first time together?! You truly spoil us, BT. Im so so so so glad that "fancy new Beesly" is making an appearance, deciding to ask for what she wants and going after it. Beautiful chapter, I loved it as always!!
Date: January 05, 2021 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 8
This was an amazing chapter! Especially because you made Pam the main suspect. Brilliant!
Date: January 05, 2021 06:37 pm Title: Chapter 8
"although now that I’m looking at you it is clear that you lack the upper body strength to successfully strangle a man of Todd Packer’s size" hmmm must not be Jack Ryan Jim then huh? Shame.
Now that we've got that out of the way--I am 1000% HERE FOR JIM AND DWIGHT COLD CASE FILES. YES. YES. YES. PLEASE.
Pam? A murderer? Damn what a plot twist that would be if he was the one to put her behind bars at the end. I mean, I wouldn't hate it.
Date: January 05, 2021 06:18 pm Title: Chapter 7
Oh. Oh wow. How do you take something so utterly sad and make it poetic? My heartstrings. They are being PLAYED so ELEGANTLY.
I love though how strong you have made Pam in this entire saga. She's a working woman, doing whatever she can for her family, standing up to the wicked men in her life.
(kissing Jim first)
We LOVE a good strong female lead.
"He would have walked on broken glass or hot coals --"
See here's the thing. You are so delicately and artfully plucking items from the show and weaving them like little easter eggs. This was so beautiful.
Face. Down. In. The. Lake.
Have I mentioned how friggen invested I am in the MURDER MYSTERY of this?
Date: January 05, 2021 06:01 pm Title: Chapter 6
Listen. The fact that you can take a world of characters from a television show about an office and plop them into Savannah, Georgia in the 40s and make them so *in character* but so *its own world* baffles me (not really, because you are amazing).
Literally. Like I know that Jim is Jim and Kevin is Kevin and Creed is Creed but also, they're in their own world? Is this making sense?? Maybe I'm just crazy.
Anyway, you are a masterful world creator and I'm so invested in the *murder plot* that I forgot that this was a Jam story until, ya know, she just *snuck into his room in the middle of the night and asked to be held.*
Date: January 05, 2021 04:39 pm Title: Chapter 8
Okay, but Dwight rushing to Angela is making me feel things & maybe I’m just a Dwangela shipper at heart.
“resonated in Jim’s mind the way that a gunshot would, loud and brash and ricocheting off of everything else” BT, your writing is brilliant. I can never say it enough.
“face to blue-tinged face with death” Girl. This. Utter brilliance.
“As had most of Jim’s plans for the week, and likely the plans for the rest of Jim’s life.” Oh cool. That’s chill. Super chill. We’re all fine here.
“He also felt sure that she was guilty of murder.” Nope. Don’t like that. What I do like is how wonderfully you’ve written it. Jim’s warring thoughts about the scoop of a lifetime v. his newfound devotion to Pam. Ugh. It’s so good.
Date: January 05, 2021 04:06 pm Title: Chapter 8
First of all, I agree with DJC, we need a series of Dwight and Jim, bickering detectives. That was so perfectly done. Exactly how difficult Dwight would be in that situation.
This chapter had a lot of big scenes and I could totally imagine all of them thanks to your descriptions.
I love that Jim and Pam are sleeping together without really talking about it. They're just there to comfort each other which is so beautiful.
Date: January 05, 2021 02:36 pm Title: Chapter 8
Okay, first things first: I absolutely love the idea of Dwight and Jim, bickering detectives. That should be an entire new series on its own. Just Dwight and Jim, forced to work together to solve murders in different eras while Jim finds different ways to fall in love with Pam.¬†
Also, I love that you made this a classic locked room mystery - complete with getting rid of the horses coming back to back to bite them.
The scene of them learning the news was well done. Roy's reactions to everything in this chapter make feel very suspicious, but he seems like too obvious a¬†candidate to be the murderer. (It has to be the person you medium suspect, after all... although it would be an interesting twist if Roy killed Packer for sexually assaulting Pam.) Of course Meredith's first instinct is to grab reaction Michael's reaction is pitch perfect. I'm also going to go out on a limb and say if Meredith or Stanley had murdered him they probably wouldn't be talking about how Packer got murdered because he was an asshole.
I'm also really glad you gave Jim this moment of doubt about Pam - in another project, those suspicions could easily be valid. I thought it was a good choice to see him make the connection that she was the last person to see Packer alive and not immediately go into savior mode.
"As had most of Jim’s plans for the week, and likely the plans for the rest of Jim’s life. He felt inexorably linked to her now. Every day from now on would be marked as ‘after’ and all the days that had preceded it ‘before.’ She was part of one of the most defining moments of his life, if not the very most. He’d think of her every day until his very last one." This is breath-taking.
Date: January 05, 2021 01:07 pm Title: Chapter 8
I KNEW IT. I knew Jim would think Pam was guilty. I guess that was probably a given but I dont care lol. But I really don't think she did it. If she did, good on you, BT. You fooled me. But geez, I really have no idea who did it. I feel like the most obvious are Creed and Toby, and then I really don't think Jim or Pam did it. I don't think Dwight did it either, but he's higher on my sus list than Jim and Pam. I need the next chapter asap as possible please.