Date: January 12, 2021 11:13 am Title: Chapter 1
I utterly loved your attention to detail in describing Jim's formal dress. It reminded me of several hunt balls I attended. Most Regency styled gowns have a loop sewn into the hem so the lady can manage the skirt whilst dancing.
A quick reverse during a Viennese waltz can also leave one breathless.
This was outstanding.
Author's Response: Thanks Once. I like diving into detail so I'm glad the effort worked for you. I did not know that about Regency gowns. As I've told others, the reason I went with Regency is because I figured I could describe the dress easier than the Colonial era (I think) gown TSwift wears in the music video.
A fun waltz dancing with Jim. I'd think that would leave most women breathless regardless of the steps.
Glad you liked it.
Date: January 12, 2021 01:07 am Title: Chapter 1
OMG Warrior. This was just fabulous. So sweet and just - the best word I could come up with was "smoooshy". I love the idea of Penny and Larissa in cahoots, I love the fact this was several thousand words; and by the end I was a pile of pathetically mushy goo. All the good things!
Author's Response: Thanks grc! That's a new way someone has described something of mine. I like it. Smoooshy. Penny and Larissa being in cahoots is one of the best things ever. Who better to give Jim and Pam the kick in the pants they need than their siblings? Glad you liked it.
Date: January 11, 2021 07:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Fabiola Amoris. Love story. Well this certainly lived up to its name.
And who knew you were a secret Swiftie.
Right from the start I was swept into your fairy tale with such rich descriptions of her dress and the scene (thinking a cinderella palace).
Nice sneaky way to bring in Larissa or L or Elle. And by the way, wow these 2 have some pretty smart sisters not just cause they go to Columbia but because they somehow figured out how and when to bring our Romeo and Juliet back together.
To see Jim "work" to earn his father-in-laws respect so he could have his blessing was probably the most romantic thing - even more than dressing like Prince Charming.
Oh and how is it you know about Bourne Mansion and I don't?
I forgive you for posting as I was walking out door this mornin as I enjoyed my evening reading.
Me being the sentimental sap I am, I've always kind of liked this song. Glad you liked all the descriptions.
I was quite pleased with myself when I thought up the Elle=L idea. After all Larissa is a Halpert and thus is probably a prankser. Add to that an Ivy Leage education and eh voila! A sneaky plan to get them together.
They both got a bit of a kick in the pants. Pam to really get over her apathy, Jim to get over his laziness.
At first this was going to be set at the Plaza Hotel. The Grand Ballroom there is stunning. But there's no balcony that I saw easily leading to looking over Central Park, so I had to look elsewhere. I think I did a google search for New York area wedding venues balcony and after some digging found the Bourne Mansion and it fit perfectly.
Glad you had something nice to come home to.
Date: January 11, 2021 10:13 am Title: Chapter 1
The TSwift lyrics were a welcome surprise. Even knowing how the song goes, all the twists still got to me. I love how Jim was about ready to vault over the railing, it gave me a chuckle and also warmed my heart a bit. It’s a love story but so very Jam. Loved this.
Author's Response: Thanks EosinY. This is my favorte Taylor Swift song so it was a ton of fun to work in all the lyrics. Jumping Jim might not have ended well. Good thing Pam's there to look out for him. Really glad you liked this one and thank you for the review.
Date: January 11, 2021 09:58 am Title: Chapter 1
I loved this so much! I neeeeeed to see a picture of John dressed like this ASAP as possible.
Jim’s attempts to *ahem* calm himself down after Pam kisses him was probably my favorite part. Hilarious and cute.
The whole thing was clever, so cute, and very well written, as always!! Great job!
Author's Response: Jim's outfit is directly lifted from the music video for this song. Nice to know you think I did the outfit justice for Jim.
Those calming down banter moments were some of my favorites to write too. Always a lot of fun to have Jim and Pam bounce off each other like that.
Glad you enjoyed it so much. Thanks for reading.
Date: January 11, 2021 09:56 am Title: Chapter 1
When I started to read, my first thought was, 'Ugh, Danny, no, he's the worst!'
My next was 'Regency? Regency? Did I read it correctly? Regency?!'
And then it was a little blurry.
Well, no, I'm exaggerating here a little, I'm just very excited about the Regency era (heck, I'm even going to include a Regency piece into my currently writing chapter!).
I'm going to write my impressions immediately as I'm reading, I hope you won't mind.
'walk through fire' what a cute nod to the canon!
Elle... Ella... Cinderella? Just thinking aloud...
Is her brother the one I'm thinking about?..
YES! Oh, yes!
Excuse me, I need to fan myself at the hero's appearance.
Okay, I'm good now. Continue.
'The lavish mansion turned into the belly of some scaly beast, drawn into the world from the dusty pages of mythology to swallow her whole.' I like this description so much!
And then... okay, here I am, a melted puddle of goo, type this. Their meeting is melodramatic and so, so sweet!
“Why Sir James, whatever do you mean? Surely a gentleman such as yourself has the constitution to maintain decorum whilst around a lady.” oh, I laugh aloud at this part! It's so cool, and so in style!
“Dwight Schrute in a dress.” And this one too!
Oh my gosh, William is amazing! I like that he doesn't immediately find Jim nice and tries to protect Pam (even if she doesn't need that).
And their discussion about that life isn't a fairy-tale... bringing us back to reality, but in the best possible way.
And the ending is beautiful. Sweet and beautiful and everything between.
Thank you so much for writing this love story and for making my evening so bright!
This review made me laugh several times. I'm just tickled you picked up on so many of the details. Yup she's wearing a regency gown. Mainly because I couldn't really place the time period of the dress TSwift wears in the music video and a Regency dress seemed easier to describe anyway.
I do love me a dramatic entrance. That one was fun.
The decent to the depths followed by the raising to the light and Jim was a fun thing to put in for me too. Then they lapse back into banter but now they can kick it up a notch. If Dwight in a dress isn't an instant boner killer, I don't know what is.
Yes, the do live in the real world, not their fantasy at the ball. But they come through for each other. I loved writing that.
Really glad you liked this one and thank you so much for an epic review.
Date: January 11, 2021 09:03 am Title: Chapter 1
Warrior this was so cute! The fact that it's based off of a TSwift song, with another TSwift song referenced in the car only makes it better. I loved the idea of calling Larissa "Elle" only to reveal that one of Jim's nicknames for her is "L" that was genius. I loved that they finally got their acts together and decided they wanted to be together. Mr. Beesly certainly did throw a wrench in their plans, but her sneaking out onto the roof to meet him was adorable. And then the proposal surprised me, but I loved it so much!! Ugh, this was so good! I loved it!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much Aly! I figured I'd give another hint of the reference for this story and also since I don't write explicit sex scene I figured a good way to make up for that would give you another TSwift song in here. Glad you caught it. Really glad you picked up on everything you did. It was a lot of fun to write and I'm exstatic it's been so well recieved.
Date: January 11, 2021 08:27 am Title: Chapter 1
This was incredibly sweet and just a perfect story to start this week out with.
The imagery throughout it was spectacular and really brought it all to life.
Of course Jim can waltz. Of course.
And Pam acting like a teenager and Juliet was the greatest event to witness.
Thanks beth. I had a lot of fun with one so I'm glad you liked it so much. Though it was actually Jim who had varations of Juliet's lines there.
"Pam, Pam, why is always Pam?" "Romeo, Romeo, wherefore art thou, Romeo?" and the other one Pam pointed out of course. I couldn't resist.
Figured eveyone could use a pick me up and/or a good thing to start their week with.
Date: January 11, 2021 07:48 am Title: Chapter 1
Whelp, I’m not going to lie to you. I was not expecting another Taylor Swift tribute when I clicked on this. I am highly amused.
You did well at the beginning here writing a Pam who is very much out of her comfort zone in a summer where she’s not really *living* in her comfort zone. She looks great, but she feels graceless and out of sorts, and her date isn’t helping much. You also really clearly established Danny as maybe just a little too smooth and too committed to working an angle for Pam… and of course he reacts to her dorky dancing like he maybe doesn’t want to be associated with it. Nice enough, maybe, but not Pam’s sort of guy.
The Elle = L twist was clever. And it explains both why Penny was so eager to get her to this party and why she didn’t tell her her research partner was coming.
The Bourne Mansion party was very well described. It was easy to visualize them in this lush setting.
I enjoyed Pam and Jim being so affected by each other’s touch – a good mixture of romantic and sexy and then humorous. Pam teasing him afterwards was hilarious. So was them joking about prom and then being interrupted by her dad is hilarious. Not a great introduction for Jim and his future father-in-law. You can see both some legitimate anger for his daughter and some irritation at the role Jim’s played in what must have been a frustrating summer ofr him too, and some classic reversion to their old parent-child dynamics here. Far too real.
And this “love story” finishes with a quite nice proposal. Well done with this!
Author's Response: Thank you. It was a lot of fun figuring out where to put lines from the song in with everything. I was really trying to go for exactly that at the start. Pam just isn't sure of herself. Then has her moment of panic but everything she really wants is still waiting for her. Glad you liked all the teasing too. Figured might as well get them back to banter.
Glad you liked it.