Date: January 13, 2021 09:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
It's interesting seeing them dealing with jealousy, and where it's rooted - this idea of Jim feeling embarrassed that the guy doesn't see him as her boyfriend reflexively feels very much about their history and about how much time he's spent with HER seeing him as not her boyfriend.
You planted some really good lines in this! "She’ll have to settle for holding his hand on the center console of his three-year-old sedan as the breeze flows through the windows instead of wrapping her arms around him and letting her hair fly behind her as it’s illuminated by the streetlights" is a really vivid image. And "She’s Princess Leia, Audrey Hepburn, and both versions of Sandy from Grease all wrapped up into one" feels just perfectly Jim.
Date: January 13, 2021 08:25 am Title: Chapter 1
TPB, this was great.
"Motorcycle Waiter Dude" brilliant. Great way to describe that guy, but also to set this story along.
The "She’s Princess Leia, Audrey Hepburn, and both versions of Sandy from Grease all wrapped up into one." had me ROLLING. I love those descriptions of her from Jim's POV. She's his leading lady, makes me swoon.
“I can’t believe I don’t have to fight off a pack of motorcycles every day.” Oh Jim.
“You better be taking off your clothes while you’re waiting,” Fancy New Beesly is thriving and well. I love it.
This was great, TPB!
Date: January 13, 2021 08:04 am Title: Chapter 1
“From here it’s a dance, except this time, swaying is dancing. It’s dancing without formalities or precision or anything other than maintaining tempo. They make up their own effortless steps and lyrics to the music until they find what they need, and they let that carry them up into the endless night sky.“
You. Kill. Me.
I loved this SO MUCH, TPB! You have such a way with words. Beautiful, sweet, sexy. Perfection!
Date: January 13, 2021 07:29 am Title: Chapter 1
This is really cute and sexy. Kind of a fun thing to imagine that Jim would still want to stake his territory. Only he goes for the more sublte approach rather than some big show of testosterone. The easy glance to the bartender on the way out is probably a lot harder of a hit than any punch to the jaw. Seems to work for Pam too. It's nice to feel appriciated, but she knows their good together.
They both clearly show that to each other when they get back ot Jim's place. Really sensual scene there that shows just how right they are for each other. Great job.
Date: January 13, 2021 05:36 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so awesome!! I absolutely loved this! The way that Jim gets a teeny bit jealous and Pam is there to reassure him is incredibly sweet and makes this fic just all kinds of perfect and fluffy. I love the tiny bit of angst at the beginning. Even if you don't, ily for it, haha!
Thank you for the birthday fic!! A million jellybeans for you!!
Date: January 13, 2021 12:43 am Title: Chapter 1
Your phrases are wonderful.
"Motorcycle Waiter Dude" and "intertwine like ivy on a trellis" made me laugh.
"Princess Leia, Audrey Hepburn, and both versions of Sandy from Grease" and "little dancey feeling in her stomach" are inventive.
"all the time in every world in every solar system" and others are lyrical.
I'm glad you added in lots of Pam sass, particularly the last line.
Jim has always given me the impression that he is slightly insecure even though he is self aware. Your first few paragraphs bring that out well.
Date: January 13, 2021 12:17 am Title: Chapter 1
TPB. I never knew I needed to see what happened after Local Ad until right now. Possessive Jim is one of my favorite Jims, I wish we got to see more of him. Ugh. He owns my heart. Calling the bartender "Motorcycle Waiter Dude" made me laugh every time.
But mostly I need to compliment your use of metaphors in this fic. There were so many and all of them were just beautiful. This was amazing, truly.