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Reviewer: tinydundie Signed [Report This]
Date: January 10, 2022 06:36 pm Title: Best Laid Plans of Mice and Salesmen

I love how tuned in your Jim is to Pam's disappointment. It's very sweet. You're totally right btw, it's eerie how closely our headcanons aligned on this one!

*By morning all he’d come up with was to cover the beam on the underside of her mouse to keep it from working, hoping she’d call him over for help before she flipped it over to investigate why. The cause of its malfunction would be the small note he’d have taped there that would read, From the minute I met you I knew we clicked. Marry me, Pam.*

OMG okay that's cute but not enough. Good instincts, Jim.

*He knew before then he was in love but it was in that moment that he could taste eternity with her, know their souls would be tied to each other forevermore. It was there in the sky, in her touch, in the way she looked away from the horizon and into his eyes, the gold of the heavens reflected in hers. There were few words spoken that morning, but there didn’t need to be. *

Wow, this is beautiful!

*“Jim, I’ll be honest. I was upset. It was super romantic sitting watching fireworks with you, real ones this time and it had me thinking how symbolic the moment would be if only you would have...”

Jim looked down at his plate. It was exactly the reason he’d paid Phyllis to get those fireworks. He’d had a whole speech prepared about all the moments they’d shared right there in the office that led them to that instance. Freakin’ Andy.*

Freakin' Andy is right. The parallels between what that proposal would have been and their first "date" are too much for my heart to handle. Although I can't complain because the real proposal is my all time fave Jam moment ever, so...

Excited to see what's next!

Author's Response:

You went on a reading binge - but I'm so glad - thanks for all the great review, starting with this one.

 Yes, I often feel like we see things very similarly when I read your stuff...reaffirming and fun to have that similar viewpoint.

I thought so too, save it for a Dwight prank - although they (Jim and Dwight) take a bit longer to click.

Awwh thanks. Yeah I was deep in my Gold story stage around this time - I tend to let my stories bleed into one another. 

Freaking ANDY -yeah it would have been...but yeah I enjoyed the proposal at the gas station as well.

Thanks again - ever so much. 

 

 

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20, 2021 12:36 pm Title: Best Laid Plans of Mice and Salesmen

*sigh* Poor Jim.

I thought the two alternate proposals were very creative, and definitely would have met the context of an ass-kicking within the Gold-verse. Good job building on the world you've built here. (Poor Beth! Missed out on her points!) And it adds some good context to Jim's casual revelation that he and Pam had an honest conversation about delaying the engagement if he swung and missed a few more times after the Goodbye Toby mishap.

I love Jim's sympathy for Dwight here. I knows what it's like to be in those shoes. (And also was amused that Jim is that aware of Dwight's moods that he kind of picked up on *something* of the Dwight-Angela affair). It's always been my personal headcanon that Jim spent a fair amount of time that summer pranking Andy that we didn't see, so I'm happy to get a better sense of his irritation here.

(For the record, I think the click proposal, while not ass-kicking, would have been charming in its way, and I hope Jim used it for another romantic moment. And I *loved* the way the IT guy line came up!)

Author's Response:

I like that term - Gold-verse. There really is so much gold symbolism within the show that it really isn't just mine, but I will take it as a name for the extended world I created for them. 
Small point - the sunrise was part of the canon-divergent story but I still used it - that part was still feasible within a canon world.

You know how I like to extend upon the things mentioned or revealed in show with little back-story or further mention. This was how I saw that conversation coming to light. They knew where they were going, it was just a matter of when they would get there.

Jim and Dwight - they can deny their brotherly love but it is there, we see that also through the series. Of course he would be pissed at Andy for what it was doing to Andy too. Yes I agree with your headcanon too and Andy deserved it, and he could lay off Dwight during his heartache (even if he seemed to be getting over it faster than expected).

Glad you liked the mouse proposal - which was my way of working back to the chapter title (originally was going to be simply "Of Mice and Salesman" but wasn't sure that would be as clear). 

Thanks as always and for always seeing the little things.

Reviewer: grc73 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19, 2021 10:32 pm Title: Best Laid Plans of Mice and Salesmen

“As the sun painted the sky with metallic specs of copper and fire and cast its radiance over the landscape in the distance, he felt something shift within him. He knew before then he was in love but it was in that moment that he could taste eternity with her, know their souls would be tied to each other forevermore.”

Absolutely beautiful, Max. I loved that description but I also love how you filled in the blanks of post- that non-proposal. Absolutely fits with canon and it feels so natural. Poor Beth though, she must have been really thrown!

Author's Response:

You know the reference that was from - and I almost thought I wouldn't be able to describe it differently than I had before - especially within this story, which I felt was a little more lighthearted than the original. I'm really pleased you felt it too.

Yeah, we knew they must have discussed waiting and I had to imagine not only that but Pam must have just about figured it out, that he had been on the verge of asking. But I also felt after that she would be expecting it even more which would lesson the magic and element of surprise. Hard as it might of been for her to tell him to wait - I figured she might.

I really wanted to share the few other ways I thought were fun, if a bit corny, but isn't that Jim? But because this is a canon-complaint story I had to present them as more ways he didn't get to propose.

Poor Beth, I think more than it being about the win she was excited to see her favorite couple get engaged in her presence and as we know now she won't. 

Thanks for your review - always makes my day...and your story recommendation  - I enjoyed that one too and felt very in tune with that writer. 

 

 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19, 2021 07:43 pm Title: Best Laid Plans of Mice and Salesmen

Freakin' Andy indeed. Gotta feel for Jim here. He's ready, he's had the ring for months only to be stifled at every turn. Of course we know the real proposal more than kicks her ass, but still it would have been fun here too. Beth is very quick on the uptake. Love that about her character. Really good look into Jim's mindset here. He's a prankster yes, but he's also not cruel. So he's not the kind of guy to stomp over Andy or really take a dig at Dwight. Good for you Jim.

Always fun getting an update for this one.

Author's Response:

I really felt for Jim in this part of the series. I was fuming at Andy. But Jim handled it so well and without having to have gone through anger management. 

So we know they had discussed it afterwards and got to a place where they thought they should wait - this was me filling in the blanks. Plus coming up with a few other proposal ideas.

In a way it was nice that they could celebrate her getting in to Pratt as it's own thing.

Beth, always fun to include her in her small ways. 

Thanks as always for sharing your thoughts. 

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