1 [Report This]Date: March 26, 2021 11:34 pm Title: Chapter 3
Ha! Dwight binding them together in every universe. This feels like a very fun early-JAM version of Money in the offing. And the Zillow description is very, VERY Dwight.
Author's Response: Thank you! I just love making Dwight look silly in the ways that Dwight makes himself look silly ;)
1 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2021 01:31 pm Title: Chapter 3
I was pretty much laughing through all of Pam's musings/increasing horror about Dwight, but this bit in particular really got me:
'It’s a case of someone who is deeply, deeply wrong about what Zillow is.
Like, fundamentally, deeply misunderstanding.
Because Dwight Kurt Schrute (she wonders which of the two men occasionally visible in the photos on the site he is, and decides it really does not matter because they’re equally distressing as options) is not trying to rent out his beet farm on Zillow to anyone who wants to live there.
He’s trying to use Zillow to find hotel guests.'
This feels very Dwight. Also, the homemade milk.
But, it did result in Jim coming out from behind the counter! I'm really enjoying how you've written flustered Pam, it's both very her and very relatable. I'm loving all of this, basically!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I hope you continue to like it as we keep visiting the shop! This chapter came really easily; here's hoping the rest does too...
1 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2021 01:06 pm Title: Chapter 3
Before reading this chapter, I have no idea what Zillow is. Now I know more!
(okay, technically speaking, it was mentioned before too, but I didn't pay attention then).
And oh, I love this version of 'your desk mate Dwight'! As well as I love Pam's reaction and thoughts (and 'even if she hasn't known him very long, she can read that loud and clear' - just awwwww!).
I'm curious, are you planning to include Jim's POWs too? I wonder what his thoughts were about their lovely visitor...
Author's Response: Ah! I always wonder how widely known my references will be, but since this is easily googled I figured it was fair play ;). Thank you! I will probably be bringing Jim POV in at some point, but we'll get a lot of Pam to set it up first.
1 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2021 08:54 pm Title: Chapter 3
This chapter had me grinning from ear to ear from start to finish. Pam's wonder/amazement/incredulousness was on fine display. That Dwight put the farm on Zillow seems like such a Dwight move. Try something unexpected that works in his mind. However it just reads as slightly crazy to any other rational person.
Oh Pam, look at you go starting to fall for Jim. That's all just so adorable. Seems like Jim needs zero excuses to get closer to her either. Delightful.
You're going to make me run out of jellybeans early again aren't you?
Author's Response: Thank you! I mean, I always try to run you out of jellybeans as fast as you run me out when I review yours ;). I'm glad you liked this chapter! This was one that just came easily.