Date: June 14, 2021 01:40 pm Title: Chapter 15
Their banter is this chapter is so good, and so cute: as is Jim finally looking at Pam properly and her reaction to him (in fact to everything in this chapter, I love that she keeps getting lost in noticing things about him). And Jim guesses her major! And the Dwizzy(?) in the background is excellent. Ooh Izzy...
Author's Response: Yay! I got the banter right! And yes, Pam losing herself in observing Jim is one point of this fic: so often canon gives us the opposite so this seemed important.
Date: May 20, 2021 02:41 am Title: Chapter 15
Wonderful chapter! And it left me craving for more and more!!
Also, I want to point at three moments that made me especially excited:
- 'You can do this, Pamela,' — that's so cute and sweet and innocent;
- the whole rock-God-Dwight joke (!!!)
- aaaaand this line 'if you were a creative writer you'd spend more time beating your head against a wall,' — I have no idea about this major, but I feel this so very much.
Thank you for this chapter, and looking forward to the next one :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really appreciate detailed reviews that point out good bits like this one does, because it lets me know what to include more of going forward ;).
Date: May 19, 2021 07:15 am Title: Chapter 15
This is just 100% absolutly delightful. Also bonus points to me this time around. I read it nice and comfy in my chair while sipping coffee and putting off mowing the lawn. Thus no strange looks across the ambulance cab from my partner or odd looks across the room from my wife due to all the mad cackeling this chapter caused me. I don't know what the score is at this point, but I really hope the game of "Comfect makes someone look at warrior side-eyed due to laugter" never ends.
I digress. You already know my love of your more academic prose in your fics and this is right up there with if not the best of them. Mainly because of the blend of academic prose with flirty JAM banter that is so wonderful to read. Add in all the thoughts of Pam wanting to just lean in and kiss him, or vault the counter and pin him against the wall and it's just perfection.
The line about Pam getting drunk off Long Island Iced Tea. Was that inspired by an episode of The Big Bang Theory where such an incident happens to Sheldon? Though this time around it's a little more ominous what with Pam's refelection of who she was with at the time and the path that could have taken. Well done Pam for a moment of clarity there.
Then of course the mini-cliffhanger with Jim guessing her major and Izzy bursting into the fray. I've got a feeling Pam would have internally melted into a pile of mush at Jim saying "my dear Pam," like that. Now however that pile of mush might also be buried under a deep layer of emabarresment due to Izzy. Though I also think Jim is spot on in his assessement. Like I've said before, Jim pays attention to Pam. So he can connect most of the dots into what makes her tick. I really hope I still have a jellybean to give this chapter because it was a true delight to read.
Author's Response:
Dammit, warrior4, I thought we had a deal! I write this stuff and you read it IN PUBLIC where I can EMBARRASS YOU.
Just kidding.
Seriously, thanks for always noticing the nerdy asides; they're some of the stuff I like writing most, and it's really great to have someone else catch them consistently. The Long Island Iced Tea is based on I think a Simpsons episode? I seem to recall Marge getting smashed on them at one point.
Date: May 18, 2021 05:10 pm Title: Chapter 15
First, I appreciate Pam's respect for the basic principle of not hitting on service workers while they're on the clock. And Pam and Jim finding more ways to bond over mocking Dwight. He really does play a crucial role in their love story. And their banter about their various majors is cute. But I've got to say, the detail in here I really liked was the reworking of the Chili's incident into a different kind of wakeup call for Pam. It rides the line of believable and genuinely kind of sinister for Roy, and it's a lovely parallel with Pam's new awareness of Jim.
Isabel is such chaotic energy, I love it.
Sorry about the shift key... that sounds less than fun.
Author's Response: Thank you! It's important to me to make clear, as many coffeeshop AUs do not, that you should not hit on your barista in any way while they are on the clock or otherwise might feel that responding to your hitting-on negatively would impact their job. But it's important that they have the connection anyway--and so here's Izzy to make that clear. The shift key is working again! So hopefully that's gonna keep being the case...