Date: June 14, 2021 02:07 pm Title: Chapter 19
That is a strong tea selection, well done Jim. I'm fully with Pam on the green tea here. (And aww to her thinking it tastes better than anything she's had just because he's made it for her). I really love your version of Jim through Pam's eyes, and the idea that she finds him doing things more attractive than just being pretty - that entire paragraph about her thinking his real beauty is in the joy in his eyes and his movements and his smile is so lovely. I'm also loving that they're both continuing to be very dorky and very cute, with Pam burning her mouth on the tea. This was a such a great chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I write Pam falling in love the way by assuming sh d always looking further into Jim's soul than she expects to.
Date: June 05, 2021 03:05 am Title: Chapter 19
What a fantastic chapter! And with so much tea in it!!!
But! The tea didn't distract me from noticing things I'd like to comment on with excessive use of exclamation marks too. Like, this quote:
'watching him do things was more interesting than just watching him be pretty,' - I can't stress enough how much I love this line!!!!
Or her desire to paint him — oh, I hope so much she'll have an opportunity to do that!
Also, green tea. I can relate here to her willingness to like something (even if this something doesn't want to cooperate). Also, ouch. I like this little touch with her burnt — sometimes something very desirable might be a little too soon ;)
Thank you so much!! I hope to see soon how she tries other blends too :)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! We're really leaning into the Bigelow teas right now for some reason I can't really explain, but I'm not going to stop ;)
And I'm really glad you're noticing these little bits! She will probably end up painting him--this story may end up pretty long though, so not sure when!
Date: June 05, 2021 12:34 am Title: Chapter 19
PAM GOT HER TEA!
First, I love your quasi-Marxist Jim calling out the colonialism of Plantation Mint. And I really appreciate Pam being able to see this gesture for what it is. This moment of her just looking at him because she knows she can? That's good stuff.
Ah, she is not smooth. I've been there with too hot tea, Pam. But she IS inspired, which feels like something she maybe needs in this moment.
Author's Response: TEA! I'm having a lot of fun with Marxist!Jim, so I just couldn't resist...
Date: June 04, 2021 08:42 pm Title: Chapter 19
Just wonderful. I really like the fact that now that there is tea and confirmation that Jim is more than customer service interested in her, she takes a few moments to really take him in. It's almost like she's seeing him for the first time. That her mind goes right to artistic areas shows the positive impact he has on her. Just by her really looking at him, he's bringing out the best in her. Loved it.
Of course the delightful counterpoint is her almost burning herself with the hot tea. Sorry to say another point for me this time as I'm safely at home along and thus no one around to hear me laugh at your great line. Don't worry I'm sure you'll be able to make up the difference at some point.
So if feels like the start of something big here and I am 100% on board for it. Can't wait for the next update.
Author's Response: Danke schoen! I had a lot of fun with that one--and I guess it's on me for updating at a time I knew you weren't at work ;)