Date: August 22, 2021 03:36 pm Title: Look how they shine for you.
You really captured the bittersweetness of the early JAM relationship. How they can act as a perfect couple and for all intents and purposes, are, save for the fact Pam is still with Roy. You can feel Jim longing to be with her. How he steps up be with her rather than abandon her. I'm sure years later Pam will look back on this night and wonder to herself why she didn't see things sooner. Great writing to bring that all out. It was fun but still had those angsty undertones. Nice job.
Date: August 22, 2021 12:24 pm Title: Look how they shine for you.
This was sweetness wrapped in melancholy and I ate it up. Each small interaction is a tiny treasure to Jim and you capture that feeling beautifully & marry it to the song. Pam, psst, wake up.
Date: August 22, 2021 12:20 pm Title: Look how they shine for you.
This was very sweet, ugh poor Jim. I love these moments when he can actually show her he’s such a better match for her.
“Me too,” he said, leaving out the fact that his reason for loving it was sitting right next to him.*
Love this line. This song is super jammy.
This was great. Thanks for writing it!
Author's Response: Your welcome! thank you for the kind review!