Date: April 23, 2022 10:55 pm Title: Chapter 12. Bruises and the Zombie Apocalypse
I absolutely love how their families treat Roy finally setting a date as if it were the night he proposed! It's hilarious, but so fitting for Roy!
Date: January 04, 2022 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 12. Bruises and the Zombie Apocalypse
As ever, Max, a super read. My favourite sentence right at the end gave me a good laugh, so on point as a Dwightism:
"...Dwight interrupted to tell him he was crazy and added that Pam’s bag was grossly understocked. That without a 10lb container of salt, water purification tablets, a portable solar panel, machete and the most important item, a shotgun, she would never survive a zombie apocalypse."
- bloody brilliant!
Author's Response:
Glad there are still new bits for you to read with each chapter.
Yeah, the bit with Dwight and the go-bags at end helped me with a little time travel hole but also let me have a little fun here.
Love that you enjoyed.
Thanks always for your reviews.
Date: December 30, 2021 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 12. Bruises and the Zombie Apocalypse
Thanks for the shoutout ;)
"It had to be coincidence the time of day was almost exact to the moment as the call that had come from Aunt Janet in her other reality, the one she no longer would get at Dunder Mifflin because Pam showed up at her door instead." Interesting to see these little ripples and how they might affect things.
I love that you have highlighted subtly that Pam is very much in love with the *idea* of getting married and not really the man and she just projects that excitement on him even though he fails her spectacularly time and time again.
"There was room only for one cloud that night, the one she’d been floating on since Roy proposed the date." Great visual!
Ah, Roy. Being as Roy as ever. The bruise metaphor was perfect.
“Just wait, you’ll be sorry when I’m the only one in town prepared for Armageddon. I promise you Schrute Farm will be the only safe haven and you two will not be invited.” Exactly, Dwight. Exactly. :)
Great chapter!
Author's Response:
Lots of ripples to come - it's what makes writing time travel challenging but fun.
Yeah, got to imagine its like that...she invested the time, she's finally getting her wedding and at this point she's more about that than the groom.
Yeah, I had a little aha moment with the bruise -worked well as a time travel thing (in that it confused her where she was in time) but the symbolism for her relationship.
Oh as this bit with the go-bags came to life - my mind went immediately to you and the story!!! See that's the impact or your story - it's like Armageddon canon. You nailed it with Dwight originally, and I just borrowed it here so thanks!
And love how you wrote directly to him in this review!!!!!!
Thanks for making my smile even wider on reading this!
Date: December 29, 2021 11:38 am Title: Chapter 12. Bruises and the Zombie Apocalypse
You know, time travel really is stressful! I'm glad Pam's trying to stick a few steps ahead. Although I can't help but worry what it means that Aunt Janet isn't going to call Original!Pam now... that feels like a loose end that could come back to bite them...
This was a very effective use of time travel here to make a point about Pam's emotional journey. Whether she's living it twice or not, she knows the future with Roy, and it's pretty boring and often unpleasant. I also thought you did well with the ski trip - that seems spot on for how little Roy would tolerate wedding planning getting in the way of literally anything else he wants to do, and the way in which "compromise" with them almost always just means Pam loses.
Jim being a significant presence in this one place she has to herself in their home was a nice touch.
Loved the shout-out to Virtus, and also appreciate that you ended up using it to solve a pretty considerable problem for Pam.
Looking forward to getting more of her adventure here!
Author's Response:
Is it a loose end or a red herring?- Only time will tell.
Yea, that girl is always having to make excuses to herself for him. He really does suck. Too bad she has better vision now but still isn't quite seeing it.
Had to drop in a little Jim some way -and then getting to do it again and have both him and Dwight help solve an issue she didn't know she'd be having - and get to hint at V by way of it - well I'll admit it was fun to write.
Thanks as always for the review!
Date: December 29, 2021 09:58 am Title: Chapter 12. Bruises and the Zombie Apocalypse
*On other nights when his drunkenness interfered with his abilities, he would either try for way too long to get it to work, which was more exhausting than pleasurable for Pam, or on occasion become angry and place the blame on her, through slurred speech and hurtful words assert she wasn’t sexy enough to arouse him properly.*
This made me feel so sad for Pam, but somehow I can totally buy it. I hate thinking she would suffer through this kind of shit by choice but as we know, S2 Pam is a different animal than the later versions. (Seriously though, Pam, DTMFA)
*Curious the nature of a bruise, how something so unsightly and so clearly unnatural caused so little pain until one pushed upon it. *
This took my breath away, honestly. I immediately compared it to her relationship with Roy before you even explained it, but everything detailing the bruise was just beautifully written.
Author's Response:
Okay I kind love that you say DTMFA cause like she totally should but as you also pointed out she's still season 2 Pam who's still adjusting to her better eyesight and not ready to make any sudden moves.
I was very excited to write the bruise bit which came about as I inspected one of my own (that I had no recollection of how it got there) and made the observation that became the analogy.
Glad you liked it so much.
I was expecting you to comment on the clothing bit, but I guess you already did in the past review. You had very good instincts and I had already been mulling over how to deal with getting Pam dressed for 2 weeks. I spend way to much time thinking about the issues that time traveling can create. (oh and Michael, I felt like between the fact he wears suits and he's kind of clueless anyway, he wouldn't notice missing clothes quite in the same way.
As always- thanks for the review and your kind words.
Date: December 28, 2021 07:20 pm Title: Chapter 12. Bruises and the Zombie Apocalypse
Loved the reference to Virtus there. Just wanted to get that out of the way at the off.
So back to fog filled confused mind Pam. The analogy of the bruise was very apt I think. It's something that's wrong, but it only hurts if you prod at it and you can very easily hide it and pretend nothing is wrong. That is unless it's deep tissue bruise in which case it's a lot harder to conceal what with all the limping and such. Great job coming up with that comparison.
Yet again it's thought's of Jim that are her source of comfort while thoughts of Roy are a source of irritation. There's a pattern there Pam, might want to think about it some more. It could turn out to be the proverbial ice pack that bruise of yours needs.
Nice job with all this. I applaud that you're sticking with it considering all the complexities of time travel you're facing here. Really well done. Also I caught that quick reference to Christophers as well. Please tell me Roy has balked every time Pam suggested they go there and thus it's a Jim and Pam only place. Please?
Author's Response:
I love being able to drop in little bits like that - as that little section came about it was immediately what I thought and I figured I knew others would too so why not lean into it.
I was pretty fascinated with a recent bruise that i not only had but had no idea where it came from - that little thought process became the bruise analogy and I'm glad you liked it.
You caught the Christopher's - don't worry just one more flaw of Roy's was he never took her there...so yes, only a Jim and Pam place.
Thanks as always for your review!
1 [Report This]Date: December 28, 2021 12:52 pm Title: Chapter 12. Bruises and the Zombie Apocalypse
That didn’t take long! Great chapter and love the part about gaslighting herself. Bleugh Roy not being able to ‘perform’, he’s gotta go!!
Author's Response:
I've put way to much thought into the repercussions of time travel and what could go wrong but it is what is making writing this story a trip!
Yeah Roy - I agree he's gotta go - just Pam isn't quite there yet.
Thank you again for your review.