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Reviewer: emxgoldstars Signed [Report This]
Date: April 25, 2022 06:55 pm Title: Chapter 18 - The Art of Love

UGH I loved this one! It makes me curious into Gabby's condition a little bit as well. I have a sneaky feeling about it, but I'll keep that to myself.

I LOVE THIS PAM. I'm so happy she's kind of opening herself up to see that she deserves better than Roy. Because SHE DOES. I'm eager to see what her "something new" is!

Author's Response: Baby steps, remember.

Reviewer: boredhswf Signed [Report This]
Date: April 16, 2022 08:48 am Title: Chapter 18 - The Art of Love

"Or could it be more than that?"

Nice.

I still feel there is a breadcrumb trail of hints you are leaving us by spending time on each of these scenes and I can't wait to see where you take us with them. In this chapter, there are even more clues: the doctor's appointment, the white couch, the artwork, and her shift from impressionism. It may be only me and you may have no intention of doing that but it is fun to try and predict.

I'm curious to see if Michael has been behaving himself!

Author's Response:

Oh there are a ton of breadcrumbs, Gretel.

It will be a while, but all will be explained. Meanwhile I hope fun the speculation is fun.

Thanks for all the reviews. 

Reviewer: grc73 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 22, 2022 07:37 am Title: Chapter 18 - The Art of Love

Not an Elvis fan myself but a good chapter.

Author's Response:

There's got to be one Elvis song you like.

But thank you, thank you very much. 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21, 2022 12:55 am Title: Chapter 18 - The Art of Love

Feels like a good continuation of some of the other thoughts Pam has had going on. At least she's able to admit to herself that there is more than one man in her life now. She still seems to be clinging onto the life she thinks she wants with Roy, but more and more the thought of Jim is becoming stronger.

"But if it's no longer what you want, why would you keep it?" Loved that Pam is the one to pose that question and also Gabby's response. It seems like just the kind of reply one gives in order to help someone further along their journey of figuring things out for themselves. Try to beat someone over the head with the truth and you run the risk of them putting up shields and denying everything. Guide them to finding out the truth for themself and they'll be more likely to accept it.

Also I'll be you had a ton of fun going back to research some of your old NYC haunts. I really got the feeling that it's so detailed due to the fact you've been there which adds a great element to this section.

Author's Response:

yes, I loved writing the city section as I felt like I was there again, and have taken that same route up Madison to come back down 5th. Rode many an elevator up to a doctor or office and to my home everyday and its always a little awkward in the small shared space.

Small indulgence of this chapter but got some things accomplished too which you seem to have noticed.

Thanks always for the review.

 

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed [Report This]
Date: March 20, 2022 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 18 - The Art of Love

Remind me to tell you a funny story about St. Patrick's sometime. But I love that Pam is in full on "Jim is Kevin Bacon" mode.

"The cost of New York parking was more per hour than what she'd paid for the entire outfit she had on" - is it a critique of New York? Or of Pam? But I'm glad she's at least acknowledging that there always seems to be plenty of money for the things that *Roy* wants.

Hmmmm. Paying some attention to the couple that got between them in the elevator. Maybe they're just rude... but it *is* a time travel story, and that is an odd moment...

I *feel* the awkwardness of having drifted off and coming back in to realize you've missed something important. I'm with you, Pam.

The sense that Pam is mainly nice to Angela because she doesn't like the idea of anyone disliking her is a good connection. As are the many things pulling on her here.

Love a little growth moment from Pam to close this one out.

Ah, well. Probably better for your privacy anyways to confuse the alogorithim.

Author's Response:

Do tell! Always enjoy a good story.

As for the cost of parking, well Pam is wearing mostly clothes from her go-bag but.... the line was part hyperbole and part error on my part (the way it reads her whole outfit would have to cost about $25 and so I edited the line - thanks for bringing it to my attention). But yeah, the point is Pam is cost-conscious while saving for a wedding and Roy spends like he's Rockefeller but only on things that he wants.

Pam seems to be getting closer to seeing things more clearly, doesn't she? But she's still teetering. And who knows what lies ahead to set her one way or another. Stay tuned.

Thanks as always. 

Reviewer: tinydundie Signed [Report This]
Date: March 20, 2022 08:06 am Title: Chapter 18 - The Art of Love

Love the way you tied in St. James with her thoughts about another James...

*Pam knew how uncomfortable it made her when she thought someone didn’t like her. It was why she continued to be nice to Angela, not because she cared so much to have her as a friend but because she needed Angela to not dislike her, even if Pam didn’t even like her and hated feeling judged by her condescending looks and snarky comments.*

This is a good read on Pam's attitude towards Angela.

*Who knew the Jets and Sharks were not just athletic teams*

I enjoy this mention because the fact that Jim knows a West Side Story reference is such an odd detail, nice to see it included.

Pam's introspection is really interesting, I also believe she was more aware of her own feelings for Jim than she let on to anyone (sometimes including herself) so getting to see her thought process here feels really on point, the way she might weigh it all in her mind. Also, love that you're leaning heavily into the gambling references i.e. CN... people are so focused on the risk Jim took they don't tend to think about what a gamble it would be for Pam as well.

*Or could it be more than that?*

We see you. ;)

Pam having a bit of an epiphany about Roy and the white couch is surprising, I'm truly curious as to where exactly her newfound revelations will lead her (in a way that stays canon compliant!)

I get what you're doing with her deciding not to go see the impressionist paintings but I have to admit it sort of broke my heart a little.

Still enjoying the heck out of this tale but I'm eager to get to that climax!

Author's Response:

I loved the scene where Jim's snapping behind Michael during the fight - and love that you got the little nod to it.

Not sure she quite consciously equated the white couch and Roy - but glad you did.

Thanks for being a fan of this fic - and always great to hear your thoughts 

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