Date: October 31, 2021 04:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Really intriguing start. Can't wait to see where you go with this.
1 [Report This]Date: September 12, 2021 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
I have a lot of questions.
1. How dare you?
2. What happens when it snows in Dunder Mifflin?
3. *whispers* What were the impulsive decisions?
4. Does Jim find out what it takes to make Pam say his name ten times?
What I’m saying is - I cannot wait to see where you take us with this one.
I love the phrasing of “the midday prison of those last few hours of work” and “bland goop topped with runny grease.”
Ed. Truck.
“There, on this old stone bench, in the quiet of the garden that has kept so many of my secrets, I take a long moment and just let myself one small luxury. I breathe.” When I tell you I literally paused. Re-read it. Took the deepest of breaths. And read it again. Perfection.
“wyd” and “…in a moment of real tenderness between us, he offered to bring a pizza and beer on his way over.” may be the best summation of Roy ever?
“Just serve Jim and his mom at their weekly lunch at noon, skip over to Roy’s for some afternoon delight, and then bang the sausage guy into the night.” Can I nominate you for a mid-season Dundie?
D, I’m really obsessed already. I always love the worlds you build with these characters, and this is clearly no exception. So happy you posted.
1 [Report This]Date: September 12, 2021 09:02 am Title: Chapter 1
OK what can I say about this except, as usual I am in awe. Your writing is so engaging and draws me completely into the story but MTT I love that you weave new plots and worlds for these characters to interact in. That is the beauty of the stories you write.
As a Karen fan (not to be with Jim, but as a person, I never saw what she did wrong, except maybe the self harm she inflicted on herself), I love how she is Pam's ally and not enemy when you write her.
Now it is too bad the fanfic thing doesn't pay since you would do very well.
Looking forward to more of this one.
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2021 03:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love EVERYTHING about this. That’s it. That’s all the coherency I have to put into a review. I’m so excited to see where this goes.
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2021 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am liking how it begun, curious where it is going. Looking forward to what’s coming:)
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2021 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am liking how it begun, curious where it is going. Looking forward to what’s coming:)
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2021 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh my God, how do you do it?? How do you build this full world, so different from Canon and yet so much the same? Amazing.
I should know better than to get attached, after you've broken me with the unfinished HMOH, but here I am, on the edge of my seat to learn if Jim is one of the four impulsive decisions Pam's ever made.
There are so many perfect lines in this chapter, like this paragraph:
"Thursdays. Interesting. Where does that leave Alex?” Oh, she’s in full detective mode now. I can practically picture how Kelly looks in her own head. Pen poised to pad, connecting all the dots of my love life as though she’s solving this week’s murder. I’m certain she’s also wearing a fantastic Burberry trench and a hat in this image of herself. In all fairness, she can really pull off hats."
Alex???! We have Alex here?
So good, I can't wait for more.
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2021 07:50 am Title: Chapter 1
Ma’am this is perfection. Absolute perfection. Everyone’s voice and job is spot on and I love the hints at a backstory between Jim and Pam and the little side pieces Pam has. I cannot want to see where you take this. I know I am gonna absolutely devour it.
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2021 07:43 am Title: Chapter 1
I find myself ridiculously hooked already which is no small feat. So many questions...what are the 4 impulsive things Pam has done, Ryan & Jim are friends WTH, did Roy have to zoom out or in when taking the pic he sent to Pam, what kind of films does Halpert Productions make, so many questions.
Cannot wait to read more.
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2021 06:25 am Title: Chapter 1
I’m coming back with more later, obviously, but how dare you?
Also, more specifically—this part?
“ “Wow, what could I have done that caused you to say my name ten times?”
I don’t even try to hide the scoff that escapes in response, holding the lock on our eyes as though breaking our staredown would cause the world to swallow me whole. Jim’s face is so neutral, so passive that maybe I’m the one whose mind is in the gutter.”
I will *never ever* stop thinking about this, thanks. 😘
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2021 01:01 am Title: Chapter 1
So this is a new take on things to be sure. I love the passion Pam has for her job and for her town. You can feel how much she wants to get people on her side.
Clearly there's history between her and Jim. Their father's knew each other. She says they used to be best friends. Now their not. Also seems like Pam left for a while to pursue culinary school. Kind of makes me wonder if the rift between her and Jim is the reason she came back and also for her rather interesting social life. Remains to be seen for sure.
Time to buckle up for another wild ride provided by you.