Date: November 23, 2022 12:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Like many, I've noticed there's a special way that Pam lights up whenever she is around Jim. Using the analogy of cold and warmth was good. I liked the repeated motif of cold and the use of metaphor throughout this piece. It would be good to break down some sentences so that the rhythm is varied, and you want to use "hadn't", rather than "hasn't", in "...if she was being honest, she hadn't felt anything but cold..." I look forward to seeing what other character-based pieces you write, as this is a great start.
Author's Response: I am so very glad that you have enjoyed my small story. I know it is not the best, but I was encouraged to try my part in writing by my good friend InRomanovWeTrust.
Date: November 19, 2022 02:57 am Title: Chapter 1
Welcome to MTT and congrats on your first fic!
I'm a big fan of angst so this was a great read.
I really like your writing style and hope to see more from you :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words, my dear friend! If it wasn’t for all the encouragement I have gotten from you and the others I do not know that I would have ever tried to do something such as this. I am glad I did.
Date: November 15, 2022 12:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Congrats on your first fic!
All sorts of angsty and you did a great job.
Hope we see more from you!
I will try to break out of my shell a little more, I’m just naturally shy and not too confident when taking up new artistic endeavors.
I thank you, and the rest of the small group, for welcoming me with such open arms. It has been such a pleasure to get to know each of you and be encouraged by you all. The best group of “Moms and Mom Lovers” out there by far!
I thank you for your review and your friendship!
Date: November 14, 2022 01:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
Congrats on your first story here! Quite nice prose and use of analogy.
Author's Response: I thank you kindly for your review! I am glad that you could get some enjoyment from my little story. I was very nervous to post it actually, but a friend insisted and I am glad I did.
Date: November 14, 2022 01:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
THIS IS SUCH A GOOD STORY JUST LIKE I KNEW IT WOULD BE MY FRIEND!!!!
You’ve smashed it out of the park with this one. You had nothing to be worried about. :) I’m glad you actually got the courage to post it. I’m so happy for you. 💗
Author's Response: I am so very glad that you, especially, have enjoyed this story as it wouldn’t be here if not for you, my dear friend! You have been so welcoming to me and I could not be more grateful! It’s nice to speak to someone who is also eager to speak to me in my mother language!
Date: November 14, 2022 01:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was REALLY good! A deep, painful dive into s3 Pam's feelings. Welcome to MTT, you started your journey well with this one!
Author's Response: I thank you kindly for your review and I am most joyed that you found it pleasing to you! I was quite nervous to even post, but I was encouraged to do so and I am glad I did.