Date: December 15, 2006 05:24 pm Title: Written
How the hell did I miss this gem a month ago? Wonderfully evocative. I do have a bit of trouble picturing Jim as a writer; it somehow doesn't seem to fit him. I suspect he would make mixtapes and she would draw, but hey, whatever. In any case, the metaphor works out to a fine conclusion, which I thoroughly enjoyed. Loved your use of language in lines like:
the wind blows away his smell.
That kind of sensory/sensual detail just makes a short piece like this.
What he used to live for is now killing him slowly.
Killer line. No pun intended.
The bedside clock is a countdown to the unknown
Thanks for this.
Date: November 14, 2006 11:46 am Title: Written
I love this. I love the image of their cold, imperfect memories being incinerated by the reality of being together again. Much like our fanfic falters in the light of the show itself, ha! Seriously, though, the imagery and the tone here compliment each other wonderfully. Very nice.
Date: November 13, 2006 06:02 am Title: Written
Wow, really beautifully written, and a unique idea. Good job.
Date: November 12, 2006 03:32 pm Title: Written
Oh wow, that was one of the most beautiful things I've ever read! I cried the entire time I read it! So perfect!
Date: November 12, 2006 03:31 pm Title: Written
Just so you know, this is AMAZING
Date: November 12, 2006 12:05 pm Title: Written
Really beautiful imagery. Wonderful work:)