10 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 06:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like your description of Ryan's character; this was a great first fic! I'm looking forward to more!
10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
Such a great line - "But he doesn’t know quite how big until the next morning, when he tears the 13th off the calendar and finds himself staring at the little pink hearts"
10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 06:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, Ryan. I think you captured him really well, and added a layer of uncertainty and depth to him that is hinted at on the show--but not made explicit. I could hear Kelly in my head and was cringing right along with Ryan towards the end--loved it :)
Date: November 21, 2006 05:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
"He doesn’t know what people see in him, but he’s pretty sure it’s not there."
Wow. Dead-on Ryan. Well done.
8 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 04:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
"I mean, you probably don’t care about scientology, because I mean, sometimes *I* don’t even care about scientology..." made me giggle - what an awkward moment.
8 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 04:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
It’s not true, and it’s less true every second he kisses her.
Fantastic line there. Great first fic, chunkyrice! It encapsulates their early experience really well, I think.
10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 04:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hee! Fine job, chunkyrice13.
Date: November 21, 2006 03:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooh, I like this take on how Ryan got involved with Kelly ~~ very interesting glimpse into the blank canvas that is Ryan Howard....