10 [Report This]Date: December 02, 2006 08:26 am Title: Chapter 1
Let me see if I can guess these (which are all fabulous by the way!)
Michael/Jan
Ryan/Kelly
Angela/Dwight
Karen/Jim
Jim/Pam :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 27, 2006 01:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Thanks for this story. It made me think, and that's wonderful! Great job--
10 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 10:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Amaaaazing! [/Kelly]
That was absolutely adorable. At first it took me a few seconds to realize from whose point of view it was from but once I got it was awesome. I love clever fics from a different perspective and yours knocked it out of the park! Great job!
10 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aww! Toby was awesome! I loved how you could subtley tell who each couple was! Very good!
10 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved them all, but especially liked this line from the Jim/Karen section - "But when he comes in she catches him staring and it’s not at her and then she knows why." And I totally loved the last line of the Jim/Pam section. Great job!!
9 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 01:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
These are so clever! I think you really captured how each couple would handle that potentially very awkward registration process - I really love Michael jumping the gun like that, and then later rationalizing it like it was partially his decision not to do so. And the Dwight/Angela is so like them: that's that, and there's no further need to discuss. Awesome!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really glad you thought the characterization worked. I had fun imagining what each couple's experience would have been like.
10 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 12:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
You know, I just re-read these, and only now did it dawn on me that these weren't all about Jim and Pam (finally looked at your character list.) Makes more sense and boy, do I feel stupid. Oh well. Still really liked it...and the qualities I mentioned last review still come through. I guess this is what happens when you review half-awake!
Author's Response: Aw, no worries, Colette. I once said two and two made five when I was really tired, so I have you beat. So glad you liked it! And glad you liked the last line.
8 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 12:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Coming clean about their relationship. I like it.
9 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awesome work, volunteerduty! I read them once, then went to your story data to see who the characters were, and read them again, enlightened. Very nice :)
Author's Response: Hee, maybe I should have found a way to be clearer on who the characters were in each section, but I liked the idea of only using Toby's name in the whole thing. Oh, well. Thanks for the kind words!
10 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 10:54 am Title: Chapter 1
I love these! You did a terrific job! I think my favorite line is this one:
Toby meets his startled gaze and shrugs. “I’ve had it filled out since November.”
If you hadn't said this was your first fanfic, I would have never thought it was.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! That line is the idea that popped into my head and made me write the whole thing.
Date: November 25, 2006 09:34 am Title: Chapter 1
Aw, sweet. I like the Dwight/Angela section. :)
7 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 08:24 am Title: Chapter 1
Lovely story, perfect ending! Toby's great.
10 [Report This]Date: November 25, 2006 04:50 am Title: Chapter 1
I liked the progression of this - you captured the excitement, insecurity and advance/retreat of what a new relationship would be like for these two. Registering is a great device to highlight that. You even had me worried whether they'd keep on in the 4th part and then relieved in the final one. Great last line too. Well done!