Date: January 07, 2007 05:35 pm Title: Chapter 7
For a minute there I thought you ended this at the last chapter. Whew! And you have done the supply closet proud, girl7! I kind of love that their first time isn't all rainbows and ice cream, but a messy, wrinkled clothing, almost getting caught in an almost public place kind of thing.
One question though, where are Pam's panties? A girl needs to know these things....
Date: January 07, 2007 04:22 pm Title: Chapter 6
The Pam/Roy interchange just kills me. Great job addressing that. And you can use the Phyllis/BVVR wedding as much as you want -- it is rich with FF possibilities. And if Pam & Jim are headed for a supply closet, you can just keep on writing -- don't even try to wrap this up before you're done with them *ahem*
10 [Report This]Date: January 07, 2007 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 6
if i could kill you for leaving the story there, and get away with it? i probably would. which makes me sound like a deranged, murderous psycho, but you know. this story is just the perfect mix of angst and out-of-control hotness and kdsjghdf. i'm so excited to see where it goes (and if it goes in the direction of really hot smut, you won't hear me complaining.)
Date: January 07, 2007 03:47 pm Title: Chapter 3
WOW...I'm just catching up on this story...SO GOOD!!! I have never read them having it out like this and Ilove it. They both need to get it all of their chests man! Bring it on!
10 [Report This]Date: January 07, 2007 03:36 pm Title: Chapter 6
I love all of your writing. Ireally enjoy long stories where the characters, and the plots, can really be fleshed out. The only constructive critisicm I have is about the argument earlier in the story. Pam and Jim didn't seem so out of control. It actually read more like a petty squable. They repeated each other so much they didn't even get to say anything that they regretted later. There was no name-calling, no exaggerating. Of course, Jim was more loose than Pam; I can't readily imagine a situation where both of them would loose it enough to have a real good screaming match.
I do like your writing. I like the fact that it reads like a good book and that you don't try to be all flowery and poetic and stuff. I like reading a good, strong, long story and that's what you provide.
Date: January 07, 2007 03:29 pm Title: Chapter 6
MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!!!!! Oh man I am counting the minutes till the next installment!
Date: January 07, 2007 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 6
I have butterflies in my tummy. Loved it.
Date: January 07, 2007 08:35 am Title: Chapter 5
As always, nice introspection here. Great use of Creed to cut the tension a bit - good voice on his lines!
Date: January 06, 2007 11:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
How do you do that? There it was all serious, then Hello! It's Creed! Let's have a laugh oh haha, SERIOUS again. Totally brought me out of then back into the moment just like the office (a great example is the last scene of The Alliance only then the formula is happy-sad-happy. Mad writing skills!
I am dying, literally dying for Jim and Pam to just TALK! Just say IT! This is a physical pain. Please write like the wind!
Date: January 06, 2007 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 5
Dude, you just and it just and darn it
Loved every word. I could see every line every painful moment that they each had to go through. Great writing.
Date: January 06, 2007 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
That was the best use of Creed in a fic EVER.
Date: January 06, 2007 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 5
Ah! You manage to raise the bar with every chapter girl. And the fact that you actually made me laugh out loud in the midst of a really intense moment ("I don't even know what shepard's pie is")?? Just. Wonderful. I'll be sad to see this one go, but I can't wait to read the last chapter!
10 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2007 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 5
A very good transition, but of course I'm still stuck wondering how she could have walked out Saturday night! ;-D
I have faith in the essential wonderfulness of this story!!!! Looking forward to Pam making it all up to him. Poor Jim. :-)
Date: January 06, 2007 06:59 pm Title: Chapter 5
Holy smokes, girl7 -- this chapter should come with a warning label -- I mean, it may seem like it's just dialogue-heavy, but this is like pure distilled emotion in the aftermath of the last 2 chapters.
This line sums up the whole thing to me: Angry as they'd both been, they'd edged closer to the truth then than they ever really had. And that's kind of like what last night's episode was like, to me, anyway. The lid coming off of the bottle for Pam, so I'm thinking the 'fizz' inside is going to be coming out soon. Obviously, I cannot freaking wait for the next chapter, but I will be soooo sad to see this story come to an end.
Date: January 06, 2007 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
Shepards Pie? WTF? That was great, just hilarious.
This was such a great chapter. I just love this story, and your writing style seems so different than usual. You do this well. And the other stuff well too. Just, yeah. Good story :)
Date: January 06, 2007 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
Shepards Pie? WTF? That was great, just hilarious.
This was such a great chapter. I just love this story, and your writing style seems so different than usual. You do this well. And the other stuff well too. Just, yeah. Good story :)
Date: January 06, 2007 11:54 am Title: Chapter 4
Yes. He broke up with Karen. Now I hope Pam shows up.
8 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2007 08:57 am Title: Chapter 4
Great Karen voice here.
Funny story: When I read Karen's last line, I said, "Yeah, nice analogy!" then I was all, "Whoa, the Incredible Hulk is totally Jekyll + Hyde!"
OK, maybe only funny to me.
So... if Jim's free, and Pam's free... hmmm... ;)
Date: January 06, 2007 08:22 am Title: Chapter 4
Bye, Karen! I am sure your author's note is about Pam's *ahem* self-exploration, but I personally am more interested in various ways to send Karen packing. Very efficient chapter!
Date: January 06, 2007 08:17 am Title: Chapter 3
This was so hard to read, because there really is so much pain and anger between them now. Really gripping, though. BUt this? But it began to tear at her, first just distracting her and then saddening her before finally infuriating her.
I'm just praying that's how it rolls on the show! We've seen the sadness, now let's get pissy Pam!
9 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2007 08:09 am Title: Chapter 2
but had anyone tried to treat the mark before it became a stain?
No, Pam. No, you didn't. *sigh* What an amazing, evocative line.
And the "I can't" ending? Brutal.
10 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2007 08:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Ouch. Jim's pain is palpable here. He's so desperately determined. Fantastic beginning.
9 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2007 07:16 am Title: Chapter 4
"That was the mask she'd made him wear for so many years." - I loved your use of this line. It just proves that everything's finally in focus for Pam.
Date: January 06, 2007 05:23 am Title: Chapter 1
Okay, just found that picture and all I can say is... niiicccceeee. (/Kevin)
Date: January 05, 2007 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 4
Jekyll and Hyde Jim.
interesting.
Everyone has a darkside. It's wonderful that you're exploring all that.
And to quote another cliche: there's a thin line between love and hate. There really is.
Thanks. Can't wait for OutofControl!Pam.
cheers.
--Lex