Date: January 08, 2007 04:20 pm Title: Crying
Sweet, sweet Toby. I love Pam asking if she can redact her crying spell.
Author's Response: Thank You! I have such a soft spot for Toby.
Date: January 08, 2007 04:15 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
I can so see Andy coming on to Pam like this - or I guess reacting to her rebuffing his smooth moves is more like it.
Author's Response: Heee, he would need to turn it around so he wasn't the one doing the rejecting. Thanks!
Date: January 08, 2007 03:14 pm Title: Tears and Rain
Awww, Bennie. This one is definitely going into my favorites. LOVED it!!!
Author's Response: Awwwww, thank you so much!
Date: January 08, 2007 02:52 pm Title: Crying
I liked the little burst of humour at the end of this very sad chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you...I couldn't leave the whole thing depressing. :)
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 01:44 pm Title: Tears and Rain
New fic category: Top ten heartbreaking endings. That was an inspired fic! Seriously, every character was dead on and the last one was such a killer. I think it is a mark of good writing that you didn't give in and have Jim come out. You made it a good peice without using an obvious plot device (as much as we are all DYING for that particular plot device. maybe a sequel...lol).
Wonderful job, I will definetely be keeping an eye out for your stuff!
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you! Yeah, as much as we all would like Jim to swoop in and dry her tears, it just seemed too...obvious, like you mentioned. :)
Thank you again.
9 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 01:39 pm Title: Tears and Rain
This was such a great collection. While I was hoping the last one would be Jim, I like the way you ended it. That last paragraph KILLED me! So so sad. But you have a great handle on all the characters.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I just couldn't make it Jim...the thought of Roy finding her was too sad to pass up.
7 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 12:35 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
That was so great! I was expecting at least one of those to be Jim or Karen so it was a nice surprise when you didn't include them.
And I'll put another vote in for breaking up the dialogue differently to have each person's words and actions be together instead of having the dialogue of one person right after the action of another. That being said, it's minor compared to the voice and language you used, which were awesome!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll sit down later and look over everything and make some dialogue changes so it's easier to understand. :)
9 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 12:26 pm Title: Crying
Another wonderful chapter. You really have Toby's mannerisms down.
Author's Response: Thank you...I had such a hard time writing his chaper, so it means a lot that you like it!
Date: January 08, 2007 12:24 pm Title: Tears and Rain
This were funny and beautiful and sad and wonderful! I loved this collection!
Author's Response: Thanks, LL!
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 12:23 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
Ew, Andy's so squicky! Perfect job with capturing his voice here. Loved this. *onto the next chapter*
Author's Response: Ha, thank you! Andy really has no boundaries to his creepiness. :)
Date: January 08, 2007 12:07 pm Title: Tracks of My Tears
So Angela
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 08, 2007 12:03 pm Title: Crying
Sweet Toby.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 08, 2007 11:56 am Title: Tears of A Clown
That was so Andy.
Author's Response: Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 10:22 am Title: Tears of A Clown
wow... you should write for the show. cuz seriously, making you alternately switch from crying to laughing is hard. (that's what she said!) but the show nails it, and apparently, so can you! i especially liked that no. 5 kinda hits that it might be jim, but i was really glad that it was roy, because that's so much more realistic.
and the windsheild wipers... wow.. LOVED IT!!
Author's Response:
Wow, seriously, that is SUCH a compliment. I figured it would be much more sad if Roy found her.
Thank you so much for the thoughtful review!
Date: January 08, 2007 09:57 am Title: Tears and Rain
aww. the windshield wipers. best part.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 08, 2007 09:54 am Title: Tears and Rain
WOW.
This is just so sweet and just...amazing. I'm glad that you didn't make Jim one of the ones who found her.
Though, what would have happened if it had been Michael? Or Phyllis? Or Creed!!! *giggles*
Thanks.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I figured it would be too easy to have Jim find her. Ha, maybe I should expand it, and have more people find her. Thank you again for reading!
Date: January 08, 2007 09:38 am Title: Tears of A Clown
What a beautiful job. Very simple, not flowery, not to mention you captured each character so perfectly. Nicely done.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 08, 2007 09:29 am Title: Tears and Rain
Wow. Just wow. You have each one of their voices so perfectly down. I don't even know if I could pick a favorite because they're all so real. (And poor Roy!) I'm very impressed. And sniffing back my own tears.
Author's Response: Awww, thank you! It means so much when I make people cry! (Aaaand that didn't come out right.)
Date: January 08, 2007 08:02 am Title: Tears and Rain
Andy -- a freaking buffoon. Awesome.
Toby -- I can see the hangdog look. Perfect
Kelly -- drama queen -- love her!
Angela -- ice queen, hilarious!
And Roy -- oh you saved the best for last. "It's not about me, is it?" I didn't think this scene could hurt more, but you sure turned up the angst. Wow.
Author's Response: Thank you, lisahoo! I am so glad you liked the Toby part in particular, that section was giving me fits. And I hoped the Roy one would pack that final emotional punch...it made me all depressed just writing it. Thanks. :)
Date: January 08, 2007 07:59 am Title: Tears and Rain
Oh, this is really great. I like the subtle shifts in tone with each person, but that no one can really make Pam feel better, except her. I liked her wanting to tell Kelly everything and get the rumor mill working, but backing off because she feels she doesn't deserve it, and I love her interactions with Toby and Roy.
If a little bit of concrit is OK, I wanted to say that when you do dialogue without tags like "Pam said," it's easier to read if you put action tags like "Angela makes a face" next to that person's dialogue, rather than the other person's, because otherwise it can get a little confusing as to who's saying what.
But that's a minor nit, because I really enjoyed this piece.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much. And I totally appreciate the concrit...the Angela section in particular was rough, I know, in terms of dialogue. (You wouldn't think I'm getting my master's in english, huh?:)) I'll go back later and try to fix it up a bit. But thanks again for the review, they are like crack.